- Jan 13, 2020
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Anal in first release? That's nice.
Could you compress more? I dread to think about its size when it's completed.
Could you compress more? I dread to think about its size when it's completed.
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- Jan 18, 2018
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looks nice but. the busts next to the speech dialogs stare off to one side which is a bit unsettling imo
- Dec 18, 2018
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I'm sorry but I don't plan to add incest, as the story would make no sense at all. I was thinking about something sister-sister related content later on, but it would be optional and I'm not sure if it's going to fit the story. Too early for that.
sry
my bad
didnt read the checked the game yet
but wanted to set my intrests before i have it im my list
GL...
Wow, that is how you make a first release. Plenty of content, beautiful renders, an interesting (and hopefully) deep plot. I look forward to peeling away the layers and finding out what is happening.
Some minor quibbles:
1) The stat page is just a gallery of women, it should list everyone (including the MC). Also it doesn't list names and I am not familiar enough with the characters to be able to instantly recognize them, I end up having to hunt and click on each of the characters until I find the right one.
2) The stat page wastes space explaining the character's nicknames, instead explain their relationship to the MC and where they met the MC. Maybe add some random tidbit - favorite color, favorite ice cream flavor, favorite sexual position, favorite book, etc
3) There are some errors in grammar that make sentences clunky, you might want to give it another read through and smooth it out.
4) There is no reason to not fire Clara since she is obviously working for Linda. Also do not force us to "punish" her in anyway besides firing her. If there is an option for other punishments that's fine but not everyone has that kink.
5) Please stop with the "mysterious" MC schtick, just explain what his company does and what he has done with the last 10 years to us. It's not going to be a shocking revelation to the audience.
6) The MC doesn't look old enough. If his mom died when he was 10 and then Linda moved in and he was tossed out at ~18 then he should look 28. He looks 20.
7) Please let us know in the beginning that the MC is in a relationship with Mary and Khloe. And if it is an open relationship. I feel like having sex with Kelly was cheating on those two but I didn't even know until I clicked on Mary's picture in the Stats page (which only opens up after the MC talks to her).
Errors:
Lisa is listed as being a 20 year old lawyer on the stat page. Considering the 4 year degree and 3 years of law school this is most likely an error.
When the MC and Lisa go up to her room to talk the screen stays on the image of Sandra and Emily talking on the phone. It moves off that page when they get into Lisa's room.
The next day when Lisa shows up at the office the MC and her talk as if they went up to her room and talked regardless of what the player chooses.
We make a decision on whether Sandra's salary is too much or just right with no idea of finances at all. At least dummy up a screen that shows the amount and how rich the company or the MC is. How can we judge that without any information?
The MC needs to be more assertive in tone and dialogue, he should be someone we all can agree women will go after instead of a college age looking kid.
A chocolate milk shake for lunch? Seriously?
Some minor quibbles:
1) The stat page is just a gallery of women, it should list everyone (including the MC). Also it doesn't list names and I am not familiar enough with the characters to be able to instantly recognize them, I end up having to hunt and click on each of the characters until I find the right one.
2) The stat page wastes space explaining the character's nicknames, instead explain their relationship to the MC and where they met the MC. Maybe add some random tidbit - favorite color, favorite ice cream flavor, favorite sexual position, favorite book, etc
3) There are some errors in grammar that make sentences clunky, you might want to give it another read through and smooth it out.
4) There is no reason to not fire Clara since she is obviously working for Linda. Also do not force us to "punish" her in anyway besides firing her. If there is an option for other punishments that's fine but not everyone has that kink.
5) Please stop with the "mysterious" MC schtick, just explain what his company does and what he has done with the last 10 years to us. It's not going to be a shocking revelation to the audience.
6) The MC doesn't look old enough. If his mom died when he was 10 and then Linda moved in and he was tossed out at ~18 then he should look 28. He looks 20.
7) Please let us know in the beginning that the MC is in a relationship with Mary and Khloe. And if it is an open relationship. I feel like having sex with Kelly was cheating on those two but I didn't even know until I clicked on Mary's picture in the Stats page (which only opens up after the MC talks to her).
Errors:
Lisa is listed as being a 20 year old lawyer on the stat page. Considering the 4 year degree and 3 years of law school this is most likely an error.
When the MC and Lisa go up to her room to talk the screen stays on the image of Sandra and Emily talking on the phone. It moves off that page when they get into Lisa's room.
The next day when Lisa shows up at the office the MC and her talk as if they went up to her room and talked regardless of what the player chooses.
We make a decision on whether Sandra's salary is too much or just right with no idea of finances at all. At least dummy up a screen that shows the amount and how rich the company or the MC is. How can we judge that without any information?
The MC needs to be more assertive in tone and dialogue, he should be someone we all can agree women will go after instead of a college age looking kid.
A chocolate milk shake for lunch? Seriously?
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It's also not my native language , So i'am happy that you explaned itIt won't be. My bad that I wrote that, but as I mentioned above it was supposed to mean something else. So since it made people confused I removed that. English is not my native language and I can't ask my dear proofreader to check everything I write in English.
i hope to see more of this good work in the near further.If there is one thing i like to see changed is the profile tab put the names by the pictures so it is a lot easier to find them. and some backstory for the 2 girls and what for company they have with the mc is also recommended. if you not put it in the lore ofcours
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Kelly signature:
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I'm playing now and Lisa said she's about to start college. So she must be 18-19 right? Another error I guess.
- May 28, 2018
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Sir, how dare you cutting off Lisa's beautiful long hair? What a heresy!
- May 8, 2018
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Awesome start for a 0.1
a LOT of content, interesting story, renders look good, nice job dev
but Lisa's new hair? Noooooooo!!! why? why did you do that?, she was so beautiful and cute with her long hair
a LOT of content, interesting story, renders look good, nice job dev
but Lisa's new hair?
Noooooooo!!! why? why did you do that?, she was so beautiful and cute with her long hair
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Yeah, it wasn't consistent. If she is supposed to be entering college then she'd be 18-19 (as you said). If she is supposed to be studying Law then she'd be done with her undergrad and in law school (so around 22-23).
And I agree 100%, her pixie cut is disappointing. I loved her long hair, would have rather she'd just died it red and then I would have been very happy.
- Jun 14, 2018
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Now is a good game with fire. Here are some great characters and a harem tag, but best of all without the NTR tag. I hope this line stays and the game doesn’t dry up right after a good start. Might become one of my favorites.
- Dec 18, 2018
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Thak you guys for pointing this out. It's an obvious error. As I posted above Stat Screen is not in its final form. I had to miss that line in Lisa's stat tab.
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- Jun 23, 2018
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I wish that the part about Sandra being raped had not been in the story. The guy could have just spread rumors about her. I don't understand the need by developers to add such content nowadays. I support a lot of games, but as soon as a rape element is added I have to say no.
- Jan 13, 2020
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I need to know why Lisa decide to fuck her hairstyle so much. It's horrible
- Jun 23, 2018
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Lots of drama in life not involving rape.