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yes i read that.... but as i said text more descriptive is useless if nt supported ny emotions
you also made error
first error in the first phrase:
My wife will never say to me this phrases...
you write:
"I let Ted fuck me"
this is not Anne
Anna would have said;
"we fucked"
because I was the one who asked her to fuck him!! Anne is not a doll in the hands of men who she fucks ... she is the one who wants to fuck them because I am the one who asked her to do it...she does what I ask her to do
second error that does not hace sense with the storyline
"Ted fucked your wife"
Anne never turns to me and says; your wife did this or that.
because she has a strong-willed nature and so in this case Anne would say;
"I fucked Ted!"
in fact even if you were a "Son"-- (we does'Nt know the name of this SON) fucking her wherever--she would say how she felt at that moment whereas you only describe how the cock slips into her...instead Anne has muscles in her cunt that squeeze the cocks she fucks with...if they slipped inside her she wouldn't even be able to cum.
Usually when Anne fucks someone she ask fir his name... the fact that also Mrcom use "son" instead his name... is a sign of lacy and beain in hirry to close the update
if you wanted to describe the actions better she should have say to me:
"oh dear, my heart was pounding while I was with TED because I was thinking about the moment when I would tell you about it"
and
"when the son slipped his cock in me from behind I came dripping like a little girl because I had his father's cock in me too...you can't understand how much I wished you were there watching them both fuck me in the cunt making me feel ,,,, I was in total bliss"
however a good description of the emotions is missing even in the dialogues that Mircom wrote.... because since no renders of the sex scenes were planned... any writer who relies on the text MUST also talk about the thoughts and positions...
writer would describe the scenes with words:
Anne sat on a low couch and her skirt went up to her crotch revealing to Ted and his kids that she was not wearing panties
Unexpectedly Ted moves his hand as he usually does at the pool and begins to grope her ass and with his fingers reaches into the cleft of her wet cunt
Anne says: "ohh uhh wait"
Then Anne begins to spread her blissful legs showing her willing holes...
I hope I have made you understand the difference between dialogues and description of a scene in a text based novel! (as the scene you have modded is, because there is a unique useless pic of Anne with a false smile that does not fit with the dialog she is having with me)
This description is what usually is done by the renders in a VN.
the dialogues you wrote don't describe much and change little ... but because they don't fit the characters they come across as meaningless and don't fit the story
however even the original dialogues from the dev are useless.
..they would make sense if there were renders that described the meaning
...there should at least be the thoughts of the MC...instead... only blah blah with no emotions!!!
very cold and distant dialogues and those scenes are just useless and made in a hurry to pack the update for releasinng in time....
The Punta Cana vacation in TacCh14 is much better!
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