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Knocking that guy out at the prom saves the MC from being a stage 5 derp he's still like a stage 4. Every single thing that happens in this story results in endless MC introspection dialog. "But?! I don't understand! What happened? Did I do something wrong? What if this, what if that? Why did she say that? Does she think that..?" A true derp works his magic via endless questions. The question mark is his currency.
I could probably accept this type of thing if the MC was an insecure teenage but he's not. He's a rich 37 year old photographer and business owner who bangs models on the regular. It's not reasonable to see him also presented as an insecure, confused, tentative and fearful derp who finds it impossible to control his own behavior when he sees a pretty face.
Not saying he should be written any different or that other people shouldn't enjoy the character profile. I've said it on other threads but my reaction actually indicates good writing. If an author can provoke an emotional reaction the they are demonstrating a high level of story telling skill. Cheers!
I could probably accept this type of thing if the MC was an insecure teenage but he's not. He's a rich 37 year old photographer and business owner who bangs models on the regular. It's not reasonable to see him also presented as an insecure, confused, tentative and fearful derp who finds it impossible to control his own behavior when he sees a pretty face.
Not saying he should be written any different or that other people shouldn't enjoy the character profile. I've said it on other threads but my reaction actually indicates good writing. If an author can provoke an emotional reaction the they are demonstrating a high level of story telling skill. Cheers!
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Let me be very clear.
Don't try to find any logic or do analysis in this story.
It tried to disguise itself as something serious in the first chapter, but it is a fuck fest through and through.
Everybody loves MC and no matter what MC will get laid.
So, take it for what it is: straight porn. With cute triplets. Nothing more or less. And there is nothing wrong with that once it is accepted it is just a fuckfest.
- Jan 26, 2021
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Nice cherry picking...
They meet in person, they talk on the phone... he is on her path and then at the supermarket he doesn't remember her?
Think for a minute.
The scene above is bugged and shouldn't even play if you're on her path.
Sir Dammed just sucks at coding that's all.
So if he isn't on her path, why would he intervene?
She is a random girl he doesn't know.
He only met her once at the restaurant where he went with Brooke.
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Hey you can have whatever moral standard you like. If I were in a convenience store and someone started to ride down on you I'd step in right away. I don't have to cherry pick I can quote the derpiness all day long. Oh and just to address your comment which doesn't match my experience. Perhaps you missed the comment at the beginning of the scene text but he was talking to Vanessa when the cunts started their bullshit.Nice cherry picking...
They meet in person, they talk on the phone... he is on her path and then at the supermarket he doesn't remember her?
Think for a minute.
The scene above is bugged and shouldn't even play if you're on her path.
Sir Dammed just sucks at coding that's all.
So if he isn't on her path, why would he intervene?
She is a random girl he doesn't know.
He only met her once at the restaurant where he went with Brooke.
(Just before the above quoted scene)
MC: (Hmm.. is that?)
MC: (It's her!)
MC: (That's right, I was planning to call her after she sent me those messages... but things have been pretty hectic, so it slipped my mind. I should go say hi.)
...
MC: Hey, Vanessa.
Vanessa: Hm?
Vanessa: Oh [MC]!
MC: Yea good to see you!
...
MC: So I got your texts. Listen, I've been meaning to call you, but things have been kind of crazy lately.
(bla bla bla planning another date)
So the MC recognized her, started up the conversation with her and is standing right next to her when the bitches start bitching. Considering the guys I know and respect it would take exactly one comment to provoke an intervention. Him.. . twelve comments and nothing. Now I can't speak for how the scene or dialog is supposed go but I didn't do anything weird.
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The scene is definitely supposed to play. There's 5 small variations for it depending on MC's relationship with her and if he is on her relationship or friends path then he calls her after.
As for why he didn't intervene I think he was probably just pretty blindsided. It all happened in seconds, by the time he gets his head on he confronts the cunts.
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- Jan 26, 2021
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Interesting. I'm on her friendship path and at the end she runs away crying. And he doesn't call her. Maybe something is bugged at my end.
And I agree on blindsided... that scene would play very fast IRL. No time to properly react.
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I believe someone pointed this out earlier as a potential bug. I'm not 100% sure on Ren'Py's use of logic but I think that line was supposed to be "not cc7 and not (van_romance or van_friends)".
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We all have different sensibilities, but the MC's inner thoughts kinda suck
- Apr 26, 2020
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I feel like this is true across the board, h game mc inner monolog is generally pretty awful
I think I found a plot hole: there's a line something like "well you're a <last name> aren't you!" - why would the triplets have the MC's last name?? They're the result of a one-night-stand.
- Aug 4, 2022
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In most of the US (at least) mom can give the kids any last name she likes.
You're right, I do see that now in the starting letter from Gracie.
hope they bring back the girl in the lake/cabin scene, the girl is crazy, that was so hot. The game until then was very vanilla (blowjob, vaginal), like it was holding back, than all of the sudden this girl comes and drops a bomb
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maybe is just a crazy girl but with her talk about destiny intrigued me. Hope to see her in the foreseeable future in front of the MC door with a round belly and lots of magic/drama story
Yeah, she's actually the only girl outside of the triplets I had any real interest in. Though perhaps a part of that was the non committal nature of the encounter, allowing you to still 'dedicate' yourself to the triplets alone. Definitely open to seeing more of her though.