- Apr 28, 2018
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what are your favourites?
RaM it is for me
only thing that's troubling me here is the Elf as MC
I think id preferred bean
but lets see
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RaM it is for me
only thing that's troubling me here is the Elf as MC
I think id preferred bean
but lets see
- Aug 2, 2020
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this looks like it going to be good but i usually wait till the third update so there already a little more content
why not having a bit of incest. there is already a couple allusion to it in the series
can you add futa content to the game plz
- Apr 2, 2018
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I might just be a stickler for grammar, but having one of the preview pictures saying "u" instead of "you" immediately puts me off. Just know it's going to be full of painfully mistranslated dialogue.
- Sep 3, 2017
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Not what i thought when i was looking for "elf porn" but it's welcome nonetheless
The graphics are amazing, some characters are exaggerated a bit but that's ok for a porn game. I'd still prefer the original looks, especially that of Bean but that's just me.
The writing seems a bit poor and rushed, tho. It's good for a first demo, but I'd suggest you hire or collab with a writer and stick to the graphics and coding.
This has tons of potential, I'd love to see more of it.
The writing seems a bit poor and rushed, tho. It's good for a first demo, but I'd suggest you hire or collab with a writer and stick to the graphics and coding.
This has tons of potential, I'd love to see more of it.
- Oct 1, 2017
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Aight after playing it i have to use my writing powers and give you some tips.
Obviously you have problems with grammar and spelling in the english language. That should be fixed ASAP as it ruins the immersion you want the players/readers to have.
Aside from that i have some other advice that hopefully benefits you.
How it should look like
1. Overall story
While you kinda follow the events of the series you fail the introduction part of the characters. You can not and should not assume that everyone watched the series or is familiar with it. You don't need alot for that but one character introduction from another character with sentences like "this is (insert name here)" should be enough.
Also you should introduce a certain direction you wanna go already. What is the main goal? Bang as many chicks as possible? Help the Princess? Save the Kingdom etc. Obviously this will happen in future versions as this is the first but you get the idea.
It lacks direction atm which is ok for the version number.
In future versions you can try to improve on that.
2. Characters.
If Elfo is dumb as example. He will stay dumb. He can have courage or be a sex machine. But if you introduce him as dumb as a brick he must stay as dumb. Do not change the personality or traits introduced characters have EVER. It ruins the immersion you created in the first place.
While it is always good to have a variety of characters they all lack depth and expressions. If you do not wanna animate/draw different facial expressions you can describe what they do in the dialouge box.
"Lovely dress" she said with a big smile on her face. (you get the idea)
For depth i always advice to use the "your mama jokes"! It's the easiest way for beginners to find out if the personality of a character would laugh/ slap you in the face/ reply with an even funnier joke or call you "an imperdinent person" etc.
Basically it helps you to put your characters into categories you can then easier work with.
As examples.
Elfo doesn't understand the joke. Give him half a day.
Bean replies with a funnier one.
Lucy goes overboard with a darker version of the joke.
The King would start losing his shit.
The Queen would call you "imperdinent"
Please do not follow that example but work it out yourself what kind of personality your characters should have. I don't wanna influence you in any way in that regard.
This also helps you to decide on how they interact with each other.
3. Things you want to improve
Overall writing, Character dialouge, Jokes etc. Don't overthink that one just let it flow and go with your gut feelling. Chances are if you like it so do others. Same with disliking something.
BUT only improve one thing per update.
Writing is hard. And it gets harder the more you try to force stuff. If you can make dialouges better in an update you can do so in the next as well. Once you learned a trick you can repeat it. The update after that you might wanna improve story elements or how to describe a scene etc.
Focus on one thing per update. If that is to hard make it two updates etc.
Rome wasn't build in a day and writing takes time to get better at. One step at a time.
4. Sexy time.
Its all about taste, smell, touch and emotions. Use that to your advantage
Keep that in mind when you go for the sexy time scenes. To often we see good games with bad animations (No one cares about animations) that fail horribly at the sex scenes and the dialouge or the describing of wtf is going on. If just one dev would focus more on the writing part and less on the fact that the ass has to have the right angle we would have tons of better games.
As you decided to go for a game with humor you have to find a good balance of sexy time and jokes to set the atmosphere.
Maybe Elfo is a sex machine already and boasts about it proudly. Yet when given the chance he has no idea where his dick should go or what to do with it.
