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0blivion

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Dev needs to be consistent.
I seen 3 different spellings between the synopsis and in the game itself. Is it Hollowbrook, Hollow Brook, or Hollowbrooke?
 
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OEJ

'Dirth ma, harellan. Ma banal enasalin. Mar solas'
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Do not discuss NTR here, go to off-topic make a thread and go wild. mentioning it is not an issue, but arguing or prolonging unnecessary discussion that only leads to toxic behavior is not acceptable. So please keep this thread clean of it.
 

paust.alex

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At first I was hooked by the quality of the pictures, the incest, adorable, sweet and innocent-looking little loli sister, however. Unfortunately I couldn't get any further than the scene where this innocent-looking little sister devours her mother's vagina. I'm not a big fan of such controversial characters. I don't think I'd be in touch with any of them after that, ever. Unless maybe for a funeral.
 

botc76

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The character models are fine, the writing is littered with spelling errors, the writer doesn't even seem to know there is a difference between "your" and "you're."
I know it's petty, but when the mistakes go beyond a certain threshold, it really begins to take me out of the game, that was definitely the case here.

I liked the intro with the newspaper, that was a bit original, of course then the story devolved into the by now usual "family with dark secrets, boy returns to female family members who are already dying to sit on his cock and something mystical."
And it's not just the family, the first female he meets outside of them is also instantly making out with him.
And I got to say, that made me a bit sad, because Candace is a really unusual looking character, freckles, short hair, no humongous tits, but a nice pair, a hot ass etc.
This could have been really good, just imagine if the MC didn't look like a little wimp, but like someone who finished college and did some sport or at least ate a piece of red meat from time to time, Candace feels drawn to her besties' son, because she is a young attractive woman with a healthy sex drive and the men in town are either old, married or way below her on the evolutionary scale.
And here comes this well-built, educated, good-looking young man.
The MC feels it too, the attraction to this woman, who is his mom's best friend.
It builds up, with accidental touches, looks that linger too long. Something seems to throw them together again and again and then, so fast, they give in and start making out.
And that with a woman like Candace, oh my, that would have been great.
But alas, once more we have the wimpy kid who has a magic cock that drives every female mad with desire, because magic.

I don't mean to shit on this game, it has only very little content for now, this could become much better, just a few updates in, and it's not like it's completely horrible, but for now it is just such a complete pastiche of all the clichés you can think of in incest games, which has a long way to go to become good, in any way original and satisfying. It's just that so many characters in these games look cut and paste and when I stumble upon one who has a different look, I always hope the game does something great with her, not just make her another bitch, hypnotized by MC magic dick.

Again, I don't want to attack the dev, nor the game, it's just starting out, it CAN become something else, something better, but as new games go, this doesn't exactly set the world on fire.
 

46n2

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Really fine work on that opening sequence. Just tremendous!

Not exactly sure this is my cup of tea, concept-wise, but you certainly did land the opener enough to want it to be (and I do like the title). More than a little impressive in the tempo and framing.

-cheers, mate


PS What's up with that av pic? There can be only one ; )
 

Tavi13

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This is interesting. I typically stay away from new releases, too many bad experiences/let-downs, but this caught my attention....I do love horror tags :).
Seems like a real solid start and (other than the town name changing) the grammar complaints seem to be a bit exaggerated. Sure there's some issues, but not really bad enough to break you out of the story.

Looking forward to seeing a lot more.

Good Luck!
 
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Crimx42

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And I got to say, that made me a bit sad, because Candace is a really unusual looking character, freckles, short hair, no humongous tits, but a nice pair, a hot ass etc.
This could have been really good, just imagine if the MC didn't look like a little wimp, but like someone who finished college and did some sport or at least ate a piece of red meat from time to time, Candace feels drawn to her besties' son, because she is a young attractive woman with a healthy sex drive and the men in town are either old, married or way below her on the evolutionary scale.
And here comes this well-built, educated, good-looking young man.
The MC feels it too, the attraction to this woman, who is his mom's best friend.
It builds up, with accidental touches, looks that linger too long. Something seems to throw them together again and again and then, so fast, they give in and start making out.
And that with a woman like Candace, oh my, that would have been great.
But alas, once more we have the wimpy kid who has a magic cock that drives every female mad with desire, because magic.
I got to agree with the sentiment of this post.

It's like, if you want to keep her on the route; You know, fine... You know your vision for your game...

But like, it would be beyond amazing if you toned down her overt slutiness and just slightly slowed down the progression between the two. I would even go so far as to ask to remove their hallway scene (or at least move it into his second visit of the house.)

However, this is just a request into the wind.
 
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LamentEntertainment

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I got to agree with the sentiment of this post.

It's like, if you want to keep her on the route; You know, fine... You know your vision for your game...

But like, it would be beyond amazing if you toned down her overt slutiness and just slightly slowed down the progression between the two. I would even go so far as to ask to remove their hallway scene (or at least move it into his second visit of the house.)

However, this is just a request into the wind.
Ok, I didn't want to say this before it was in the update, but this very thing was already in the writing to be addressed.
What you have seen of her this far, goes toward her character and history. It had to be this way. It's not what you think and I'm hoping you'll be patient and trust me with what I'm trying to do here.

