VN Ren'Py Radiant [v0.7.1] [RK Studios]

[Ayhsel]

Knocking that guy out at the prom saves the MC from being a stage 5 derp he's still like a stage 4. Every single thing that happens in this story results in endless MC introspection dialog. "But?! I don't understand! What happened? Did I do something wrong? What if this, what if that? Why did she say that? Does she think that..?" A true derp works his magic via endless questions. The question mark is his currency.

I could probably accept this type of thing if the MC was an insecure teenage but he's not. He's a rich 37 year old photographer and business owner who bangs models on the regular. It's not reasonable to see him also presented as an insecure, confused, tentative and fearful derp who finds it impossible to control his own behavior when he sees a pretty face.

Not saying he should be written any different or that other people shouldn't enjoy the character profile. I've said it on other threads but my reaction actually indicates good writing. If an author can provoke an emotional reaction the they are demonstrating a high level of story telling skill. Cheers!

Let me be very clear.
Don't try to find any logic or do analysis in this story.

It tried to disguise itself as something serious in the first chapter, but it is a fuck fest through and through.

Everybody loves MC and no matter what MC will get laid.

So, take it for what it is: straight porn. With cute triplets. Nothing more or less. And there is nothing wrong with that once it is accepted it is just a fuckfest.

 

[bluefkingbeard]

Nice!

 

[Uthuriel]

No Chad questions every one of his decisions with endless introspection. No Chad is gonna stand there while two militant lesbians tear his date apart until she runs away and THEN finally saying something. Even the Single Again MC would have stepped in and he's softer than a dumpling.

[MC sees Vanessa in the convenience store and they are talking]
Girls: It really is! It's her! [Loudly and obnoxiously]
Girl 1: Is that her boyfriend?
Girl 2: No way, there is not a chance in hell she could get a guy like that. Unless he tricked the poor dude.
Girl 1: Hm... maybe not romantically... but we both know she's fucking him
Girls: [both girls laughing]
MC: (What the fuck? Are they talking about Vanessa?) (DERP!)
Girl 2: Yea, true. Or maybe she's a reformed whore. A born-again whore?
Girl 1: Haha! Let's ask her.
Girl 2: Good idea.
Girl 2: *Loudly* Hey, Vulture! Remember me?
Girl 2: Do you still go by that? Or is it just "Homewrecker" now?
Girl 1: *Snickering*
Girl 1: Come talk to us. I need advice on how to hook up with a guy I like...
MC: Vanessa... don't let those two stooges get to you. They're embarrassing themselves, not- (DERP! Yea man don't defend her at all then blame her for being upset! What a hero!)
Vanessa: [MC]... don't...
Vanessa: I... I'm sorry...
Vanessa: I.. I just need to...
Vanessa: [runs crying]
MC: Vanesa wait!
MC: What the fuck just happened?? (Derp! Double derp! Loser!)

12 comments from the cunts and he says NOTHING! In fact he only has one thought which is basically "DERP! What's going on!??" He watches his girl get torn up and when he finally says something he turns on her for not just blowing them off. She already told you who they were and what trauma they did and yet it's still her fault. That's not a Chad, that's not an alpha. That's a insufferable derp.

Nice cherry picking...

They meet in person, they talk on the phone... he is on her path and then at the supermarket he doesn't remember her?

Think for a minute.
The scene above is bugged and shouldn't even play if you're on her path.
Sir Dammed just sucks at coding that's all.

So if he isn't on her path, why would he intervene?
She is a random girl he doesn't know.
He only met her once at the restaurant where he went with Brooke.

 

[NadaMucho]

Nice cherry picking...

They meet in person, they talk on the phone... he is on her path and then at the supermarket he doesn't remember her?

Think for a minute.
The scene above is bugged and shouldn't even play if you're on her path.
Sir Dammed just sucks at coding that's all.

So if he isn't on her path, why would he intervene?
She is a random girl he doesn't know.
He only met her once at the restaurant where he went with Brooke.

Hey you can have whatever moral standard you like. If I were in a convenience store and someone started to ride down on you I'd step in right away. I don't have to cherry pick I can quote the derpiness all day long. Oh and just to address your comment which doesn't match my experience. Perhaps you missed the comment at the beginning of the scene text but he was talking to Vanessa when the cunts started their bullshit.

(Just before the above quoted scene)
MC: (Hmm.. is that?)
MC: (It's her!)
MC: (That's right, I was planning to call her after she sent me those messages... but things have been pretty hectic, so it slipped my mind. I should go say hi.)
...
MC: Hey, Vanessa.
Vanessa: Hm?
Vanessa: Oh [MC]!
MC: Yea good to see you!
...
MC: So I got your texts. Listen, I've been meaning to call you, but things have been kind of crazy lately.
(bla bla bla planning another date)

So the MC recognized her, started up the conversation with her and is standing right next to her when the bitches start bitching. Considering the guys I know and respect it would take exactly one comment to provoke an intervention. Him.. . twelve comments and nothing. Now I can't speak for how the scene or dialog is supposed go but I didn't do anything weird.