And Lucy makes fun of him because of it. You get the idea.
I stop here as it is late and i already wrote to much already.
This game has lots of potential as the original series was full of dark humor and sexual implications. So i have high hopes for the future
Obviously you have problems with grammar and spelling in the english language. That should be fixed ASAP as it ruins the immersion you want the players/readers to have.
Aside from that i have some other advice that hopefully benefits you.
How it should look like
1. Overall story
While you kinda follow the events of the series you fail the introduction part of the characters. You can not and should not assume that everyone watched the series or is familiar with it. You don't need alot for that but one character introduction from another character with sentences like "this is (insert name here)" should be enough.
Also you should introduce a certain direction you wanna go already. What is the main goal? Bang as many chicks as possible? Help the Princess? Save the Kingdom etc. Obviously this will happen in future versions as this is the first but you get the idea.
It lacks direction atm which is ok for the version number.
In future versions you can try to improve on that.
2. Characters.
If Elfo is dumb as example. He will stay dumb. He can have courage or be a sex machine. But if you introduce him as dumb as a brick he must stay as dumb. Do not change the personality or traits introduced characters have EVER. It ruins the immersion you created in the first place.
While it is always good to have a variety of characters they all lack depth and expressions. If you do not wanna animate/draw different facial expressions you can describe what they do in the dialouge box.
"Lovely dress" she said with a big smile on her face. (you get the idea)
For depth i always advice to use the "your mama jokes"! It's the easiest way for beginners to find out if the personality of a character would laugh/ slap you in the face/ reply with an even funnier joke or call you "an imperdinent person" etc.
Basically it helps you to put your characters into categories you can then easier work with.
As examples.
Elfo doesn't understand the joke. Give him half a day.
Bean replies with a funnier one.
Lucy goes overboard with a darker version of the joke.
The King would start losing his shit.
The Queen would call you "imperdinent"
Please do not follow that example but work it out yourself what kind of personality your characters should have. I don't wanna influence you in any way in that regard.
This also helps you to decide on how they interact with each other.
3. Things you want to improve
Overall writing, Character dialouge, Jokes etc. Don't overthink that one just let it flow and go with your gut feelling. Chances are if you like it so do others. Same with disliking something.
BUT only improve one thing per update.
Writing is hard. And it gets harder the more you try to force stuff. If you can make dialouges better in an update you can do so in the next as well. Once you learned a trick you can repeat it. The update after that you might wanna improve story elements or how to describe a scene etc.
Focus on one thing per update. If that is to hard make it two updates etc.
Rome wasn't build in a day and writing takes time to get better at. One step at a time.
4. Sexy time.
Its all about taste, smell, touch and emotions. Use that to your advantage
Keep that in mind when you go for the sexy time scenes. To often we see good games with bad animations (No one cares about animations) that fail horribly at the sex scenes and the dialouge or the describing of wtf is going on. If just one dev would focus more on the writing part and less on the fact that the ass has to have the right angle we would have tons of better games.
As you decided to go for a game with humor you have to find a good balance of sexy time and jokes to set the atmosphere.
Maybe Elfo is a sex machine already and boasts about it proudly. Yet when given the chance he has no idea where his dick should go or what to do with it.
And Lucy makes fun of him because of it. You get the idea.
I stop here as it is late and i already wrote to much already.
This game has lots of potential as the original series was full of dark humor and sexual implications. So i have high hopes for the future
Hi guys, sorry for the delay. This 2 months we have been thinking about how to make the game better, and working on improving the game following your opinions. So, we are happy to announce that we have started a complete rework of the game, with a new story, a new personality for Elfo, a new hud, new areas and new characters.
As you may have noticed, we are a Spanish team, we are really sorry if the current translation is not perfect, our goal with the translation was to create a small but neccesary window for the english community to peek at our game, now that we know we have a english community, for the new update we will hire a professional translator for ESP to ENG
Thank you very much for your patience, and thank you to our patreons for supporting us in our first game.
As you may have noticed, we are a Spanish team, we are really sorry if the current translation is not perfect, our goal with the translation was to create a small but neccesary window for the english community to peek at our game, now that we know we have a english community, for the new update we will hire a professional translator for ESP to ENG
Thank you very much for your patience, and thank you to our patreons for supporting us in our first game.
As soon as possible,thanks for waiting for the update
- Jul 21, 2018
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