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One grammatical issue I've noticed: Rachel says that Chris "marched to the beat of his own drummer." I think you mixed expressions here. It should be "his own drum" or "a different drummer". The way it's phrased sounds like he's got a personal drummer.
So... The current content ends right after an abrupt panic about Smart TVs, huh? "Oh no, it's probably recording our conversation!" "Nope." "Oh okay." [To be continued.] Although, on the subject of conspiracy theories, where are all the conspiracy theorists in the bad ending? There are tons of people claiming Marilyn Monroe had a mental break after being subjected to mind control for years. Imagine how much more widespread that belief would be in a world where the existence of mind control helmets is actually public knowledge and not a conspiracy theory. But I guess Mistress Red's just not popular enough to bring out the real crazies. ...Well, aside from one.
So... The current content ends right after an abrupt panic about Smart TVs, huh? "Oh no, it's probably recording our conversation!" "Nope." "Oh okay." [To be continued.] Although, on the subject of conspiracy theories, where are all the conspiracy theorists in the bad ending? There are tons of people claiming Marilyn Monroe had a mental break after being subjected to mind control for years. Imagine how much more widespread that belief would be in a world where the existence of mind control helmets is actually public knowledge and not a conspiracy theory. But I guess Mistress Red's just not popular enough to bring out the real crazies. ...Well, aside from one.