2 things in my opinion,
the walkthrough is just way to big, nobody wants to spend more time reading the walkthrough than playing the game, the simplest way of fixing it is to turn it into a more bullet point style walkthrough where you just list the requirements for doing each of the event and the choices that have consequences and what they are
and second,
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this is not good, when you have a choice, it should clearly state what the choices are and what they do, whats the point of a walkthrough that does not explain what you need to do and what are the consequences of your choices, < it may be revealed later in the walkthrough but refer to the first point on this, i'm not gonna read a light novel detailing the game before playing it, i'm gonna use it as I go along > also when listing the choices use the exact wordage of the choices, that way, people who need simple answers can just use crtl + f to search for the choice in the walkthrough and don't have to waste time searching through it or bothering you with questions