- Jul 14, 2017
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I agree this should have been an option for the player to say yes or no.
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- Aug 21, 2018
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I want to support all of that, especially everything I highlightedWow, that is how you make a first release. Plenty of content, beautiful renders, an interesting (and hopefully) deep plot. I look forward to peeling away the layers and finding out what is happening.
Some minor quibbles:
1) The stat page is just a gallery of women, it should list everyone (including the MC). Also it doesn't list names and I am not familiar enough with the characters to be able to instantly recognize them, I end up having to hunt and click on each of the characters until I find the right one.
2) The stat page wastes space explaining the character's nicknames, instead explain their relationship to the MC and where they met the MC. Maybe add some random tidbit - favorite color, favorite ice cream flavor, favorite sexual position, favorite book, etc
3) There are some errors in grammar that make sentences clunky, you might want to give it another read through and smooth it out.
4) There is no reason to not fire Clara since she is obviously working for Linda. Also do not force us to "punish" her in anyway besides firing her. If there is an option for other punishments that's fine but not everyone has that kink.
5) Please stop with the "mysterious" MC schtick, just explain what his company does and what he has done with the last 10 years to us. It's not going to be a shocking revelation to the audience.
6) The MC doesn't look old enough. If his mom died when he was 10 and then Linda moved in and he was tossed out at ~18 then he should look 28. He looks 20.
7) Please let us know in the beginning that the MC is in a relationship with Mary and Khloe. And if it is an open relationship. I feel like having sex with Kelly was cheating on those two but I didn't even know until I clicked on Mary's picture in the Stats page (which only opens up after the MC talks to her).
Errors:
Lisa is listed as being a 20 year old lawyer on the stat page. Considering the 4 year degree and 3 years of law school this is most likely an error.
When the MC and Lisa go up to her room to talk the screen stays on the image of Sandra and Emily talking on the phone. It moves off that page when they get into Lisa's room.
The next day when Lisa shows up at the office the MC and her talk as if they went up to her room and talked regardless of what the player chooses.
We make a decision on whether Sandra's salary is too much or just right with no idea of finances at all. At least dummy up a screen that shows the amount and how rich the company or the MC is. How can we judge that without any information?
The MC needs to be more assertive in tone and dialogue, he should be someone we all can agree women will go after instead of a college age looking kid.
A chocolate milk shake for lunch? Seriously?
And to add to that ....
this game showers you with hot looking women ... you get cramps in your dick by just walking around ^^
Oh and at lunch - its more or less a repetition from the day before in Lisa's room - that is boring to read. Maybe change it so only players that leave early the day before get that.
And PLEASE - I need a option to let Lisa keep her hair ... I dont understand that obsession with short hair of some ppl. There is no "to long" for women's head hair. And yes - she still does look cute .. but I just liked the long hair more ..
Another thing ... way to many singles in that pool of girls - we need some to get them the chance to cheat on their partners ...
This is a great first release. Really happy that we have another good game on the list and hope the development will continue and the updates can keep the quality of this release.
Story 5/5 render quality 5/5 Lisa's hair change 1/5(it's not bad, but I liked the old one better) rape drama -3/5
not putting to much weight on last two so I would rate this 4/5.
Keep up the good work
not putting to much weight on last two so I would rate this 4/5.
Keep up the good work
- Feb 14, 2019
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Hey did anyone notice the Evil Stepmother, LINDA BROWN- just look like the blonde teacher in Being A Dik?
- Sep 16, 2017
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Really good game for a 0.1, but has a lot of room for improvement. Sometimes the scenes doesn't flow, the text feels clunky (to me), and the story has moments that are confusing... like: "really? She is in the office and nobody can find her? She is my employee and the girlfriend of Lisa's friend whit that age? Its impossible for my lawyer to solve the money problem, but i can do it easy peasy?"
Again, good game!! Beautiful dames and interesting story, but can improve
Good luck Karabinek
Again, good game!! Beautiful dames and interesting story, but can improve
Good luck Karabinek
- Feb 18, 2018
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- Aug 7, 2016
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Very amazing game so far can't wait to see more! just wanted to let you know there's an error that pops up when you try to view Clara's bio stats screen after you punish her (last encounter you have with her).
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- Nov 24, 2017
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Yes I know, however, wouldn't there be some type of relationship between the sisters if they all going be involved with the MC.
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Also I do have to agree, the suspense is fine, the drama gets tedious and boring real quick in these games so drop the rape drama as fast as possible.
- Dec 18, 2017
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After a long time, I think we have a game that perfectly balances story and sex. The renders and models are outstanding (its tough to chose), the story is simple but very interesting. Its a big first release, and it says a lot about how dedicated the dev is.
Also, the dev has already done a lot of work on version 0.2 which shows he works hard. I hope people support this game. I think its one of the best first releases ever and has the potential to become one of the greatest VN ever.
Also, the dev has already done a lot of work on version 0.2 which shows he works hard. I hope people support this game. I think its one of the best first releases ever and has the potential to become one of the greatest VN ever.