VN Ren'Py STWA: Unbroken [Book 1 Steam] [STWAdev]

[plain77]

An excellent example of character writing.

The story is interesting and not overly complicated, with rare display emotional depth not really shown in the VN space.

The biggest praise I can give is that the character writing. Conversations don't read like MCU one liners which is always welcome, and actually come across authentic. While yes most events are defined within the MC's orbit, each character has something to do. They actually interact with each other and not just to talk about how wonderful the MC is.

If I had one "critique" it would be Viridiana, not her character but her model, specifically her face. Maybe this is a me thing but the character looks a little uncanny valley next to the rest of the cast.

Overall great game can't wait for more.

 

[Skeltom]

Timejumps should totally happen. They make sense in this VN as a fighter is not supposed to fight every month. MC needs a couple of fights to become champion and then fight Alistair (or maybe some other guy in case Alistair reinjures).

Also, I think the frenchie will look even better with shoulder-length hair. Some of the alternative hairs used for when her hair is "wet" already kind of gives you an idea of how she could look.

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I like her short hair myself. As for time jumps, it doesn't necessarily even need to be a jump forward. It could just as easily be a little back story like with Kana. She had long hair last time Vi saw her so it's possible it's about what happened before they met back up, why she chose to cut her hair even. Go hard into "Ines", rebel against her distant parents?

Edit: Got it backwards. Tina is the front.

 

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[Dr.TSoni]

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It's about time we paid attention to the best girl in the game

 

[Justaphase]

It's about time we paid attention to the best girl in the game

Best pussy in the game?

 

[maroek]

I just finished the game (the latest update) and wow, it's probably one of the best nsfw game I've played like ever. The mc, the story and the characters are phenomenal. Els is the best LI for the mc imo, followed by Kana and Ines. I didn't go on Amrit and Vi path because honestly their relationship felt like more of a brother-sister relationship to me and having a sexual relationship with them (especially Vi) wouldn't sit right by me.

The mc is extremely mature and likeable and his backstory is really tragic, his writing alone would make A+ tier but even the side characters shine. I want to know his full story with Davis and Mcnab

Other than that I don't know what else to say, I will say that the story and characters are phenomenal again, lol.

9/10 (only because it's not complete yet) One thing that I would like to be improved is the animations and Elspeth's nips to be bigger

Amen to that. I've been telling the same things, except Kana, since the get go. This is by far the best VN, with the best MC, with the best LI.

 

[Catkinglive]

Cool , good game

 

[cxx]

why is he unhappy? he got got pussy as a date.

 

[Prokopije]

Maybe doesn't like 'em hairy

 

[TGafy]

A romantic Valentine's dinner for two

 

[Skeltom]

If I had one "critique" it would be Viridiana, not her character but her model, specifically her face. Maybe this is a me thing but the character looks a little uncanny valley next to the rest of the cast.

It does seen a little off. I think it's her eye sockets or cheek bones, some expressions kind of make her look like an insect to me. A little amusing considering her nickname.

 

[maroek]

It does seen a little off. I think it's her eye sockets or cheek bones, some expressions kind of make her look like an insect to me. A little amusing considering her nickname.

She has all the features to be gorgeous, but she still manages to be ugly, like bulldog ugly.

 

[Trojaner]

She has all the features to be gorgeous, but she still manages to be ugly, like bulldog ugly.

 

[Maccabbee]

She has all the features to be gorgeous, but she still manages to be ugly, like bulldog ugly.

Share a pic of your true love, let us compare?

 

[mike12013]

Holding out hope for a Reena LI at some point

 

[maroek]

Holding out hope for a Reena LI at some point

I don't think that's a realistic expectation. At this point she may be just friend with benefits. However, I guess they may end up together at the end of the story, if Valentine doesn't go after anyone else, including side chicks.

 

[maroek]

Share a pic of your true love, let us compare?

Els and Vi share similar features. Both of the are red heads. Both of them have brightly coloured eyes, Vi's are even prettier, I might add. Full lips, etc. etc. etc. Yet, her face frame, facial bones and muscles make Vi ugly.

 

[mike12013]

I don't think that's a realistic expectation. At this point she may be just friend with benefits. However, I guess they may end up together at the end of the story, if Valentine doesn't go after anyone else, including side chicks.

A man can dream. I love a good blonde

We have about 3197 rendered of the 3409 posed

Ooh hopefully not long now

 

[VicValenn]

Holding out hope for a Reena LI at some point

Unfortunately, I think this ship has sailed. The game looks like it's halfway through and she's the only one who doesn't have any relationship points.


I don't know why the developer decided to leave Serena out as LI. She is very involved in the story and is a fun, popular and lovable character who has been around since the beginning of AVN. Oh well, this is the story Dev wants to tell us and we're just here for the ride. Let's see what the man will cook for us

 

[mike12013]

Unfortunately, I think this ship has sailed. The game looks like it's halfway through and she's the only one who doesn't have any relationship points.


I don't know why the developer decided to leave Serena out as LI. She is very involved in the story and is a fun, popular and lovable character who has been around since the beginning of AVN. Oh well, this is the story Dev wants to tell us and we're just here for the ride. Let's see what the man will cook for us

The dialogue where she's surprised you've slept with no one after the holiday gives me the tiniest slither of hope

Regarding Els, I had a thought earlier, I presume its a common interpretation but I just picked up on it now. She says she's a pacifist and doesn't watch Valentine's fights and so on, but served in the army and loved the fight on the beach.

Is the "pacifism" a front for her actually enjoying warfare? But then we get the "i shouldn't have watched that" after the first fight, she's happy to corner the 2nd fight and that same night she gets into a fight of her own. Maybe the pacfism was a self-imposed restriction from violence because she enjoys it. Obviously she has trauma, as we see a few times with blood on her face, but I feel like she actually enjoys combat and watching Valentine's first fight is what sets her off again