In terms of the story, it honestly feels like a badly written romance novel. I don't mind the dialogue so much, but the internal thoughts are generally unnecessary. There's a lot to say with just an simple expression or a glance. But then again, that's a complaint I'll have too, because it's feels so... clunky? One of the first scenes is of the guy walking in and looking side to side, and I'm sitting there going, this feels soooo slow! That feeling never really went away either, as so often it felt like I had to click a hundred times just to get through a simple scene. Why is it not a simple one click and you advance the novel? Also, is there not a way to just pan a view instead of having to click ten different times to see someone's body?
That being said, I do rather like the renders. The main LI's hair isn't quite to my taste, but otherwise very cute! I enjoy the chemistry between them, and despite the weird overall aloofness, I think the storyline has potential to be quite charming.
That said, I didn't understand some of the story choices, and I'm not happy about the inability to skip certain parts, mainly the urination. That's a big turnoff for me, and not being able to skip through that and being forced to watch the entirety of it was displeasing. I also didn't understand the interracial scene that had nothing to do with the MC or LI. It didn't feel like it built tension or anything, just like it was a gratuitous addition that didn't actually contribute anything to the story. (Also, Glom!!! ?Huh? What? LOL) Bit odd to see her rubbing through jeans when she's in a semi private stall and just just reach inside and touch herself properly. Why were they holding hands walking through the place when she stopped by the shop to view the construction after his people went home? Feels a bit romantic even though there's no reason for that yet. Then suddenly they're kissing and then a sudden transition to sitting down on the floor instead of an upraised surface? Now we have a conversation where he talks about her need to have control of a situation and how he is so attracted to her but can't be in a relationship with someone? Why? He kissed her after they confessed attraction, and now he's going deep and presumptive. Didn't understand the very last line, he invites her to his place, she accepts and says she'll follow him, and then she sees the hurt on his face? ABOUT WHAT? She's going over to his place presumably for sex and a good time, and he's hurt? Things just don't make sense sometimes, again, badly written romance novel.
The yellow text is kind of off-putting, I would like the option to have different fonts, would just be easier to read. Also strange no to be able to go back and view a prior scene or pic. This is especially noticeable when I'm just trying to click to get through a scene because I can't tell how many clicks it takes to move past one, and then I click one too many times and miss what looks to be a good pic. Also, Derek or Desmond? Let's get some continuity checking done here.
Overall, I'll say two and a half stars thus far. I like the way it looks, and I want to like the characters. The descriptions and internal thoughts get in the way, and the clunky story advancement and disjointed story choices keep me from putting this on the list to watch out for. I kinda hope I'll run into it again in a much better polished form.
That being said, I do rather like the renders. The main LI's hair isn't quite to my taste, but otherwise very cute! I enjoy the chemistry between them, and despite the weird overall aloofness, I think the storyline has potential to be quite charming.
That said, I didn't understand some of the story choices, and I'm not happy about the inability to skip certain parts, mainly the urination. That's a big turnoff for me, and not being able to skip through that and being forced to watch the entirety of it was displeasing. I also didn't understand the interracial scene that had nothing to do with the MC or LI. It didn't feel like it built tension or anything, just like it was a gratuitous addition that didn't actually contribute anything to the story. (Also, Glom!!! ?Huh? What? LOL) Bit odd to see her rubbing through jeans when she's in a semi private stall and just just reach inside and touch herself properly. Why were they holding hands walking through the place when she stopped by the shop to view the construction after his people went home? Feels a bit romantic even though there's no reason for that yet. Then suddenly they're kissing and then a sudden transition to sitting down on the floor instead of an upraised surface? Now we have a conversation where he talks about her need to have control of a situation and how he is so attracted to her but can't be in a relationship with someone? Why? He kissed her after they confessed attraction, and now he's going deep and presumptive. Didn't understand the very last line, he invites her to his place, she accepts and says she'll follow him, and then she sees the hurt on his face? ABOUT WHAT? She's going over to his place presumably for sex and a good time, and he's hurt? Things just don't make sense sometimes, again, badly written romance novel.
The yellow text is kind of off-putting, I would like the option to have different fonts, would just be easier to read. Also strange no to be able to go back and view a prior scene or pic. This is especially noticeable when I'm just trying to click to get through a scene because I can't tell how many clicks it takes to move past one, and then I click one too many times and miss what looks to be a good pic. Also, Derek or Desmond? Let's get some continuity checking done here.
Overall, I'll say two and a half stars thus far. I like the way it looks, and I want to like the characters. The descriptions and internal thoughts get in the way, and the clunky story advancement and disjointed story choices keep me from putting this on the list to watch out for. I kinda hope I'll run into it again in a much better polished form.
