VN HTML Abandoned Secrets Unveiled [v0.1.1] [Starlightgames]

[RyuseiZED]

Well i can only tell you some review after play it

Need to Fix a lot the text, maybe a smooth font use, also the side when you use the character names could be more notable than the way they are now, beside that when you are gonna show an option, like put character name or choose a path, should be a clear and remarkable way to see it, also a short explanation before to decide, i mean what could/couldnt happen.

beside that, ahm well for me, it looks too automatic, i mean i cant decide what to do/dont do, if MC can do something, it feels like i just "click next" on a installation program, only do it ontill see a scene or something, please dont get me wrong, maybe let us decide what the MC do or who to talk, what to try to study/work/wander around

and well for my personal selection, i would preffer a short pages, i mean not that long, since its more easy to see all on only 1 page without scroll too much...

so good luck and i would like to see more of what kind of plot and events could happen on your game

BTW: some video scenes didnt load and take lot of time, idk if its just me or someone else experiment it, maybe a little check up if you dont mind, i hope i could help you and not make you mad

 

[Ceesko]

This is a kinetic novel, not a single choice in the entire game.

 

[Crow Armbrust]

THX

 

[whysoserious222]

Alexis as mom, hell yeah, count me in

 

[Shelscott50]

YO DEV THE NTR TAG WHAT'S THAT ABOUT?
"firstly let's address the elephant in the room and yes this game has NTR and it's completely optional."
WILL THERE BE A DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO PATHS?
"I don't know how to explain it in detail but if you are a fan of both Ntr and vanilla I urge you to play both paths so that you can understand what I mean and you can for yourself ........ but if you hate NTR and don't even wanna see a trace of it, then Vanilla path has got you covered!"

The Biggest Question/Complaint about NTR IS; "Will I Be the ONE to NTR someone else?
(ie; Son NTRing(stealing his Mom)from his Father; brother NTRing(Stealing) his sister's affection from her boyfriend; MC NTRing(stealing girlfriend) from a brother, male friends, and other guys)
OR Will the MC be the One getting NTR'ed(being cucked) by others?

THAT Is the biggest problem with it!! Players/Guys WANT to be Doing/Stealing; But Not have it done to them,...
- DAMN Male Ego!

 

[Truckstopcowboy]

thanks,i do need it!


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you can, I just integrated it into the first dialogue box after the landing page, you can type your name in and you are good!i thought it would reduce some clicking as there is alot of clicking already, I should have mentioned it beforehand, my bad! thanks for trying it out tho I appreciate it alot!


the size is mainly due to the videos of the handjob and the strip club scenes! I didn't decrease the image quality! I wanted to use some gifs but when I edited out some parts of the handjob scene the gifs sort of lost their quality and after compression, they were like 90MB so I thought videos would be a better option!i will take care of this in the next update and I will try to make it look pleasing as well as reduce the size of the content used! and coming to avengers thingy I wouldn't dare to go to them with my stories as they are nowhere near the quality of even the "poor man's avengers" scripts and mainly coz i prefer DC over Marvel anyday so yeah! thanks for playing and i will definitely improve upon the file size thingy!

Thanks, missed that.

 

[AtotehZ]

No Android compatibility?

 

[AtotehZ]

The Biggest Question/Complaint about NTR IS; "Will I Be the ONE to NTR someone else?
(ie; Son NTRing(stealing his Mom)from his Father; brother NTRing(Stealing) his sister's affection from her boyfriend; MC NTRing(stealing girlfriend) from a brother, male friends, and other guys)
OR Will the MC be the One getting NTR'ed(being cucked) by others?

THAT Is the biggest problem with it!! Players/Guys WANT to be Doing/Stealing; But Not have it done to them,...
- DAMN Male Ego!

Yes, MC will be cucked if the game is tagged NTR. That is almost literally how the tag is defined.

Netori is not a part of the NTR tag on F95. Whether it is a part of this game I dunno since the tag doesn't exist here.

 

[Starlight08]

I can see a lot of effort got into this game. Hope you'll get someone to proofread the game as your game have a lot of texts. Also, I loved that you are not fast-forwarding to sex scenes in the game. Even though you said you don't want the Sandbox game but I would really recommend going for it because the game kind of feels like Sandbox, just buttons are now on at end of the passage. You have a photoshoot, lockpicking, gym routine, and a part-time job, they would really work better in Sandbox, giving more time to people to read your text. Anyways, the game looks great, Valentina Nappi is my favorite pornstar, Optional NTR with game mechanics and the length of the game is good. Good luck with your game dude.

