VN Ren'Py Sinful Summer: A Tale of Forbidden Love [Ch.3.3] [Ruykiru]

[Mazurcraft]

any other games like this?

May i recommend DeadMoon Survival

 

[MacLovin']

To throw in my two cents, yes I think brother is a bit too indecisive sometimes and yet it fits with the general approach of the genre Ruykiru is going for in this game. If it’s too much for you don’t play. Funny how guys who’re all about being a manly dude and shit are in fact little b*tches who can’t even stop playing a game they don’t like.
Anyway we get compensation cause the sister is incredibly perverted and it’s hot as fuck.

 

[MacLovin']

Lol. I prefer my women smooth below her clit IRL, or better yet, completely. But most women her age who aren't in or anticipating a sexual relationship are unlikely to keep it trimmed religiously. But, whether or not this is the reason, Helga's bush is well done for a VN, regardless. I also applaud you for sticking to your guns!

You don’t have any women lmao nobody who’s not a virgin says sentences like « I prefer my women smooth »

 

[MacLovin']

Being pathetic, scaredy and undecisive loser is a crime to yourself and to your gender in general. I saw that you try very hard to push your own look about your MC being normal but "just different" from other men, but in reality he is just a horrible failure of a male and nothing else. Its just painful to watch his behavior and reactions. I'm not saying that I myself a representative of the ultimate alpha pack, just an average dude like a lot of others, but I lived life and have enough life experience to tell you that I wouldn't even shake hands with your MC IRL if I knew how much of a pushover beta stands in front of me.

MC's sister, on the other hand, is straightforward and decisive, knows what she wants, and acts on her desires, while MC, in comparison, is just literally empty space without any kind of backbone on his back. What will happen if shit hits the fan in this family? Your MC will definitely not be able to solve serious problems, protect family, or rebuild (metaphorically) anything, and just be sitting in the corner dying from hyperventilation In reality he would never be able to make average girl's panties wet, only his own) That's why a lot of people mentioned your male character in a negative way.

Sure, you can continue to answer every negative message about your MC with your defenses and justifications of MC's every breath, but if the average man where I live would be like MC, then Russians would destroy my country as they claimed in the beggining - in a few days.

Stop complaining like a little bitch and quit playing the game already

 

[Ruykiru]

After playing this game for a while, I came to the conclusion that you could start the novel off with something more active. I would be fine with chopping off Chapter 1 entirely.

Entirely? I was still learning back then but do you think it's really that boring?

There's no way I'd consider doing what you ask, because CH1 is very important for the plot, but if you have any suggestions do tell me cause I'm gonna be reworking a few things (mainly some renders and less narrator).

 

[MacLovin']

Hey Ruykiru! Congrats on the wonderful game. IMO don’t sweat reworking things too much better finish it and move on to an even better game with the lessons learned from this one.
Some of the things that really stand out IMO are:

-Pervert fmc (we need to see more of perverted girls instead of blushing virgins)
- You absolutely nailed the petite body ( I usually like thick girls better in games but sister is perfect)
-Great tension.
-Great and unique approach to incest
-Focus on facial expressions
-Focus on female pleasure

Generally I think what makes
a porn game good is succeeding in creating hot situations. It sounds simple but yet it’s way harder than it seems. IMO if you can do this then average renders don’t even matter.
And this is why a good erotic story/game should have sex at its core. Take Pale Carnations for instance: yes there are other themesbut corruption and sex are central.
I can’t get behind a game having a main story that isn’t sex (and there are actually plenty of these on this site). Telling a proper adventure or detective story that doesn’t have sex at its core for instance imo can only be done at the expense of sexual tension. It’s like trying to tell two stories at the same time.

Anyway your game is good because it succeeds in building sexy situations and its first and foremost a game about sex.

The main negative thing I would say is the narrator. I feel the game is a little too heavy on narration and the narration too often repeats and paraphrases what the characters have already said/thought or shown by their actions. I often end up skipping whole chunks of it and while I do so I know I’m mostly not missing anything important story wise.

Anyway that’s obviously only my opinion so take it with a grain of salt and keep up the excellent work !!!

 

[mytaca]

i fucking hate this bitch erik ong annoying ass

 

[mytaca]

erik, i beg you a pardon, i wasn't familiar with your game

 

[Ruykiru]

erik, i beg you a pardon, i wasn't familiar with your game

The duality of man

 

[Ruykiru]

Hey Ruykiru! Congrats on the wonderful game. IMO don’t sweat reworking things too much better finish it and move on to an even better game with the lessons learned from this one.
Some of the things that really stand out IMO are:

-Pervert fmc (we need to see more of perverted girls instead of blushing virgins)
- You absolutely nailed the petite body ( I usually like thick girls better in games but sister is perfect)
-Great tension.
-Great and unique approach to incest
-Focus on facial expressions
-Focus on female pleasure

Generally I think what makes
a porn game good is succeeding in creating hot situations. It sounds simple but yet it’s way harder than it seems. IMO if you can do this then average renders don’t even matter.
And this is why a good erotic story/game should have sex at its core. Take Pale Carnations for instance: yes there are other themesbut corruption and sex are central.
I can’t get behind a game having a main story that isn’t sex (and there are actually plenty of these on this site). Telling a proper adventure or detective story that doesn’t have sex at its core for instance imo can only be done at the expense of sexual tension. It’s like trying to tell two stories at the same time.

