VN Ren'Py Stray Incubus [S2 Ch.2a] [Flynn974]

[JohnF95zone]

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it could've been more "the dead girl's grudge/regrets are causing the curse and Zycris is able to lift the curse by getting her to move on."
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It would be less believable (or realistic) if somehow Zycris, a very low level ninja is able to lift a curse. Not to mention that the story needs to change because in the original version the curse is neither caused by grudges nor regrets, but rather placed upon by Athena. Chapter 4 is mainly to introduce Athena and MC's hidden power, more than anything else.

Admittedly I got baited into playing this because of the lesbian tag since I've been pleasantly-surprised by good girl/girl content in male protag games before, and was a little disappointed when there was just the one scene of Serena and Daiana, but it's not really an issue. Hopefully we get more girl/girl stuff in the future though, even if it's minimal, but a scene of peeping on Candy and Torr together just seems like an obvious winner.

You can follow the posts from here for lesbian related posts. In short it is not a theme of the game. However, the idea of voyuerism (avoidable/preventable) on Candy and Torr which can lead to threesome with the MC sounds good. Although it is not established that Torr and Candy are bisexuals or bi-curious.

I'm also hoping for more femdom content, the slight mommy-dom feel to the scene with Serena in the bath was fantastic and something like that with Seira would be great as well. (If Misty got a femdom scene I'd probably ascend to heaven...)

Misty femdom does sound good but it contradicts her personality completely. However, it could be made such that her 'beast mode' when mixed with Incubus magic can lead to her being a 'beast' in the bedroom (femdom). Although this is great, but the other Misty fans will want the shy submissive Misty in the bedroom as opposed to her 'beast' mode . This will make her sex scenes to have 2 variations. I think Flynn974 will regret the decision to make Misty a LI (which was not planned originally).

 

[Bill Temple]

Here, also read the related posts to learn more. Short answer is, not the entire game is presented in "Dutch angle". Cheers.

I'm with jly on that angle.

 

[TMKC]

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Can you add others links like mega or pixel instead of mixdrops

 

[maybelaterd00]

the game keeps closing every time when i get on the part were i am with the bounty hunter on the bed had to skip that hole scene is anyone other then me having this problem? if so can you please tell me how you fixed it? thank you

 

[icollectsouls]

It would be less believable (or realistic) if somehow Zycris, a very low level ninja is able to lift a curse.

But it's more believable (or realistic) that a "very low level ninja," in your words, is able to kill a servant of a goddess? Doesn't really seem like there's much of a "power level" difference between the two, and Zycris had already shown off different powers up to that point anyways, so curse-lifting isn't a huge stretch when it comes to "things Zycris could probably do with his powers."

Not to mention that the story needs to change because in the original version the curse is neither caused by grudges nor regrets, but rather placed upon by Athena.

I... realize that? I was just personally disappointed when what was seemingly some kind of "ghost story" turned out to be something else entirely. It's not like I'm trying to say that the story should've gone an entirely different direction.

You can follow the posts from here for lesbian related posts. In short it is not a theme of the game.

Yeah, I realize that too, but the game still has "lesbian" in both the f95zone tags and the tags typed out by the dev in the first post, which was what mostly got me curious about the game in the first place... and I wasn't about to spoil myself on story or anything by diving too deep into the thread of a game I haven't played yet.

However, the idea of voyuerism (avoidable/preventable) on Candy and Torr which can lead to threesome with the MC sounds good. Although it is not established that Torr and Candy are bisexuals or bi-curious.

Personally I'd kinda prefer if a girl/girl scene stayed as a girl/girl scene and wasn't just an opportunity for the male protag to sling cock, but I guess it'd make more sense for a game like this to have it be a threesome opportunity.

Misty femdom does sound good but it contradicts her personality completely. However, it could be made such that her 'beast mode' when mixed with Incubus magic can lead to her being a 'beast' in the bedroom (femdom). Although this is great, but the other Misty fans will want the shy submissive Misty in the bedroom as opposed to her 'beast' mode . This will make her sex scenes to have 2 variations. I think Flynn974 will regret the decision to make Misty a LI (which was not planned originally).

I'm just the type that prefers my monster girls, especially spider ladies, to be dominant (as they should be) so my bias is showing here. I'm not sure it "contradicts her personality completely" though, it's not like we've even had an h-scene with her in the first place, so who's to say she can't be humble in the streets but assertive in the sheets?

