VN Ren'Py Abandoned Psycho Bar Girl [v0.01 Demo] [Johannes89]

[Crazygamer43]

Overview:
You are playing as a middle age Gentlemen who loves to go out. He met this gorgeous young woman (bar lady) which he hook up with but she isn't normal, she is a psycho girl who don't want to share her man, after the one hook up she became obsess with him and bewitched him.​

Thread Updated: 2020-01-07
Release Date: 2020-01-07
Developer: Psycho

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Version: 0.01 Demo
OS: Windows, Mac, Android
Language: English
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[Falcer]

I like it. GOOD JOB

 

[rKnight]

It's nice that some Devs are slowly embracing MATURE SEX,
since most of them reserve the main role to spolied brats MC.

EDIT: on the other hand, Overview is kind mixed up... is someone getting cucked?

 

[johannes89]

This is just a really short story but there are more to the story than there are currently so bewitch plump girls etc more to come map, work, park, home i just launched this to see what people will think give comments what to improve

 

[Mondoblasto]

Overview:
Its about this bar lady who meet up with the MC then she hook up with him having great sex at the bar. Next day he goes back to the bar but with another woman in his arms Bar Lady then get really Furious and hex a spell on the MC so every girl he bring to the bar will turn into something (im not going to spoil the surprise) he just cant figure out what is actually happening then he go back to the bar without any woman and have a great evening with Bar Lady chatting and just be him self next day when he see the ladies he was with they are now back to normal…..

I can't help feeling that Language Arts was not the dev's strongest subject... If the dialogue is anything like this, they're seriously gonna need an editor.

 

[johannes89]

Your correct language art are not on my top list like i said this is to see what people think and where to improve this will help me just get it better thanks for ur honest opinion

 

[johannes89]

That's great! MATURE SEX!
...since most Devs reserve the main role to young brats MC.

Yea my character is not so young same with the bar lady she is also not young but know how to cast a spell next release you will see what i mean by that

 

[moqbull]

The description genuinely made me laugh out loud.

 

[xmilteach]

Thx

 

[ThunderRob]

goodness gracious that was bad..real real bad..i have no other words to spell out my feelings..so i'll let this speak for me

 

[Samken]

Overview:
Its about this bar lady who meet up with the MC then she hook up with him having great sex at the bar. Next day he goes back to the bar but with another woman in his arms Bar Lady then get really Furious and hex a spell on the MC so every girl he bring to the bar will turn into something (im not going to spoil the surprise) he just cant figure out what is actually happening then he go back to the bar without any woman and have a great evening with Bar Lady chatting and just be him self next day when he see the ladies he was with they are now back to normal…..

 

[voyeurkind]

* I already know from the description that the Engrish will be high here. Let's see if the gameplay makes up for it.

* All right! I'm Unknown!

* Yup, that's good Engrish right there.

* Kind of an odd spot to ask for a player name, but whatever.

* Cheap bottles of booze there.

* I know developers love transparent/translucent text boxes, bu they can make the text difficult to read.

* Another single option choice. I have to ask why? It would be just as easy to simply have the MC pay the bartender without our interaction.

* It's spelled 'whiskey' or 'whisky'.

* Elly's shoes look odd.

* We really don't need a label for the Narrator...besides, these are MCs thoughts, right?

* OH, and 'have coitus' sounds weird. It's acceptable grammatically, but 'have sex' or 'fuck' would be much more likely in English.

* I'm not going to speak about the quality of the redners as there are others much better suited. I can see what's going on and that's good enough for me. That being said, the characters and their poses seem really odd and stiff.

* I really hope more options will be added later, as there's no reason for the current ones.

* Oh, there are pictures. No need to describe in detail what's happening with the text. Show, don't tell.

* Hmm, I thought there would be more.

So in it's current form, it's a meet and fuck tpe game.That's not really my thing, so I'll try to take that into account.

I really feel the game needs a lot of work. Better English, probably more work on the renders, some different storytelling choices. The concept as it's described could be interesting, but the demo doesn't really show off that strength. It would have been good if the developer had continued to the next day and the events that really put things in motion.

As it stands right now, I consider this pretty skippable.

 

[Deleted member 997153]

That entire overview should be in a spoiler tag.

 

[AlBetGam]

Here, you seem to be out of these:
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[GodTier]

 

[ArturiousDesign]

The description genuinely made me laugh out loud.

I read it and caught cancer

 

[fsap1]

Next day he goes back to the bar but with another woman in his arms Bar Lady then get really Furious and hex a spell on the MC so every girl he bring to the bar will turn into something

So this is like reverse Shallow Hal?

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

The Overview Sounds like a gypsy curse, or maybe a really Bad plot. No Thanks

 

[SandmansMisery]

Start over this needs a lot of work, This has big bucket of SHIT written all over it.

 

[Dipsode]

The idea may be interesting but the making of this demo seems really sloppy!
Even when you're not skilled in English and Daz, things like "narrarator" or marking "unknow" for each character at the beginning (instead of "man" / "girl", for example), ... It gives me the impression of a quick job and not really tested before being proposed.
Anyway, it could have been good but there's a lot of work to do !!!