Anyway your game is good because it succeeds in building sexy situations and its first and foremost a game about sex.

Thanks, do update the review if you want

The main negative thing I would say is the narrator. I feel the game is a little too heavy on narration and the narration too often repeats and paraphrases what the characters have already said/thought or shown by their actions. I often end up skipping whole chunks of it and while I do so I know I’m mostly not missing anything important story wise.

Anyway that’s obviously only my opinion so take it with a grain of salt and keep up the excellent work !!!

I toned it down in chapter 1 in 2.6 because it was too verbose yes, do you think it's still too much? (Ignoring the first day, which kinda needs the narrator to explain the backstory)

 

[Ruykiru]

Any love for short-haired Lyna? I think she's getting a haircut

 

[rudy007]

Any love for short-haired Lyna? I think she's getting a haircut
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With those glasses she looks more and more like her mom.

Great update, just finished it.

 

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Any love for short-haired Lyna? I think she's getting a haircut
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[bamachine]

Would like to see us able to rename the three main characters. Make it more personal of a story. I do not have any sisters and well, my mom was nearing 40 when she had me, so by the time I was a teen, even if I were someone who would have incestuous thoughts, to be honest, my mom was well past her prime by then. I still loved her but I never once has a sexy thought about her. But this is "fantasy", so in my fantasy, I want to name my "sister" after a "cousin" I found attractive and her mom, who was not blood related to me but was hot and I might have yanked it to her a time or two, back then.

 

[starbright2]

Entirely? I was still learning back then but do you think it's really that boring?

There's no way I'd consider doing what you ask, because CH1 is very important for the plot, but if you have any suggestions do tell me cause I'm gonna be reworking a few things (mainly some renders and less narrator).

Perfect! We're on the same wavelength! More renders less narration! What you want people to do is slow down and read the damn thing, and the way you do that is a "knuckle to the brain WTF" moment!

 

[MrBaddieBear]

Red flags?) For losers like you, maybe) Your Eric is a mistake of life and natural radar indicating other incredible losers in everyone who didn't see in MC's personality how pathetic he truly is. You can bitch at me all you want, but I already know that you are the same little spineless loser as MC, and OH MY GOSH, LOOK AT THE TIME! You forgot to drink your daily dose of soy milk, massage your prostate for sissy activitites and read a few articles like "Showing feelings is good; modern man should cry more and even in public to ruin bigot stereotypes"

Bro you are moaning and bitching on a site that is centred around sharing and discussing erotic novels that others create. Not quite manly, because "real man" would not touch these "degenerate soy boy" things and would rather just stick to being the alpha male who fucks real women instead left and right every day, don't you think? Yet here you have been, drinking soy milk with all of us ever since July 12th 2018 when you registered here, and you're still here over half a decade later. "Big talk but no action" kinda vibes.

 

[kevlar591]

Hey hello

I admit that for the moment from what I see of this game it's great

it's well staged the approach is really good and well thought out

keep it up it's a change from male protagonists who only have a dick instead of a brain

I love it and for once the sister is not something with deformed and abnormal breasts

Really dude keep it up don't let yourself be influenced

thanks I'm impatiently waiting for the sequel

 

[Ruykiru]

Hé bonjour
j'avoue que pour le moment de ce que je vois de ce jeu c'est génial
c'est bien mis en scène la démarche est vraiment bonne et bien pensée
continue comme ça ça change des protagonistes masculins qui n'ont qu'une bite au lieu d'un cerveau
j'adore et pour une fois la soeur n'est pas quelque chose avec des seins déformés et anormaux
Vraiment mec continue ne te laisse pas influencer
merci j'attends la suite avec impatience

Thanks! I will stay true to my vision, yes. Look forward to more

 

[sigvar]

You don’t have any women lmao nobody who’s not a virgin says sentences like « I prefer my women smooth »

Eh, how do you figure? I haven't been a virgin in shit, over 30 years. Maybe my way of speech isn't something you are used to. My wife always said I talk weird when I call things house coat or bed clothes or britches.

 

[Sitnar]

I have played this game and enjoyed it to the fullest for a while now, feeling that this had a different setup than most of the incest-centered games. It could very well be a classical love story, yet it adds many layers to the characters' doubts and inner struggles, about the moral implications that their actions may hold and the damage it would do to their bonds.
It is one of the few games that I spent time on reading every line and appreciating the work, and even if there are some flaws of course (and some inconsistencies in the pacing, which may be intentional or not). Not every story is perfect, but that makes it even more realistic.
So, keep up the good work, mate !

I have only started the 2.6 update, but I will take my time to savor it !

P.S : Did you blend both versions of Promise (the original and the reprise) in that sweet music during the confession-kiss / reminiscence scene ?

If I heard correctly, then you have all my respect.