HTML Abandoned Sistersitting / Housesitting [Day 11 Scene 01] [i107760]

[215303j]

She should be shorter for sure, you're entirely right. I wrote that height, intending it for the non-patch, but forgot to actually change it when you activate the patch. I'll just let the player enter it from now on, so he can choose himself depending on the age he selects, instead of just offering the default selections. She should be about 150-160cm tall, in my mind.

5'6 equals 167.64cm, that's not that tall.
In fact, to me, that seems rather short and in-line with the character.

Although in the US people seem to be significantly shorter than in Northern Europe.

 

[smite2001]

Hey,

I made the 3D rendered "artwork". I use airquotes because I picked up Daz two weeks ago and it was more of a learning project.

Now, I gifted the image and all the rights to it to the dev to do with it whatever they like.
That said, my lighting and render adjustments in DAZ kinda suck hard, so I made it with light/medium intesity post-render-adjustments in mind - and given the dev has Photoshop, I assumed they just might wanna go to town with the original render.

I think the dev did something to it to make it a bit brighter, but I'd have gone a lot further. I attached my own post-PS version to this message, just to put in on the official record.

I'm still a big fan though and hope my artwork is useful in a way, even if it's just motivation.
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On a different note, I get either an error message or no further hyperlink after the "watch TV / Masturbate" decision, so am I safe to assume that this is the end of the version? (Im 99% sure it is, but I liked the red hyperlink in the previous version I played that confirmed it without a lingering doubt.)
Otherwise great writing again in the new part.

 

[feelsbadman.inc]

Wanted to subscribe but the page is under review

 

[LeCorny]

First time commenting, I really like your writings, and I had no idea I would be hooked on a text-based erotic game lol. Will be watching your developments with great interest.

 

[215303j]

That said, my lighting and render adjustments in DAZ kinda suck hard,

I think it's not bad at all.

The only comment that I could make is that the focus (sharpness) should be on the face and not on the belly.
And I'd increase the depth of field.

At the moment her right arm is already not at all sharp even though it's right next to her face.
Also the upper part of the face is not sharp.

I like bokeh but this is overdoing it.

 

[215303j]

1. The phone calls. I struggled writing them, and considered skipping them entirely and just summarizing the calls. I'd like to know if they work as they are now, or if they need more editing/rewriting.
2. How was the pace of the new content? Did things move too fast, or was it okay?
3. Did you enjoy the new content? I'm making a poll for this, where you can rate the newly added content, I'd love if you would vote on it.

1. I thought the phone calls were fine. One suggestion: I'd not focus too much on the technicalities of becoming an Olympic swimmer. As a back story it's fine and I'm sure you need it for the plot, but some games loose themselves too much in details and become a bit boring. Generally people are here for the porn, not for learning to be a pro athlete.

2. I think it was ok, but I think that if you want romance, you do either need to slow down a little bit, or (maybe better) introduce an event which brings them together. There are reasons why romantic incest doesn't occur that often IRL.

3. Yes, I did enjoy it. There could be slight improvements (see above), I rated it 4, but definately going to follow this.

As for update size, I think it depends on your writing speed. If you give weekly updates like this one, I'd be really happy. If you'd do monthly updates with the size of the initial release, I'm also happy.

 

[i107760]

Wanted to subscribe but the page is under review

Yeah, it's been under review for a while now. Sorry! But no worries, I'm glad to see that you enjoyed the story, that's more important than money.

1. I thought the phone calls were fine. One suggestion: I'd not focus too much on the technicalities of becoming an Olympic swimmer. As a back story it's fine and I'm sure you need it for the plot, but some games loose themselves too much in details and become a bit boring. Generally people are here for the porn, not for learning to be a pro athlete.

2. I think it was ok, but I think that if you want romance, you do either need to slow down a little bit, or (maybe better) introduce an event which brings them together. There are reasons why romantic incest doesn't occur that often IRL.

3. Yes, I did enjoy it. There could be slight improvements (see above), I rated it 4, but definately going to follow this.

As for update size, I think it depends on your writing speed. If you give weekly updates like this one, I'd be really happy. If you'd do monthly updates with the size of the initial release, I'm also happy.

1. I agree with this, and will try. But I like it as a device to make sure they get to spend a lot of time together, more than they normally would. Problem is I like swimming a little too much, maybe. I'll try to restrain myself from getting bogged down in too many details.

