So I installed a mod that was supposed to correct grammar and spelling mistakes and after playing the game I'm wondering how bad the dialogue is without the mod because I still found it kind of bad.
The premise doesn't make much sense, especially the ending of the latest update. Why exactly was it so important to go that far to win a practice game? Lol. What even is this whole "sports ball" thing they're doing? What's the point and why is every relevant character participating in it? The MC just comes off as a whiny emo who wants to be dark and edgy. I mean he just looks ridiculous. He went from looking like a myspace era emo with the bucket hair to just about the most oddly "coifed" hairstyle.
I know you're trying to make this an adult novel and not just another "adult" game but I really don't think the writing is good enough to carry it alone. What usually makes games on this site bearable through the broken English and melodramatic story are the sex scenes. Not everything has to be so dramatic. Not every character has to be cool and edgy. There are definitely some parts I liked about the story but overall it's mediocre at best. (That is if you really want this to be treated as "not a porn game").
I'm not expecting a great literary work from an adult game. Though if the writing did improve I'd probably be donating instead of here just waiting for an update where I'm finally not blue balled.
Seriously the female character models all look great and they're written in a way that makes them attractive. That's what I liked. The soundtrack is also fantastic. So 3 out of 5.
The premise doesn't make much sense, especially the ending of the latest update. Why exactly was it so important to go that far to win a practice game? Lol. What even is this whole "sports ball" thing they're doing? What's the point and why is every relevant character participating in it? The MC just comes off as a whiny emo who wants to be dark and edgy. I mean he just looks ridiculous. He went from looking like a myspace era emo with the bucket hair to just about the most oddly "coifed" hairstyle.
I know you're trying to make this an adult novel and not just another "adult" game but I really don't think the writing is good enough to carry it alone. What usually makes games on this site bearable through the broken English and melodramatic story are the sex scenes. Not everything has to be so dramatic. Not every character has to be cool and edgy. There are definitely some parts I liked about the story but overall it's mediocre at best. (That is if you really want this to be treated as "not a porn game").
I'm not expecting a great literary work from an adult game. Though if the writing did improve I'd probably be donating instead of here just waiting for an update where I'm finally not blue balled.
Seriously the female character models all look great and they're written in a way that makes them attractive. That's what I liked. The soundtrack is also fantastic. So 3 out of 5.