I agree. She's hot, but the story is a little disappointing for me. Everyone is lying to the MC and it would have been more interesting if the MC was the one pushing for the fun stuff. instead of the characters already being sluts and already cheating/lying from the start.
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Steve Carter
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makeitgobitch
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5 minutes of content...
3 months of waiting
bro this is fail
you need to have a team
3 months of waiting
bro this is fail
you need to have a team
game went weird when the whole book society thing came in this chapter and everyone started talking like they are 18th century scholars.
Definitely too few graphic content added to the story. Especially since everyone has a smartphone these days. The story would then take on more blush colors. And so.... now we see one graphic for a million words. It's as if the game was written in the era of analog cameras and each character sharing their perspective of the story with us had to wait for the photographer to develop the film with the photos...
In the next episode I suggest such a sequence of events... Kira brings a drink to the boss in the office. He is not there and neither is our wife, but the boss's jacket is hanging on the chair and his smartphone is on the desk. Kira checks the photo gallery and uses her smartphone to take evidence for our wife's erotic adventures... after a while the boss returns with our wife, and she puts on lipstick on the doorstep. Kira, startled, says that she brought him his favorite drink. He says that's enough for today. Our wife gladly accepts the drink from Kira, saying that she would like to drink something cold today for a change.
I don't think the wife is necessarily a slut. It seems to me it could also be about doing whatever is necessary with no limits, and trying to protect the bloke from the worst of it but telling bits and pieces. But obviously she could be a slut, too. I don't care as long as she meets the lanky guy and there are pics.. 
The two girls, though. Yeah.
The two girls, though. Yeah.
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it's always kind of the issue with ntr, people just go full on build up takin month if not years to get to any form of action, as if bland narration of ppl daily life is any show of style, just to fail miserably when it comes to narrate an actual scene.
On another note, what's the damn point to choose a phone setup if you write it as a novel? There is so many kind of wrong i don't even know where to start.
Whenever it's the wife or the daughter story, am i the only one bothered that nothing really happen directly between the family members, and it always involve a third character to come and profusely describe?I mean, that can be a thing, but always?
And for people the MC barely know to indulge in an exagerated voyeur kink again always specificaly the same way? Is it supposed to hint at somekind of conspiracy because they all talk alike i must assume they are actually only one person.
So people just come and text the MC a shitton... You know, they're the one supposed to have a life. The MC is the one emprisoned.Shouldn't it be the other way 'round?
Somehow i thought it would be important to the story but the more i read the more i think it's the solution you choose to have the most passive MC ever. Believe it or not but you can make shit actualy goes on behind bar. It can be an edge to your story. Right now it's just there...
And a phone isn't in a long shot only to send and receive messages. It would be nice to use that.
So far not a single thing relevant happened on MC side. Not that what happen in other character life was worth your while anyway..
Yeah so story suck, writting suck, what about art?
Fuck all, and multiple time i was startled that it wasn't even corresponding with the description made of it. Even putting aside my personnal taste, i don't find the art style appealing, it's still... poor.
The more i try these phone VN the more i see the limit of such a thing. Not that the epistolary genre is limiting, only that it recquire a lot more subtelty than the way it's written can possibly provide. Of course you can't build anything worthwhile on the go releasing your story month by month. I guess a writter needs to go back and forth so that things goes on smoothly. Well nobody asked anyone to make a thousand page books worth out of it also
On another note, what's the damn point to choose a phone setup if you write it as a novel? There is so many kind of wrong i don't even know where to start.
Whenever it's the wife or the daughter story, am i the only one bothered that nothing really happen directly between the family members, and it always involve a third character to come and profusely describe?I mean, that can be a thing, but always?
And for people the MC barely know to indulge in an exagerated voyeur kink again always specificaly the same way? Is it supposed to hint at somekind of conspiracy because they all talk alike i must assume they are actually only one person.
So people just come and text the MC a shitton... You know, they're the one supposed to have a life. The MC is the one emprisoned.Shouldn't it be the other way 'round?
Somehow i thought it would be important to the story but the more i read the more i think it's the solution you choose to have the most passive MC ever. Believe it or not but you can make shit actualy goes on behind bar. It can be an edge to your story. Right now it's just there...
And a phone isn't in a long shot only to send and receive messages. It would be nice to use that.
So far not a single thing relevant happened on MC side. Not that what happen in other character life was worth your while anyway..
Yeah so story suck, writting suck, what about art?
Fuck all, and multiple time i was startled that it wasn't even corresponding with the description made of it. Even putting aside my personnal taste, i don't find the art style appealing, it's still... poor.
The more i try these phone VN the more i see the limit of such a thing. Not that the epistolary genre is limiting, only that it recquire a lot more subtelty than the way it's written can possibly provide. Of course you can't build anything worthwhile on the go releasing your story month by month. I guess a writter needs to go back and forth so that things goes on smoothly. Well nobody asked anyone to make a thousand page books worth out of it also
Steve Carter
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This whole game has an underlying weirdness and I'm actually down with it.
BeastMaster59
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Disappointing update, long wait for the release, not many images, short playing time....
Fuffa69
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Shouldn't we have a "phone" or "sexting" tag at this point?
Yeah, when I played previous update I had to return to his patreon to check that poll he did some time ago, if I maybe remembered it incorrectly. But not, there is a one big fucking zero in "text" option, yet he apparently completely disregard it and continue to swarm players with tons of boring text. Seriously, who uses their phone messengers to send that amount of text? Apparently the new update isn't much different, according to the discussion here, so I guess I'm going to skip this one (game, not just the update). Sad.
Steve Carter
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I get the feeling that he's using an AI chatbot, creating a scenario and just running it through multiple times to get the story progression and dialogue. The settings are probably adjusted to get less typical results. I doubt he's even seen Dead Poets Society or knows that movie exists. If he did, I would at least expect an "Oh Captain My Captain" or even a "carpe diem" reference to the player.
Still, you get an acid-trippy "Alice in Wonderland" weirdness vibe which is kinda working for me.
I kind of like it, only thing i dont work is the lack of pics and the wife falling to quickly also her vulgar language, does wifes talk like that? none that i have met.
So there is no choice than to be cuck. Stooped after mc being okay for his wife molested and sexually used by the judge. Good luck on ur game but not for me.
