dingo4life

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Have the potential to be good, very rough right now.
Converting gifs to something like wbms is pretty much a must, otherwise in a game like this you will quickly end up with like 2-3 gigs and you probably also need to doublecheck the resolution on your images as some fill more than the screen so you have to scroll to see it all. I also suggest you move the links closer together, not much reason for there to be that much space between them, the less scrolling the better and finally adding a home button would be ideal.
Also a bit confused if the fitness stat even did anything, you may want to set it up to communicate stuff better with a checklist or something.
Not much else to say right now other than keep it up and that should basically be what you need to have a solid foundation.
 

Trasher2018

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Its quite generic and very linear with alot of dead ends (college). There are no choices you can make, you just grind stats to unlock things.

I get the premise, but maybe add the choice how to deal with girls. I have no problem with the slaves, but the GFs ... at least the option to be nice to them would be nice - and add at least some choices.
 

Morkar

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It's not bad as a good prologue starts to start and it looks like an interesting game the scenes are good and I'm looking forward to seeing new content with new characters and slaves also say a tip you should add an option to go directly to home from any part of the map so it would save time and grinding and this game with its approach lends itself to the massive use of deepfakes who would not want to enslave the daughter of a rival gang to gain control of it and that said daughter was for example emmna watson? this game and its approach opens up many possibilities that I hope will be implemented little by little in the future
 

OranosDev

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I posted this and went to bed, didn't expect to see so much feedback (most of which seems very genuine and constructive) - so thank you all!

I'm glad to hear a lot of you liked the game, and even if you didn't I garnered some valuable feedback from most of it.
This will be a bit of a roadmap post, explaining what I want to do with the game going forward and what my design philosophy is. After that I'll try to answer some of the questions I've seen in the thread already.

Design Philosophy
I've done my best to avoid grind, as I myself dislike games that forces the player to do so. This might not be as apparant as I'd hoped since the gains from money and reputation for instance grows exponentially. I'll try to communicate the intended gameplay loop a little bit better in future versions.
I want this game to be about the power fantasy, the story is just a viehicle for the sandbox - which is why it doesn't assert itself more. The games that I personally enjoy are almost instantly satisfying to the player, and have sexual themes attached to almost all long sections of text. That being said, I want the romancing to be a bit more gradual in the future, with scenes that aren't overtly sexual from the getgo. I've tried to test this idea with Luna, so I'd be interested to know what you think of her content in relation to that of the others.

Future Versions
This first version unfortunatly has a lot of dead ends. I tried to put a little bit of content in most locations, but ultimatly the goal of the first version was to lay a stable foundation to which I could add content later. I personally dislike shallow v0.1 drops so I tried to have a depth of content in my first version, rather than put a tiiiiny bit of content in every location. My intention is to make sure all these empty areas have at least something going on in the next releases.
As for the future more generally, I want to stagger releases - with every other being a version that adds new characters, locations etc, and every other being a version that adds more content for existing characters. If you have thoughts on this model I'm interested to hear it!
 

OranosDev

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[...] you also need some iteresting stories with some charachters like let's say uniqe charachters or something like that where u can make them high ranking women of ur harem u can get some ideas right here lol:ROFLMAO::ROFLMAO:
I want some characters to be extra important and have a slower moving relationship. This is what I've tried to do with Luna so far.

No pregnancy tag. Sadfaces. Looks good otherwise. Power trip games are nice but feel as if they have a hole with no pregnancy.
I do actually want to add pregnancy, maybe as an add-on since I know it's not for everyone. However I've been struggling a bit with what the best implementation would be since a pregnancy cycle is much much longer than the scope of the game's timeframe. I'm welcome to suggestions on how best to implement this.

[...]pace changed from nicely paced from the intro to click-n-fap immediately after the intro. Doesn't feel like mc power tripping, abusing or degenerating the girls. Maybe the pace can be bit slower with more stories or training for the girls to have more immersion.
I hear you. I'll try to have more of a slow-moving progression in the future. The reason it's very fast paced in the first version was because I wanted to inject a lot of content, as I myself often find first versions of games having only one or two characters kind of disapointing. I'm curious what you think about Luna - does her relationship move to fast as well? I tried to make her relationship growth a little slower.

None of the preview pics happen in game.
All of them should be in the game. If you're not seeing anyone in particular it might be a formatting error I missed. If you know which ones I'll look into it.

how do i know if the content has ended?
The changelog has most of the info. Some character interactions have a "no more content-msg" show up. If you have exhausted all available interactions with a character, there's probably no more content for her. There should also be some indication in the Hints section of Notes, in game.

