VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Charmer [v0.5b] [FeverForest]

[UncleVT]

Overview:
You play as a young Connor, the father of the Main Character of SilverBack Book. Your goal is to take on a entire city, With a young Crow beside you. Coming face to face with the Gangs that already call the city home. You Start as a Young Connor fed up with how he is treated, As he plans to turn an entire city into his playground. beginning with Charming/Corrupting Small time businesses to collect a small fortune. From local Carwashs,Strip Clubs,Laundromats,to local family owned Stores. To take on the bigger family that runs the City. While Corrupt women's mind and opening clubs to earn money. Allowing you to attack the City as you please.

By the end of the game tho Connor, Will find himself needing to leave the city to start a new life in BerryHill. The whole game is shown though photos as a Older Connor flips though old photos before having Crow clear his mind to start a new beginning.​

Thread Updated: 2019-08-10
Release Date: 2019-03-15
Developer: FeverForest

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Version: 0.5b
OS: Windows, Mac, Linux
Language: English
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[ThunderRob]

overview got me interested....art style..hmm..can only determine by trying the game..so lets d/l

 

[ThunderRob]

ok..played..as a bad boy natch..was pretty good narrative-wise...the art is a take it or leave it..as long as the narrative remains good i can take it...every two weeks for updates?..okie dokie..i'm in..see ya in two weeks

 

[Sere]

A question, if you don't mind.
In the future, would the women's outfits change as you corrupt them? Since changes in outfits, makeup, nail_polish, and demeanor are a huge turn on for me.

 

[Baharomont]

Every time i see "No sexual content at the moment!" i can say only one: F*** this Game! >_<

 

[PoEbalu]

Every time i see "No sexual content at the moment!" i can say only one: F*** this Game! >_<

you must really hate steam then.
i bet if you dont see ejeculations in your food/drinks you flip the whole table or if work doesnt include facial/assgape you sue them.

 

[OneWayMissile]

Thats how mafia works

 

[Mondoblasto]

I fear that English really is this person's first language. I also hope their English teacher never sees this.

 

[fenix2d]

i wonder why its looks like that its gonna be abandoned for sure

 

[dexter111]

A question, if you don't mind.
In the future, would the women's outfits change as you corrupt them? Since changes in outfits, makeup, nail_polish, and demeanor are a huge turn on for me.

btw, are there any good games with this feature?

 

[waffel]

btw, are there any good games with this feature?

Lab Rats 2, Roguelike, Harem Hotel (slut outfits), HHS+ to name a few

 

[waffel]

Hahaha, this game, it's so bad that it's good! xD Looking forward to see more!

 

[Gaboris]

Okay so just to clarify, I'm Fever's patron and this is mainly a feedback for him so if what I say is more forgiving or more critical then that's the reason.

The art style is fine, but it's an "acquired taste". That was the case in the previous The Silver Back Book game, but it has already improved a lot since then so maybe if it changes again it'll have more general appeal.

So far this is a really short and linear story and there is no sexual content except for a bath scene where the teacher's tits are out. Sadly that's a huge turnoff for most people so some mature content has to be prioritized to attract new people.
The previous update was in December, but cuz of the holidays and the new year progress development was halted. Still Fever posted on Patreon so if he keeps that up at least we shouldn't be left without any info.

The choices we get are clearly good or evil stuff and they are there to set our "alignment" by increasing appropriate points instead of branching the story. Choices are even color coded to make these "shifts" obvious. This system is more preferable in my opinion compared to the SBB's more game like "either corrupt or charm her" style similar to games like The Fate Of Irnia, but still not ideal since they are still about "choosing a path" instead of letting a players actions have consequences, but that might be just outside of the project's scope.

Based on a few quick test runs this alignment system is meant to set how the MC reacts to things. So there are no dialogue options and instead if we pickled a bunch of "bad boy" points the MC'll talk like a sailor and reference sex all the time.
Although after testing it a few times it feels a bit odd since I've had runs where the MC was acting like an angle even though he had more corruption points just because he was good at a previous "event". I guess the system is not an instant "which is greater" type, but rather there might be set events that define what our character will act like in the next part based on our alignment at the time.

Writing is... "not good"? It's not actually bad, the problem is more about Fever not being a native English speaker as dialogues are full with base level grammatical errors and even odd patterns of speech. So the most important improvement I'd say should be in that department so it won't pile up later.

All in all this is a promising, but simple start. If this alignment style approach gets properly utilized this can turn into a fun story for multiple playthroughs where depending on our points scenes might play out differently.

@Fever Forest I'll PM you a list of bugs and guidelines later on that might help along development, but even this thing took me several hours and I need to sleep.

i wonder why its looks like that its gonna be abandoned for sure

I'm not gonna lie, it's a bummer that Fever has abandoned his previous game, but that was because he poorly managed the scope of that game to his own skills so I'm personally giving him one more chance and see if he can get this one working since I'm just interested.

 

[Pussycat4f]

"Female protagonist" ? I wonder if it's true...

 

[Fever Forest]

Okay so just to clarify, I'm Fever's patron and this is mainly feedback for him so if what I say is more forgiving or more critical then that's the reason.

The art style is fine, but it's an "acquired taste". That was the case in the previous The Silver Back Book game, but it has already improved a lot since then so maybe if it changes again it'll have more general appeal.

