I wanted to share two more rough spots in the script that I found as I finished my playthrough.
Nyx and Sanjiro are talking about Sanjiro landing near the SAC attack on the base. Nyx says, "And you'll land
closely?" That is a pretty awkward way of saying it in English. Just use 'close', or even better, 'close enough?'
When Major Sheraton and Aria meet, Major Sheraton says, "In
care you forgot, Aria..." should be 'case'.
The quality of the VN remains superb in my mind. Since you guys were just talking about that scene with Sandra, I'll just say YEEEEESSSSSS!