HTML Small Town Dreamer [Ch.1.0 Public] [sicklycynic]

[sicklycynic]

What's the incest content? I may have missed it.

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[sicklycynic]

Hello sicklycynic,

I just played the latest update and I like it. There are a few typos. There may be others, but I didn't write them all down, as they are so few of them, which is really great. Warning, english is not my first langage, so I might be wrong with the typos.

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Also, I am wondering why:
- you sometimes add text at the end of the current passage instead of creating a new passage? A really prefer to see the new text in a new passage. Each time you add text at the end, I don't get it and start reading again at the top. This is really confusing.

- how do you choose the words that are used for the link to the next passage? Is there some meaning in this choice? Why not always some of the last words of the passage?

Great job!

Heyy thank you for pointing these out. <3 I'll recheck.

I think you’re referring to all the linkreplace stuff? Idk it’s just the feels at this point. xD It’s really supposed to make the read easier by making it not too bulky at once.

I try to find words that are actions or feelings of the protagonist. I also try to avoid linking a part of a quote. I know what you mean though, it’s kinda distracting isn’t it?

I’ll keep these in mind going forward. Thanks!

 

[firefall132]

Not a ton of content in the current version after the relaunch huh? Interesting set up at least and the character writing all seems solid.

 

[sicklycynic]

Not a ton of content in the current version after the relaunch huh? Interesting set up at least and the character writing all seems solid.

Hey thanks! Yeah not a lot but the rewrites shouldn't take long.

 

[sicklycynic]

I don't usually get this error message. Should I be concerned?

Oh that's odd. Could be a browser thing. It's just the html file now maybe that's why.

 

[Amber69]

Oh that's odd. Could be a browser thing. It's just the html file now maybe that's why.

Thank you, it worked now

 

[JEGEK]

Good rewrite even if I thought the original was great aswell, hopefully it wont take too long to get through the rest of the rewrite and we can get to new stuffs

 

[I-Love-Adventure]

nice game thank you

 

[wpsdynix]

Very promising but hopefully doesn't turn into a dime a dozen. Best of luck to developer.

 

[_DarkDesires_]

Text-based games are cool, but there's certainly merit to a 'female agent' style paper doll system, that provides some visual gratification. Especially when the start is as non-sexually mundane as here

 

[str8up]

Kind of a dick move not having a back button especially considering end of content without any kind of warning Dev

 

[Wildfoxy69]

Kind of a dick move not having a back button especially considering end of content without any kind of warning Dev

It turns out right click works as a back button

 

[sicklycynic]

Kind of a dick move not having a back button especially considering end of content without any kind of warning Dev

It turns out right click works as a back button

Yes, it does. Long press on mobile. This is mentioned near the start.

It had a back button in the previous version but for some reason I couldn’t figure out how to style it, so I gave up on it entirely. Later, it was easier to add the right-click function anyway.

What'd you guys think overall?

 

[sicklycynic]

Text-based games are cool, but there's certainly merit to a 'female agent' style paper doll system, that provides some visual gratification. Especially when the start is as non-sexually mundane as here

Honestly, yes. But I can’t draw for shit, so. :’) Hopefully I can add more images to bridge the gap.

 

[moogoo]

This would be so good with images,

 

[chu2834822]

no group sex？ false tag