I started this project way back in Jan and my first pitstop came in the form of selection of actress, i went overboard with it and i wasn't happy with anyone(especially for mom's character)!I viewed tons of videos and photos and I was literally overdosed on porn! time was running out and I wanted my first version to be perfect, I guess that is where I messed up first, I wanted it to be fancy with all the text, CSS stuff, pics, etc but I just ignored the smaller details! I just wanted that first impression to be good but I just messed it up big time!i played the sandbox version a few times but I got irritated with all the grind and the progression so I was like if the creator himself gets annoyed then I don't think people would show any interest in it so I thought VN would be a better choice! i need to go back to the drawing board and refine this game! the simple option was for me to keep it simple but I couldn't! I need to get my act together in order to save this game! thanks for checking the game out and thanks for the feedback and thanks for the support and I hope I could redeem myself in the next update!

very nice can't wait for the next update
good luck

thanks, alot mate and i'll try my best to make the next update

Well i can only tell you some review after play it

Need to Fix a lot the text, maybe a smooth font use, also the side when you use the character names could be more notable than the way they are now, beside that when you are gonna show an option, like put character name or choose a path, should be a clear and remarkable way to see it, also a short explanation before to decide, i mean what could/couldnt happen.

beside that, ahm well for me, it looks too automatic, i mean i cant decide what to do/dont do, if MC can do something, it feels like i just "click next" on a installation program, only do it ontill see a scene or something, please dont get me wrong, maybe let us decide what the MC do or who to talk, what to try to study/work/wander around

and well for my personal selection, i would preffer a short pages, i mean not that long, since its more easy to see all on only 1 page without scroll too much...

so good luck and i would like to see more of what kind of plot and events could happen on your game

BTW: some video scenes didnt load and take lot of time, idk if its just me or someone else experiment it, maybe a little check up if you dont mind, i hope i could help you and not make you mad

thanks for the feedback, i really appreciate it and yes i'm gonna make changes in terms of text and will definitely add in more choices!and no you din't make me mad infact you are just pointing out the shortcomings of the game which in turn help me become a good developer and help me improve my game to the point where everyone would have fun playing it!i'll definitely take your suggestions and refine my game!

This is a kinetic novel, not a single choice in the entire game.

I sincerely apologize for making you feel like that! the game is definitely short on choices and I accept it and I hope I rectify it in the next update!

THX

you are welcome, dear sir!

Alexis as mom, hell yeah, count me in

will definitely make her spicier in the next update! thanks for playing!

YO DEV THE NTR TAG WHAT'S THAT ABOUT?
"firstly let's address the elephant in the room and yes this game has NTR and it's completely optional."
WILL THERE BE A DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO PATHS?
"I don't know how to explain it in detail but if you are a fan of both Ntr and vanilla I urge you to play both paths so that you can understand what I mean and you can for yourself ........ but if you hate NTR and don't even wanna see a trace of it, then Vanilla path has got you covered!"

The Biggest Question/Complaint about NTR IS; "Will I Be the ONE to NTR someone else?
(ie; Son NTRing(stealing his Mom)from his Father; brother NTRing(Stealing) his sister's affection from her boyfriend; MC NTRing(stealing girlfriend) from a brother, male friends, and other guys)
OR Will the MC be the One getting NTR'ed(being cucked) by others?

THAT Is the biggest problem with it!! Players/Guys WANT to be Doing/Stealing; But Not have it done to them,...
- DAMN Male Ego!

i personally like both(ntr and vanilla)so that's why I created two paths! i created another one known as the mixed path where you could yolo i cut it out coz I didn't feel like it was coming up too well!I wanted the players to experience the same story but in different perspectives and by doing different quests which i will be implementing in the next update! this will feature both netori and netorare but currently, there is no netori so I didn't add it in any description coz i didn't want to diss out false claims!at the end of the day each to their own I guess!

No Android compatibility?

I'm sorry but no, i wanted to upload this to the gamcore website where you can play this online but i don't know whether to do it or not!

 

[Jack-ish]

Just wanna say "slow burn" does not equal "realistic". That is a lie many devs use to excuse their never ending teasing of content. They're obviously doing that to get supporters, which is a good reason to do it, but the slow burn crap is still a lie. A good story can start with sex. A good story can use cliches, if they use them well. It just depends on the quality of writing.