 

[Nobles]

Nobles

• However, you can't say that he is a total saint either because he (at least in my playthrough) had sex with a married woman

Interesting, now thats my language ^_~ As its just statement, I dont know how it plays out in game. But if its corrupting the girl and stealing the girl from another engagement/relationship. Totally my cup of tea ^_~ Totally in the expectation of an incubus too^_~. Also fine if the "corruption" is just the girls being near and drawn into him. It'd work like some charm/lust aura ? It would be part of his power.

Him thinking hes an elf, but is actually an incubus, really gives another interesting premise. Especially on the pretense hes growing into adulthood. Feels like it could be funny at the same time. Wil just have to play and see how this goes.

I dont mind him not being evil, thats all fine. But just dont want to have to sit through him acting like a good little boy doing what hes told <.<. Just hoping he be true to his demonic nature. even if he decides he wants to help the people close to him. Or protect his girls ^_~

Thank you for the replies

 

[Flynn974]

the game keeps closing every time when i get on the part were i am with the bounty hunter on the bed had to skip that hole scene is anyone other then me having this problem? if so can you please tell me how you fixed it? thank you

Weird...
The whole game closes, or does it throw you back to the main menu?

 

[mrttao]

Yup. Misty is now an LI. And the last one at that.

was she always planned to be one.
or was it due to how positive player reaction to her was that got her promoted from side character to LI?

 

[JohnF95zone]

But it's more believable (or realistic) that a "very low level ninja," in your words, is able to kill a servant of a goddess? Doesn't really seem like there's much of a "power level" difference between the two, and Zycris had already shown off different powers up to that point anyways, so curse-lifting isn't a huge stretch when it comes to "things Zycris could probably do with his powers."

Actually, the best tactical decision during encounter with Fury and Athena is to Leave because the MC is definitely unable to defeat Fury. However, if the player choose to Fight, then plot armor will ensure the MC wins and reveals some more about MC's hidden Incubus superpower.
At that stage, the MC is not even aware and have no control over his hidden Incubus superpower (even after Chapter 6, he still cannot control it at will but he is aware of it). The superpower awakens or manifests when Fury pierced his torso or abdomen, spooked Athena that she left, and MC fainted shortly after.
The player and MC still have no idea what this superpowers truly are, and to make curse-lifting as one of its capabilities (believable), means the MC had learned about it, have some kind of control or mastery over it. That part needs to be explained, which requires changes to the story.
The plot so far indicates that MC's hidden Incubus superpowers are triggered or manifested by 'accidents' and not at will (at least not yet), but he will have mastery over it later so that he can face off the antagonist(s).
All being said, I just like Chapter 4 how it is (storywise) and I think it is really great.

I'm just the type that prefers my monster girls, especially spider ladies, to be dominant (as they should be) so my bias is showing here. I'm not sure it "contradicts her personality completely" though, it's not like we've even had an h-scene with her in the first place, so who's to say she can't be humble in the streets but assertive in the sheets?

Honestly, I am not that familiar with femdom and most adult games I played don't really have it, so I guess you are right that her personality doesn't matter. I am aware that there are timid girls that are wild in the bedroom but never heard of them being femdom, especially when considering the femdom tags on this site is quite specific. Nonetheless, there will always players that want their LIs to be of certain types, and some others want the opposite.

 

[JohnF95zone]

was she always planned to be one.
or was it due to how positive player reaction to her was that got her promoted from side character to LI?

This is what I think, Misty has always been a candidate for (secondary*) LI from the start, but Flynn974 is still unsure about making her as one. However, seeing the positive reactions seal the deal.

The narrative of Misty joining the Ninja Village is just natural, cafeteria girl needing help, her owning cafe, releasing her father into the wild, being alone and she is also relatable to the MC in a way.

However, if she wasn't planned, then it is still fine with me. So far, all the characters (especially the women) are pretty much unique and I care for (most of) them. So, having her close at the Ninja Village is a big plus in my book.

*Secondary LI has minor influence or role with regards to the plot, for example Nyxie, Fransisca.

 

[maybelaterd00]

Weird...
The whole game closes, or does it throw you back to the main menu?

the whole game shuts down no error report just close down and thank you for the reply. and thank you for the game keep up the great work

 

[Flynn974]

was she always planned to be one.
or was it due to how positive player reaction to her was that got her promoted from side character to LI?

I was always planning to add one more, whom the MC will meet on his travels. And since I spent loads of time designing her and people seemed to like her, I though: might as well.

 

[Flynn974]

the whole game shuts down no error report just close down and thank you for the reply. and thank you for the game keep up the great work

Thanks! Could you point out exactly at one point this happens during the scene? Also, did you have similar problems at other animated scene sections of the game?