2. I understand that some believe it went a bit too fast this week, but I think people need to keep in mind that we are seeing it from the brother's point of view. His sister does not see him in any romantic light yet, and is not aware of his thoughts as he does things. I do have a story line planned to start her seeing him in a different light and bring them together. How good it is, that I don't know yet, you guys will have to read it and let me know ^^.

3. I rated it a 4 myself, so that's in line with what I thought of it. I'll keep an eye on the poll, and try to improve things a little when I revise day three after I finish writing the day, but I don't want to spend too much time rewriting all the scenes (again). I'm not sure if I can deliver at that schedule, but I'll try my best. I does take me a while generally, to first plan out a day's content, then write it and edit it. But I'll try to do one of these updates per week.

And speaking of the poll, I'd really appreciate getting feedback from the people voting 3 or less. Feel free to send me a PM, I don't bite. I'd like to incorporate your feedback when I revise the content, if you don't speak up, I can't fix the problems you have with it.

 

[i107760]

Hey,

I made the 3D rendered "artwork". I use airquotes because I picked up Daz two weeks ago and it was more of a learning project.

Now, I gifted the image and all the rights to it to the dev to do with it whatever they like.
That said, my lighting and render adjustments in DAZ kinda suck hard, so I made it with light/medium intesity post-render-adjustments in mind - and given the dev has Photoshop, I assumed they just might wanna go to town with the original render.

I think the dev did something to it to make it a bit brighter, but I'd have gone a lot further. I attached my own post-PS version to this message, just to put in on the official record.

I'm still a big fan though and hope my artwork is useful in a way, even if it's just motivation.
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On a different note, I get either an error message or no further hyperlink after the "watch TV / Masturbate" decision, so am I safe to assume that this is the end of the version? (Im 99% sure it is, but I liked the red hyperlink in the previous version I played that confirmed it without a lingering doubt.)
Otherwise great writing again in the new part.

I already liked your image, and just made it a little brighter and increased the vibrance, But your edit does look better. I'll be using it to replace the cover art on my SubscribeStar, so it's not for motivation only. Thanks again for making it!

The error is indeed a bug, but also at the end of the content, so I did not attach a version that has it fixed. It's supposed to not give you an option to advance to the next day scene, making clear that it's the end of the current content, but that bug kind of messed it up.

EDIT: I added my signatures to the FAQ in the second post, along with the code to use them on F95Zone. So if anyone still has space in their signature, and likes my game, I would love to see them being used.

 

[BigDaddyDom]

Nothing makes me happier than reading that. Thanks for the support.


To turn it on, follow my instructions in the OP. (Click on the "." after "Start Game"). To turn it off, start a new game, you can use the "Scene Select" on the settings screen to go to where you were reading before.

EDIT: Next update, the game will ask you for a "code" at the start of the game. You will only have to enter "incest" then, making it easier.

if this game is just text where did the pictures of the sleeping girl in blue in your sig come from?

 

[i107760]

if this game is just text where did the pictures of the sleeping girl in blue in your sig come from?

smite2001 made it for me, see these posts: https://f95zone.to/threads/sistersitting-v0-6-6-i107760.61206/page-8#post-4165586 and https://f95zone.to/threads/sistersitting-v0-6-6-i107760.61206/page-8#post-4167960. It does not mean I will start adding renders to the game, my FAQ has more information on my plans for the game (second post in this thread).

 

[BigDaddyDom]

Hey,

I made the 3D rendered "artwork". I use airquotes because I picked up Daz two weeks ago and it was more of a learning project.

Now, I gifted the image and all the rights to it to the dev to do with it whatever they like.
That said, my lighting and render adjustments in DAZ kinda suck hard, so I made it with light/medium intesity post-render-adjustments in mind - and given the dev has Photoshop, I assumed they just might wanna go to town with the original render.

I think the dev did something to it to make it a bit brighter, but I'd have gone a lot further. I attached my own post-PS version to this message, just to put in on the official record.

I'm still a big fan though and hope my artwork is useful in a way, even if it's just motivation.
---------
On a different note, I get either an error message or no further hyperlink after the "watch TV / Masturbate" decision, so am I safe to assume that this is the end of the version? (Im 99% sure it is, but I liked the red hyperlink in the previous version I played that confirmed it without a lingering doubt.)
Otherwise great writing again in the new part.

ooh more renders like this please!