 

[Shelscott50]

Just wanna say "slow burn" does not equal "realistic". That is a lie many devs use to excuse their never ending teasing of content. They're obviously doing that to get supporters, which is a good reason to do it, but the slow burn crap is still a lie. A good story can start with sex. A good story can use cliches, if they use them well. It just depends on the quality of writing.

I partially agree with you. I HAVE played Many games. I do not mind a 'slow burn', as long as it is NOT Purposely drawn out.
But Early SEX scenes for the sake of sex scenes/fapping Can RUIN a game just as much.
IF there Is purpose for it , and IT is a "Valid" part of the story. GREAT!!
There are many more (too many to list), but 2 examples are
WVM - which has a 1st time Sex scene, early in game, between MC & his Girlfriend. and then with his 'Guardian's' Boss.
(it could be said that it was 'too soon', but it works with the story.)
Dating My Daughter - Is a 'Almost perfect' example of a 'Slow burn'. It would be Wrong and inappropriate for the Dad to Immediately attempt a 'loving' Sexual relationship with his New found daughter.
(Actually, IT IS a "Game Ender" if attempted to soon) Having Had to slowly 'work up to it' and then some.

 

[Shelscott50]

I don't know,... IMO this Game needs More work.
I tried to play it and just couldn't 'get comfortable' with it.
(For the record, I Saved and chose 'NTR' path, but I stopped playing at "Welcome Home Dinner")

What is it with the "Narrator" Crap?? Just write simple story/paragraphs.
Allow Mom & Dad to talk for themselves.
Is DEV Too lazy to Build "proper Characters??

For Now, I am going to give Game a 'Hard Pass', and MAYBE try again after a few more Updates/versions.

 

[Darklord1234]

Just from the text in the preview pics I can tell that you need a proofreader badly. This leads me to not even want to try it at this time. Not trying to be mean. Good luck and maybe in a few updates it'll seem more worthwhile.

 

[Alleykatt]

Just from the text in the preview pics I can tell that you need a proofreader badly. This leads me to not even want to try it at this time. Not trying to be mean. Good luck and maybe in a few updates it'll seem more worthwhile.

I agree. The writing quality is dreadful. Enlist an editor, because it is not fun to read. I also suggest not being so long-winded - no-one wants to read pages and pages of inconsequntial chatter.

 

[he_found_you]

My IQ dropped 10 points by completing this shitshow.
Is this supposed to be NTR or a porn game? Because there is not a SINGLE TIT!
Not a single naked/porn media. Not even as a teaser.

Shift delete and never touch anything by this dev again!

 

[JohnnyLiu]

Not Bad,I'll try this one.

 

[katsoli5]

I ll download just for the honesty on his part.

 

[Dragoci]

YO DEV THE NTR TAG WHAT'S THAT ABOUT?
"firstly let's address the elephant in the room and yes this game has NTR and it's completely optional."
WILL THERE BE A DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO PATHS?
"I don't know how to explain it in detail but if you are a fan of both Ntr and vanilla I urge you to play both paths so that you can understand what I mean and you can for yourself ........ but if you hate NTR and don't even wanna see a trace of it, then Vanilla path has got you covered!"

The Biggest Question/Complaint about NTR IS; "Will I Be the ONE to NTR someone else?
(ie; Son NTRing(stealing his Mom)from his Father; brother NTRing(Stealing) his sister's affection from her boyfriend; MC NTRing(stealing girlfriend) from a brother, male friends, and other guys)
OR Will the MC be the One getting NTR'ed(being cucked) by others?

THAT Is the biggest problem with it!! Players/Guys WANT to be Doing/Stealing; But Not have it done to them,...
- DAMN Male Ego!

The very definition of "netorare" contemplates you as the protagonist and your significant other (mother, girlfriend, wife...for hetero people) sleeping or living erotic situation with somebody she hates or didn't see as a sexual partner before the cheating. The situation where you are the third party is not technically NTR, I don't remember if there's a specific word for it.

 

[KayDraemon]

I really REALLY hope to finally see an HTML game with NTR tag being finished for once. I'm watching this one. (DLing it as we speak, I know you said you wanted to change a lot, so I'll keep an open mind, but it peaked my curiousity even more xD)

 

[Shdo]

first of all I like the dev. and I look forward to the development of the game
I haven't played it yet because of the note but it looks good