VN Ren'Py Suburban Sin [v0.0.45] [Marshall 77]

[Marshall 77]

I just downloaded and started to play you game ver .04 besides the missing file I also had Sasha referring to me as "ethan" (lower case) instead of the name I chose "Max". Also in the morning scene he talks about taking a "scene er" rather than a "shower"; during the shower he says "I ned to do something" should be "I need to do something". Then right after at breakfast you have Clara say " Gotta stop stalling -- I can't be late" this was clearly the MC's line in reference to Clara telling him to have a great day at school. Later at the pool MC talking about needing help with sunscreen on back--obviously Nadine's line as the very next scene is with her on her back waiting for sunscreen. These are all obvious errors and in the very first episode or so, not sure what will be found by ver 004 content. You may want to do some reviews of your script to catch some of these errors or people will lose interest in the VN as it hurts to see these obvious problems and indicates an author not interested in producing quality work. (even if a Porn VN should be better quality)

thanks for the feedback i will review the script and fix the mistakes.

 

[Marshall 77]

V.045
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[dksplayground]

Any plans for an android port?

 

[Marshall 77]

Any plans for an android port?

I will work on it for the next update. It will be out on 20 December.

 

[Ferdinand321]

I like that NTR is avoidable, however, reading the comments here, the problem with the game itself seems to be the constant number of bugs and errors.

 

[Filipis]

Thanks for the feedback. Yes its going to be netorase. And in sharing route you will see swapping too

I am guessing the Netorare happens on the "Don't share" route then?

Also, the game being 0.045 and having only a singular choice is... weird.

 

[Peri3481]

Has the MC got himself any action yet or are the current tags still valid?

 

[indio68]

i refuse to play with an MC that look like this, sry...but the dead cat on his head is the final nail

 

[Marshall 77]

Has the MC got himself any action yet or are the current tags still valid?

with the mom no
but with one character yes

 

[Marshall 77]

i refuse to play with an MC that look like this, sry...but the dead cat on his head is the final nail

i understand but in V.05 his hair is different

 

[Marshall 77]

I am guessing the Netorare happens on the "Don't share" route then?

Also, the game being 0.045 and having only a singular choice is... weird.

yes there isn't much of choice for now.

 

[m3jez]

should call it Sunburn Sin, that MC is pasty

 

[xvertion121]

Woa................2 Star? Why?

 

[IHATESlowburnBluBallgames]

yes there isn't much of choice for now.

How old is the son, cause you have to be 21 to get into strip clubs in the US, not sure what country they are based on. Also how come he wasnt carded by a bouncer at the front door, and how did his mom not recognize him there?

 

[Marshall 77]

How old is the son, cause you have to be 21 to get into strip clubs in the US, not sure what country they are based on. Also how come he wasnt carded by a bouncer at the front door, and how did his mom not recognize him there?

as the story goes you will find out why he wasn't stopped by the bouncers. the son is in Uni not HS.

 

[PureoSpice]

Is MC's father Dax? sorry, it's hard playing this game without thinking about this dude



Renders look decent tho. Still need improvement but it's aight

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[sashamitsell]

The engrish still needs improvement. But at the moment its not a deal breaker.

 

[Marshall 77]

Is MC's father Dax? sorry, it's hard playing this game without thinking about this dude
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Renders look decent tho. Still need improvement but it's aight

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Thanks for the feedback. I'm trying to fix the typos and I didn't noticed this, I will fix it for the next update.