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[Mommysbuttslut]

Think for a minute.
The scene above is bugged and shouldn't even play if you're on her path.
Sir Dammed just sucks at coding that's all.

The scene is definitely supposed to play. There's 5 small variations for it depending on MC's relationship with her and if he is on her relationship or friends path then he calls her after.
As for why he didn't intervene I think he was probably just pretty blindsided. It all happened in seconds, by the time he gets his head on he confronts the cunts.

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[Uthuriel]

The scene is definitely supposed to play. There's 5 small variations for it depending on MC's relationship with her and if he is on her relationship or friends path then he calls her after.
As for why he didn't intervene I think he was probably just pretty blindsided. It all happened in seconds, by the time he gets his head on he confronts the cunts.

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Interesting. I'm on her friendship path and at the end she runs away crying. And he doesn't call her. Maybe something is bugged at my end.
And I agree on blindsided... that scene would play very fast IRL. No time to properly react.

 

[JLucci]

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I believe someone pointed this out earlier as a potential bug. I'm not 100% sure on Ren'Py's use of logic but I think that line was supposed to be "not cc7 and not (van_romance or van_friends)".

 

[Uthuriel]

I believe someone pointed this out earlier as a potential bug. I'm not 100% sure on Ren'Py's use of logic but I think that line was supposed to be "not cc7 and not (van_romance or van_friends)".

Sancho1969
Sorry to ping you but could you have a look and maybe shed some light?

 

[dolfe67]

We all have different sensibilities, but the MC's inner thoughts kinda suck

 

[armond]

We all have different sensibilities, but the MC's inner thoughts kinda suck

I feel like this is true across the board, h game mc inner monolog is generally pretty awful

 

[Unpiloted Zeppelin]

I think I found a plot hole: there's a line something like "well you're a <last name> aren't you!" - why would the triplets have the MC's last name?? They're the result of a one-night-stand.

 

[e6mill]

I think I found a plot hole: there's a line something like "well you're a <last name> aren't you!" - why would the triplets have the MC's last name?? They're the result of a one-night-stand.

In most of the US (at least) mom can give the kids any last name she likes.

 

[Cherubin25]

I am also very sure that at some point in the story it was decided by the mother that the triplets should have MCs last name. (Which would be reasonable, given that her own parents were kinda shit so giving them her own surname would not be the favorite option)

 

[Ian yeh]

NICE

 

[Unpiloted Zeppelin]

I am also very sure that at some point in the story it was decided by the mother that the triplets should have MCs last name. (Which would be reasonable, given that her own parents were kinda shit so giving them her own surname would not be the favorite option)

You're right, I do see that now in the starting letter from Gracie.

 

[sfree21]

hope they bring back the girl in the lake/cabin scene, the girl is crazy, that was so hot. The game until then was very vanilla (blowjob, vaginal), like it was holding back, than all of the sudden this girl comes and drops a bomb

 

[groudor]

hope they bring back the girl in the lake/cabin scene, the girl is crazy, that was so hot. The game until then was very vanilla (blowjob, vaginal), like it was holding back, than all of the sudden this girl comes and drops a bomb

maybe is just a crazy girl but with her talk about destiny intrigued me. Hope to see her in the foreseeable future in front of the MC door with a round belly and lots of magic/drama story

 

[bigguy_foryou]

hope they bring back the girl in the lake/cabin scene, the girl is crazy, that was so hot. The game until then was very vanilla (blowjob, vaginal), like it was holding back, than all of the sudden this girl comes and drops a bomb

Yeah, she's actually the only girl outside of the triplets I had any real interest in. Though perhaps a part of that was the non committal nature of the encounter, allowing you to still 'dedicate' yourself to the triplets alone. Definitely open to seeing more of her though.

 

[wookie ookie]

hope they bring back the girl in the lake/cabin scene, the girl is crazy, that was so hot. The game until then was very vanilla (blowjob, vaginal), like it was holding back, than all of the sudden this girl comes and drops a bomb

Yeah agree. I so knocked her up that night and am waiting for the call or the knock at the door Lol I even gave her flowers and candy on valentine's day

 

[Defenestrator.for.traitor]

hope they bring back the girl in the lake/cabin scene, the girl is crazy, that was so hot. The game until then was very vanilla (blowjob, vaginal), like it was holding back, than all of the sudden this girl comes and drops a bomb

Tbh, she is hot regardless of her craziness.