I see that you envisioned different angle to Helayna story.
Your desire to create interwoven story arcs is commendable so in my opinion human interaction in many ways more chaotic and not always driven by pure purpose and meaning.
I'm sure you know what you are doing and i'm looking forward to see how you will rework and advance Helayna arc!
My actual idea about Helayna path with Rowan not claiming her was to emphasis her being abused and powerless.
Some of my points that nothing to do with corruption still stands:
1) I still think that orcs should treat Helayna harshly for killing some of there comrades if Rowan didn't step up and take her under his protection (orcs are not kind of heart in best situations). And that should be more clearly stated or even better illustrated.
2) Helayna escape
It's fact that there is no reward for people choosing path with Rowan helping Helayna escape. I believe there should be something rewarding in this path otherwise what is point for people to do it?
3) And Helayna more directly interacting with Rowan at dinner sex scene while Andras fuck her is also probably right move...
With Rowan getting more and more power Alexia purpose getting less and less meaningful.
She has to step up her game.
Rowan with his growing influence will be the natural unifying point for everyone not happy with Twins rule inside castle.
This is his way of not getting disempowered. His less volatile personality always be a better alternative. Even orcs will more likly turn to Rowan to resolve there problems then to Andras to be mutilated or worse. He is in a perfect position to be a power broker in factions war inside castle (if our story telling evolve to this point in the future).
Your desire to create interwoven story arcs is commendable so in my opinion human interaction in many ways more chaotic and not always driven by pure purpose and meaning.
I'm sure you know what you are doing and i'm looking forward to see how you will rework and advance Helayna arc!
My actual idea about Helayna path with Rowan not claiming her was to emphasis her being abused and powerless.
Some of my points that nothing to do with corruption still stands:
1) I still think that orcs should treat Helayna harshly for killing some of there comrades if Rowan didn't step up and take her under his protection (orcs are not kind of heart in best situations). And that should be more clearly stated or even better illustrated.
2) Helayna escape
It's fact that there is no reward for people choosing path with Rowan helping Helayna escape. I believe there should be something rewarding in this path otherwise what is point for people to do it?
3) And Helayna more directly interacting with Rowan at dinner sex scene while Andras fuck her is also probably right move...
This is for sure a distancing factor.- You guys will see more with Alexia soon here, but I've been very focused on the question of "What is the relationship between Alexia and Rowan's growing position of influence?"
With Rowan getting more and more power Alexia purpose getting less and less meaningful.
She has to step up her game.
It seems obvious... there are always people unhappy with current rulers. And considering twins let's just say problematic temper.As Rowan is both empowered and disempowered, in what ways is he able to sustain his power from the threat of disempowerment? How does this aspect evolve?
Rowan with his growing influence will be the natural unifying point for everyone not happy with Twins rule inside castle.
This is his way of not getting disempowered. His less volatile personality always be a better alternative. Even orcs will more likly turn to Rowan to resolve there problems then to Andras to be mutilated or worse. He is in a perfect position to be a power broker in factions war inside castle (if our story telling evolve to this point in the future).
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