From what i've read you plan to have a dialogue system, if a few options to choose from. I don't know what your plan is for that. If it is for flavor text it should be fine as it is, but if you have time for it I think having a path you can choose based on your choices might be nice, depending on how you want your story to go. Aside from that if you could implement a scene for post capture and post domination with a now submissive Main Character (Grace) I think it would be a nice top off for the lose screen after getting captured. Lastly, please have the controls written down somewhere. Its the first demo, so I am fairly certain you addressed it by now, but if now I request you do so.