Have the potential to be good, very rough right now.
Converting gifs to something like wbms is pretty much a must, otherwise in a game like this you will quickly end up with like 2-3 gigs and you probably also need to doublecheck the resolution on your images as some fill more than the screen so you have to scroll to see it all. I also suggest you move the links closer together, not much reason for there to be that much space between them, the less scrolling the better and finally adding a home button would be ideal.
Also a bit confused if the fitness stat even did anything, you may want to set it up to communicate stuff better with a checklist or something.
Not much else to say right now other than keep it up and that should basically be what you need to have a solid foundation.
Yes, I'm a novice to all this, so there are some growing pains as I learn the software. I hope the finished game will be more slick. I didn't know about the wbms thing - I'll look into it, thanks! I'll also take a second pass on the images to see they're all apropriatly sized. Is there any particular ones that you found were too big?
The spacing of links is probably attributed to my inexperience scripting in twine. I'll try to improve it.
Fitness lets you pick up Mila in the park, as well as the two girls in the nightclub.

[...] you should add an option to go directly to home from any part of the map so it would save time and grinding [...]
I've seen a few people suggest this and I'll try to implement it, or otherwise decrease the number of screens the player has to clock through.

A general piece of feedback that would be good to get from y'all is the length of these relationship arcs. I've seen that a lot of you want to see less instant rewards to increase realism. I want to do this as well, which is what I've tried my hand at with Luna. To the people who expressed this: Is her relationship still too slow-moving, or is the progression of events apropriate?
 

desmosome

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I hate to be that guy, but without having played it yet, the premise sounds like it will be perfect for an incest character or 2. Mainly, some internal power struggle as the old patriarch is dying. Maybe the father's young wife is trying to exert control and push out the MC. Or any multitude of possible scenarios where you have to dominate a landlady/roommate.

Just a thought hehe.
 
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JHorcoc6

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Where do you find Douglas? The game mentions that the MC is supposed to meet him, but I can't find him anywhere.
 

OranosDev

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Where do you find Douglas? The game mentions that the MC is supposed to meet him, but I can't find him anywhere.
Ana tells you he has a drink at Lotus every evening - it's a restaurant in Brighttown.
 

KurosU

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I hear you. I'll try to have more of a slow-moving progression in the future. The reason it's very fast paced in the first version was because I wanted to inject a lot of content, as I myself often find first versions of games having only one or two characters kind of disapointing. I'm curious what you think about Luna - does her relationship move to fast as well? I tried to make her relationship growth a little slower.
Hey thanks for the fast respond.
Yea its too fast more like everything happens instantly. From the dialogue and the hint its like you are giving impression luna is an innocent good younger sister, but in just few clicks she turned into a slut. Like she's already a broken slut from the get-go. A little more pacing, corruption or training, like making her watch mc training the girls or mc just go hardcore and rape her would be great. Just an idea ;)
 

JHorcoc6

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None of the preview pics happen in game.
I saw at least three of them in the game. I saw the video that is fifth from the right in the list of preview pics. Also, the last preview pic is a compilation and I saw two of those in game. They were the pictures for Audrey and Marlene.
 

Buffalo Fred

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I do actually want to add pregnancy, maybe as an add-on since I know it's not for everyone. However I've been struggling a bit with what the best implementation would be since a pregnancy cycle is much much longer than the scope of the game's timeframe. I'm welcome to suggestions on how best to implement this.
Haven't tried your game so don't know if it fits within the lore of it, but you can always have a girl show up already pregnant. Like an ex or one night stand or something. Perhaps have flashbacks to the past for non-pregnant content with her.
 

AM97

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Is it possible to get a 3rd recoomendation ? I got 2 but I need a 3rd for Douglas
 

nazuky

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Hello! I have no test after talking to Mila. after talking to her, two days later I have a "next text" but when I click on it, I only have the button return available.

her's my save if you need further investigation.

anyway, the game looks very promising by now so please take your time and don't try to implement way too complex gameplay because it's always the first step to the end for HTML porn games. Looking forward to play this game
 

OranosDev

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Is it possible to get a 3rd recoomendation ? I got 2 but I need a 3rd for Douglas
Getting 1000 money or 15 rep both triggers a new recommendation.

Hello! I have no test after talking to Mila. after talking to her, two days later I have a "next text" but when I click on it, I only have the button return available.
her's my save if you need further investigation.
anyway, the game looks very promising by now so please take your time and don't try to implement way too complex gameplay because it's always the first step to the end for HTML porn games. Looking forward to play this game
Thank you! Are you talking about the text messages? The notice that tells you whether or not you have a new text isn't working correctly, it's in the changelog. It shouldn't have any impact on gameplay.
 
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nazuky

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Thank you! Are you talking about the text messages? The notice that tells you whether or not you have a new text isn't working correctly, it's in the changelog. It shouldn't have any impact on gameplay.
yes I've kept playing and everything went well but it's kind of confusing to see "new tet" and nothing in it. Nut that aside everything went well
 
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