As T51bwinterized preparing for Helayna plot line update .
I wanted to make my comprehensive take on what i think can be improved with Helayna content.
We don't have yet preview of what Winter think he gonna change with Helayna plot line and more importantly how extensive this changes gonna be.
But here is my take
In general
I dislike idea of her completely losing her mind the moment she done the ring and not having at least some self awareness.
Art and writing should try to convey more complex emotions than fuck doll happy getting off.
Art direction from Winter in my opinion should concentrate more on Helayna conflicting emotions.
Her fear, hesitation, shame, self loathing (she basically should be disappointed with herself as she failed to resist) and her hidden desires amplified by the ring influence. Have to show her inner struggle with ring that compels her to obey.
Her desperately trying to get control back over her body and mind. Illustrate her mental collapse basically how she get consumed by lust.
Sommy should try to visualize in her Facial expressions how ring influence breaks her.
I think it will help if during scenes perspectives switch from Rowan to Helayna and back (her Point of view).
Obviously its much harder pulling off but again that is the point of rework and improvement.
That will give some punch and drama to the events.
Its pivotal point in her story Ark i think it needed to get extra attention form Sommy and Winter.
Making the hole thing more emotionally charged.
And speaking about some scenes in particular:
1) Raeve keep
During her capture she break immediately and give no resistance. It feels anti climactic somehow.
Scene with orcs/ knights should be more about her disgust and shame fighting with her lust emanated from the ring.
This will be much better dynamics then rag doll submission.
Culminating with her finally being defeated by her lust completely by the end of the scene.
Orc should be more abusive. She just killed some of them during castle assault they want to take there revenge on her.
Signaling Rowan that he should step up. That would be more dramatic even tragic.
And not just "its hot in armor" and "please take me i'm yours"
2) Helayna escape
Disproportionate options.
While when Alexia help Helayna escape we get the hole loads of content:
Rowan punishing Alexia/She get thrown to Wulump and then Andras helps himself with her.
On Rowan road on the other hand we get nothing , obviously no one going to do it because there is nothing to see.
Maybe include at least one sex scene on Rowan road?
Rowan see her being humiliated by orcs in the Arena.
Orcs mock her and give her Practice wooden sword and some skimpy armor and urge her to try and fight them and if she wins they will "let her go".
Will be nice and dirty. Obviously she fails and get gang banged. This will illustrate her desperate situation and prompt good natured player to help her escape.
3) Helayna rape dinner.
The only thing we get from this scene is Helayna being humiliated.
Helayna in love with Rowan right? Andras and Jazera aware of that. This why they put this show.
Twins aim at Rowan here not at Helayna. If so lets play this card.
Helayna should be more emotional about being fucked in front of her idolized hero.
Usual game.
Her trying to hide her face in hands Andras not so gently removing those hands.
She communicate with Rowan asking him not to watch.
Basically more interaction with two people this scene is all about!
She threw her head back while cuming.
Andras grab her hair showing her face "let him see your face whore."
This kind of things. Make Andras more Cruel and aggressive as he IS. Every simp hate Andras for that so make him more Assholish here. He would not miss the opportunity to throw it at Rowan.
4) I hope there will be Helayna bad ending when she fail to escape.
If Rowan didnt provide her with potions or failed to retrieve her armor.
She get captured by some roaming gang of monster (trolls or ogres) in wasteland.
I wanted to make my comprehensive take on what i think can be improved with Helayna content.
We don't have yet preview of what Winter think he gonna change with Helayna plot line and more importantly how extensive this changes gonna be.
But here is my take
In general
I dislike idea of her completely losing her mind the moment she done the ring and not having at least some self awareness.
Art and writing should try to convey more complex emotions than fuck doll happy getting off.
Art direction from Winter in my opinion should concentrate more on Helayna conflicting emotions.
Her fear, hesitation, shame, self loathing (she basically should be disappointed with herself as she failed to resist) and her hidden desires amplified by the ring influence. Have to show her inner struggle with ring that compels her to obey.
Her desperately trying to get control back over her body and mind. Illustrate her mental collapse basically how she get consumed by lust.
Sommy should try to visualize in her Facial expressions how ring influence breaks her.
I think it will help if during scenes perspectives switch from Rowan to Helayna and back (her Point of view).
Obviously its much harder pulling off but again that is the point of rework and improvement.
That will give some punch and drama to the events.
Its pivotal point in her story Ark i think it needed to get extra attention form Sommy and Winter.
Making the hole thing more emotionally charged.
And speaking about some scenes in particular:
1) Raeve keep
During her capture she break immediately and give no resistance. It feels anti climactic somehow.
Scene with orcs/ knights should be more about her disgust and shame fighting with her lust emanated from the ring.
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Culminating with her finally being defeated by her lust completely by the end of the scene.
Orc should be more abusive. She just killed some of them during castle assault they want to take there revenge on her.
Signaling Rowan that he should step up. That would be more dramatic even tragic.
And not just "its hot in armor" and "please take me i'm yours"
2) Helayna escape
Disproportionate options.
While when Alexia help Helayna escape we get the hole loads of content:
Rowan punishing Alexia/She get thrown to Wulump and then Andras helps himself with her.
On Rowan road on the other hand we get nothing , obviously no one going to do it because there is nothing to see.
Maybe include at least one sex scene on Rowan road?
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Orcs mock her and give her Practice wooden sword and some skimpy armor and urge her to try and fight them and if she wins they will "let her go".
Will be nice and dirty. Obviously she fails and get gang banged. This will illustrate her desperate situation and prompt good natured player to help her escape.
3) Helayna rape dinner.
The only thing we get from this scene is Helayna being humiliated.
Helayna in love with Rowan right? Andras and Jazera aware of that. This why they put this show.
Twins aim at Rowan here not at Helayna. If so lets play this card.
Helayna should be more emotional about being fucked in front of her idolized hero.
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Her trying to hide her face in hands Andras not so gently removing those hands.
She communicate with Rowan asking him not to watch.
Basically more interaction with two people this scene is all about!
She threw her head back while cuming.
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4) I hope there will be Helayna bad ending when she fail to escape.
If Rowan didnt provide her with potions or failed to retrieve her armor.
She get captured by some roaming gang of monster (trolls or ogres) in wasteland.
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