 

[maybelaterd00]

Thanks! Could you point out exactly at one point this happens during the scene? Also, did you have similar problems at other animated scene sections of the game?

it happens when i take the bounty hunter to the bed room the scene that it happens at is when i am on the bed with her and she is riding me it just shuts down then and i had no trouble on any other animated scene on the next screen it shuts down

 

[Antonie van Leeuwenhoek]

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Great job there, but mixdrop is such a mess

 

[YogSothoth1982]

Admittedly I got baited into playing this because of the lesbian tag since I've been pleasantly-surprised by good girl/girl content in male protag games before, and was a little disappointed when there was just the one scene of Serena and Daiana, but it's not really an issue. Hopefully we get more girl/girl stuff in the future though, even if it's minimal, but a scene of peeping on Candy and Torr together just seems like an obvious winner.
I'm also hoping for more femdom content, the slight mommy-dom feel to the scene with Serena in the bath was fantastic and something like that with Seira would be great as well. (If Misty got a femdom scene I'd probably ascend to heaven...)

I hope that all lesbian scenes between LIs are avoidable and not just skippable like Serena and Daiana.

I haven't seen any of Serena's scenes (as far as I know she has 2, I don't know if more, one with Daiana and another with the MC in the bathroom). Since she's not a LI, I'm not interested in her scenes and have avoided doing them.

Regarding femdom: Fortunately, the scenes that we don't like can be avoided.

 

[Flynn974]

it happens when i take the bounty hunter to the bed room the scene that it happens at is when i am on the bed with her and she is riding me it just shuts down then and i had no trouble on any other animated scene on the next screen it shuts down

Yup. I found the issue. Because several animated scene were in succession here, and they're all cpu intensive videos, and because I didn't put a command to hide previous videos before showing new ones during this scene, your PC was technically playing all of them simultaneously with the last one played on top (kinda...)
I noticed because my cpu usage was rising during this scene and hit 100% at the end, so I guess your pc shut the game down because it was draining your cpu...
Anyway, I fixed it. I'll upload a patch for this and another issue that was pointed on discord in a few minutes.
Thank you!

 

[maybelaterd00]

Yup. I found the issue. Because several animated scene were in succession here, and they're all cpu intensive videos, and because I didn't put a command to hide previous videos before showing new ones during this scene, your PC was technically playing all of them simultaneously with the last one played on top (kinda...)
I noticed because my cpu usage was rising during this scene and hit 100% at the end, so I guess your pc shut the game down because it was draining your cpu...
Anyway, I fixed it. I'll upload a patch for this and another issue that was pointed on discord in a few minutes.
Thank you!
thank you for all your help great game keep at it

 

[mjapper]

great game can't wait for more content

 

[Zoran89]

Not bad. Not amazing, but not bad either.

The writing is a little on the nose, especially in the beginning, you can see that dev doesn't have a lot of experience writing, so it would require some generous amounts of polish here and there, but for what it is - not awful at all.

I like the world building - like someone has already said, the use of Greek mythology and Christian demons is a little weird, but at least it is unique. God only knows, we need some originality in our entertainment. I did find the "Naruto-esque" ninjas slightly cringe in the beginning (by the end I got used to them I guess), but that's because I hate Naruto itself, so...
I also liked the adventure/mission/quest-style storytelling so far. It might eventually turn too schematic in the future, but for now it works quite well.

I had a bit of an issue with the infodumps, I noticed myself skipping through some of them. Also, the "quirky" dev commentaries/4th wall breaks... Personally, I would make them go. Especially considering you still have a line saying "You haven't finished chapter 6 yet" in the script. I would say you should have more faith in your audience that they will pick up stuff on their own, even if it's not stated outright... but it's a tricky balance.

Also, you might want to look into adding BGM. Reading this in silence isn't really bad, but adding some good BGM can give your story that extra flair.

Other than that, I feel like there are some issues in terms of overall story/narrative structure - a trivial example of this is when Tamara talks to you about how you are being cared for. If it was me, I wouldn't have made her spill her beans about her backstory back then, rather I would've just made her leave an ambiguous comment, build some mystery/tension around what she meant by it, then made the topic of her parents (was it?) pop up several chapters later where she's the centre of attention, for a bigger emotional payout. As it is, I feel like you've robbed yourself of a chance to build up drama around her character by spilling the beans too early. It might be just me, though - maybe you have some ideas up your sleeve, I don't know.

My point is, taking into consideration what purpose does every scene have in terms of story structure and audience's emotional reception can help you polish the quality of your storytelling, so you may want to look into that in the future if you haven't already.

Overall it's fun for what it is, I'd give it... low-end 7/10. Not very high on my watchlist, but I might come back to check out the updates in a year or so.