So far this is a really short and linear story and there is no sexual content except for a bath scene where the teacher's tits are out. Sadly that's a huge turnoff for most people so some mature content has to be prioritized to attract new people.
The previous update was in December, but cuz of the holidays and the new year progress development was halted. Still, Fever posted on Patreon so if he keeps that up at least we shouldn't be left without any info.

The choices we get are clearly good or evil stuff and they are there to set our "alignment" by increasing appropriate points instead of branching the story. Choices are even color-coded to make these "shifts" obvious. This system is more preferable in my opinion compared to the SBB's more game like "either corrupt or charm her" style similar to games like The Fate Of Irnia, but still not ideal since they are still about "choosing a path" instead of letting a player's actions have consequences, but that might be just outside of the project's scope.

Based on a few quick test runs this alignment system is meant to set how the MC reacts to things. So there are no dialogue options and instead, if we picked a bunch of "bad boy" points the MC'll talk like a sailor and reference sex all the time.
Although after testing it a few times it feels a bit odd since I've had runs where the MC was acting like an angle even though he had more corruption points just because he was good at a previous "event". I guess the system is not an instant "which is greater" type, but rather there might be set events that define what our character will act like in the next part based on our alignment at the time.

Writing is... "not good"? It's not actually bad, the problem is more about Fever not being a native English speaker as dialogues are full with base level grammatical errors and even odd patterns of speech. So the most important improvement I'd say should be in that department so it won't pile up later.

All in all, this is promising, but a simple start. If this alignment style approach gets properly utilized this can turn into a fun story for multiple playthroughs where depending on our points scenes might play out differently.

@Fever Forest I'll PM you a list of bugs and guidelines later on that might help along development, but even this thing took me several hours and I need to sleep.


I'm not gonna lie, it's a bummer that Fever has abandoned his previous game, but that was because he poorly managed the scope of that game to his own skills so I'm personally giving him one more chance and see if he can get this one working since I'm just interested.

As always Gaboris, Thank you for the in-depth feedback.
I'll go into each thing you talked about to explain why everything is the way it is...
Starting with...

The art is definitely an acquired taste, But as you stated it will be improved I'm drawing just about every day so there will be slight changes from here and there...

As for ''no sexual content'' that is something I really want to talk about. The reason this update (0.3) has no sexual content is not that I didn't make them...I just didn't add it.
''Why!?''
I didn't want to fuck it up as you said Gaboris,
''Mature content has to be prioritized to attract new people.''
First, you have to make a really good Scene while placing it just in the right spot..pacing the game is everything.
You prolong the Adult Scenes for too long and the player gets ''blue balls'' ("Where the fuck are the scenes!")("I'm tired of fucking reading!") while if you show them too soon you get the case of SBB where there is no award for seeing the scenes and it just feels cheap...
While the Bath scene and the Carwash scene could come off as teasing and a way it is, if I didn't add anything then it wouldn't be an adult game!.... So, in short, I'm lost...I'll be working it out as I go, but that is the biggest thing that is running through my mind at all times. The goal is "No Blue Balls"...lol

And I do post updates EVERY weekend!

And as for the color-coded Choices, That was a big thing for me. There was a time where I didn't want to add the color-coded
but, I didn't want to later have something like "Walkthrough 5$+ Patrons"Making the game hard just to sell Walkthroughs..That is bullshit.
So I didn't want that.But I also wanted it to be somewhat tricky...
for example, you said "The choices we get are clearly good or evil stuff" tho there is a way to get both good and evil nicknamed "Just business".
I added color-coded Choices mainly for it to be simple..But it is something i think about even now..
Later on, in the game (If i get backing/patrons), the choices will have benching storylines."

OH! For the grammar, i have taken my time and went back to correct the grammar for the next update.
I've always had plans of hiring someone to write the game in the future.

Hate to cut it short but i really need to get back to work...And try not to play more Apex Legends..

 

[Fever Forest]

"Female protagonist" ? I wonder if it's true...

I wouldn't go that far...You do play as the Teacher for a bit of the game and will play her more in future updates.
But, she isn't the Main Character She is a very strong Supporting Character but not the MC.
And one of the few characters that will be a long-lasting character.

 

[Pussycat4f]

I wouldn't go that far...You do play as the Teacher for a bit of the game and will play her more in future updates.
But, she isn't the Main Character She is a very strong Supporting Character but not the MC.
And one of the few characters that will be a long-lasting character.

Thanks for information. It's a pity, because i wish to play as female character.. Anyway: i wish you good luck with your game

 

[Fever Forest]

5$+ Backer Only Update V0.04B Release

The Charmer


Beta 5$+ Release! Download: V0.4b

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(Public release at the end of the month)

Changelog:

• Grammer fix (Tho I'm sure there are new typos to fix before public release)
• New Adult Scenes
• New locations (laundromat)
• And, Bug Fix (Tho I'm sure there are new ones to iron out before public release..)

 

[Fever Forest]

Public Release Update V0.04 Release

The Charmer


Public Release! Download: V0.04

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Changelog:

• Grammer fix (Tho I'm sure there are new typos to fix before public release)
• New Adult Scenes
• New locations (laundromat)
• And, Bug Fix (Tho I'm sure there are new ones to iron out before public release..)

Hope you enjoy!

 

[User_23654]

Updated the OP.