 

[drud]

5'6 equals 167.64cm, that's not that tall.
In fact, to me, that seems rather short and in-line with the character.

Although in the US people seem to be significantly shorter than in Northern Europe.

At the age of the patch she should be around 150cm tall, any taller and she would be over six feet at 18. My wife is shorter than the girl in this story.
This is the average height to weight ratio of females worldwide.

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If i was to go by what the chart states she would be a giant at her age.

 

[smite2001]

ooh more renders like this please!

Here you go.
Julia (aged 18) being a little naughty.

Had to change the hair, the other one only worked with that particular sleeping pose.

 

[Deleted member 2744443]

At the age of the patch she should be around 150cm tall, any taller and she would be over six feet at 18. My wife is shorter than the girl in this story.
This is the average height to weight ratio of females worldwide.

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If i was to go by what the chart states she would be a giant at her age.

Unfortunately, many school children do not understand math, even with a conversion. They will believe what they are told, unless it is told to them by someone they have been told to disrespect and ignore. Not many with creative minds, nor the ability to reason through a problem. 59 inches is not close to six feet. Six feet is 72 inches thank you. Sixty inches is five feet tall. A tall woman, is at least 5'10" tall, which is approximately 177.8cm.

 

[i107760]

As said before, her being this tall was a mistake on my part. It's been fixed in the next version, defaults will be: 5.5 foot tall at 18yo, 4.75 foot tall at 13yo. And you will be able to enter her height yourself, should you wish so (If you decide on a different age, and want to make her height fit). Her being that tall, that young would certainly be strange.

Not that I don't appreciate the corrections, just wanted to make that clear since maybe some people didn't read. Plan is to post next update, complete day three, next Thursday. I've finished writing the first draft, and am working on revisions. Not quite going to be 5000 words though, since I wrote a bit too much for the update I did for v0.6.6, but it will include revisions for all scenes from day three. Still looking for people that did not enjoy the new content, to PM me or post here to give me their feedback, so I can incorporate that feedback now that I'm revising.

 

[Deleted member 2744443]

As said before, her being this tall was a mistake on my part. It's been fixed in the next version, defaults will be: 5.5 foot tall at 18yo, 4.75 foot tall at 13yo. And you will be able to enter her height yourself, should you wish so (If you decide on a different age, and want to make her height fit). Her being that tall, that young would certainly be strange.

Not that I don't appreciate the corrections, just wanted to make that clear since maybe some people didn't read. Plan is to post next update, complete day three, next Thursday. I've finished writing the first draft, and am working on revisions. Not quite going to be 5000 words though, since I wrote a bit too much for the update I did for v0.6.6, but it will include revisions for all scenes from day three. Still looking for people that did not enjoy the new content, to PM me or post here to give me their feedback, so I can incorporate that feedback now that I'm revising.

I like tall women, personally, it is refreshing. I used to attend the ladies basketball team practices and games... My daughter is six foot tall herself... I am taller.

 

[i107760]

I like tall women, personally, it is refreshing. I used to attend the ladies basketball team practices and games... My daughter is six foot tall herself... I am taller.

I respect that, I quite like amazonians myself That is also why I let you customize her height, so that you can simply choose yourself what you like. Everyone likes different things, I'm trying to give people customization when possible.

 

[Karnewarrior]

I prefer my girls short. That said, when it comes to girls in that age range height can vary wildly. It's entirely possible that the 160 cm she's at at 13 is her full adult height. Or she could keep growing and become a seriously amazonian woman.
Personally though I was imagining her as small and petite, as a contrast to Sarah who I imagined as being almost at her adult height already, to go with her boobs - kids growth spurts are weird so I've seen that stuff happen multiple times as myself and my sisters grew up.

 

[Deleted member 2744443]

Since you asked nicely...

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I prefer my girls short. That said, when it comes to girls in that age range height can vary wildly. It's entirely possible that the 160 cm she's at at 13 is her full adult height. Or she could keep growing and become a seriously amazonian woman.
Personally though I was imagining her as small and petite, as a contrast to Sarah who I imagined as being almost at her adult height already, to go with her boobs - kids growth spurts are weird so I've seen that stuff happen multiple times as myself and my sisters grew up.

I agree, my sister and I used to take annual measurments, one year I grew five inches, and she grew 3.5" that same year. But it varies, genetics, environment, nutrition all likely contributers, and excercize, not smoking...