There have been a lot of comments about decisions that have been made by mc, and other characters that have garnished less than favorable responses.
Although I cant say that all of them are, but a lot of them are going toward development of the characters.
I'm not making a fuckfest story, but I am trying to keep it sexy in some ways without breaking "Immersion" or whatever you call it.

This is my first KN/Writing project and I have a story to tell, and I want the characters to be fleshed out and have development arcs.

Some of my decisions wont be for everyone, I understand that.
But also, some of my decisions are being hastily misunderstood, and dismissed as bad decision making.

If you are going to stick around and enjoy the story, Please allow me to tell it, and trust what I'm doing with the characters attitudes and personalities.


Oh, and I have a proof reader now.

Thanks again to every single person that has checked this out.
And if you are still here, I hope that I can continue to entertain you. 6_67.png
 

BYK370

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Ok, I didn't want to say this before it was in the update, but this very thing was already in the writing to be addressed.
What you have seen of her this far, goes toward her character and history. It had to be this way. It's not what you think and I'm hoping you'll be patient and trust me with what I'm trying to do here.

There have been a lot of comments about decisions that have been made by mc, and other characters that have garnished less than favorable responses.
Although I cant say that all of them are, but a lot of them are going toward development of the characters.
I'm not making a fuckfest story, but I am trying to keep it sexy in some ways without breaking "Immersion" or whatever you call it.

This is my first KN/Writing project and I have a story to tell, and I want the characters to be fleshed out and have development arcs.

Some of my decisions wont be for everyone, I understand that.
But also, some of my decisions are being hastily misunderstood, and dismissed as bad decision making.

If you are going to stick around and enjoy the story, Please allow me to tell it, and trust what I'm doing with the characters attitudes and personalities.


Oh, and I have a proof reader now.

Thanks again to every single person that has checked this out.
And if you are still here, I hope that I can continue to entertain you. View attachment 1960333
I can’t wait for the next update so looking forward to it!
 

Tavi13

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There have been a lot of comments about decisions that have been made by mc, and other characters that have garnished less than favorable responses.
Although I cant say that all of them are, but a lot of them are going toward development of the characters.
I'm not making a fuckfest story, but I am trying to keep it sexy in some ways without breaking "Immersion" or whatever you call it.

This is my first KN/Writing project and I have a story to tell, and I want the characters to be fleshed out and have development arcs.

Some of my decisions wont be for everyone, I understand that.
But also, some of my decisions are being hastily misunderstood, and dismissed as bad decision making.

If you are going to stick around and enjoy the story, Please allow me to tell it, and trust what I'm doing with the characters attitudes and personalities.

Deep breathes my friend, take deep breathes.

No matter what you do, or what you say, you WILL piss some people off and they are going to be super vocal about it. There is nothing you can do to change it.

I know it is easy for me to say, but don't let it get to you :) Keep going with the story that you want to tell, the way you want it told, and your fanbase will build itself.
 

KoGa3

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Really nice start with good story/storytelling/renders. It's of course still early in the developement, and quite some typos in there (according the info above a proofreader is now in the dev team, too). But I still think this could get a really good one.

Nov. 25, 2022:
New game version v0.084beta is out, I'll check it as soon as possible.
Edit Nov 30, 2022:
Link on the OP is vanished again, I stop to update the Mod links here.
If interested you can find them on my homepage/discord.


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Fragmandk

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Really nice start with good story/storytelling/renders. It's of course still early in the developement, and quite some typos in there (according the info above a proofreader is now in the dev team, too). But I still think this could get a really good one.


The game has already audio, but the music stops so far after the intro. I couldn't resist and added some more tracks into the game. Don't know if there is coming more from the dev himself, then I stop that of course again.

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The game only have some music due to not more music has been made, it was a first release of the game there way much more to make on the game
 
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Angelsong

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Is this game going to stay as a kinetic novel through it's entirety? It would be nice to have a little choice in what sexual relationships the MC gets into, especially if it's something that is a turn-off for the player. If this has been addressed before, I apologize.

EDIT: Personally, I love having a "skinny wimp" as MC. More realistic for good boys as opposed to some ripped sigma with a horse cock. Although, while not a deal breaker, his luscious Fabio hair is a bit meh but I'm fine with it.
 

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Not going to address the blatant double standard on this forum, as I'm often 50-50 with lesbo content. But I definitely didn't see that scene coming, no pun intended. I enjoy slow burns and think it's a potential good story here despite the hiccups, I'm also giddy about it being a horror, so I'll probably be back. The MC is a borderline midget, more times than none I skip these types of games but once again, I'm sticking around. Maybe the Dev will offset mighty mouse by giving him a nice shlong to slay the vixens of Hollowbrook. This story won't be figured out in one update, it needs time to develop, and I know some aren't happy with how the Candace character came on to the MC but... porn games be like and maybe the MC was just simply irresistible. :KEK: And finally the Dev said he found a proofreader, which is another thing to look forward to.
 
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3.30 star(s) 86 Votes