VN Ren'Py The Grey Dream [Ep.6 P1 Patreon Release] [TheGreys]

[Avatarbr1]

I feel like the dev is creating the story as he is coding the game, not even going back to fix some inconsistencies

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[Donnie Brasco]

I may or may not be on the right track. Until a week ago, I had never even heard of the game. But who can follow all that. So many different forms of occupation, and so little time. Anyway here's a lackluster attempt on my part to create Helen even though Haley is definitely my number one. There is a reason why Helen and not Haley then, but currently irrelevant for now. I didn't find an adequate hairstyle from the game, but that's why I chose one similar to the one in the side story. There are still lot of details to be refined, but what is there is. Attempt number 1.

 

[KGpride5]

I may or may not be on the right track. Until a week ago, I had never even heard of the game. But who can follow all that. So many different forms of occupation, and so little time. Anyway here's a lackluster attempt on my part to create Helen even though Haley is definitely my number one. There is a reason why Helen and not Haley then, but currently irrelevant for now. I didn't find an adequate hairstyle from the game, but that's why I chose one similar to the one in the side story. There are still lot of details to be refined, but what is there is. Attempt number 1.

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Great job!! This vn deserves a fan art thread.

 

[Donnie Brasco]

Great job!! This vn deserves a fan art thread.

Thanks I agree. But unluckily it seems no one do it.

 

[Crimsonfiend76]

Other than earning love points, does it make a difference in who we choose to be with at the end of chapter 4? If I pick one sister, will that essentially close the other's path?

 

[Ohvidente]

Other than earning love points, does it make a difference in who we choose to be with at the end of chapter 4? If I pick one sister, will that essentially close the other's path?

I believe that in the future it can influence Harley's walk, like in chapter 5 there is an option that only appears if you chose to stay with her instead of Mr. Gray

 

[Ohvidente]

The secondary:


The mc:

 

[rafa30]

TheGreys

8gb to download
you could convert the images to another format without losing quality and reducing the size of the game in gigabytes
Webp might be a good option

 

[El Pene Del Diablo]

just getting into ep 5 it seems like entire sections of conversations are getting completely skipped. anyone else experience this?

for example: the meeting with White, you tell him you were with Hailey last night, then he asks you a a question, it flashes to you then right back to him sending you away. this happens in many other conversations.

 

[Eonor]

Made a compressed Android port of The Grey Dream Episode 5 with Haley's Patch, colombeen's gallery unlocker and SteelyDan14's walkthrough mod.

Got some basic gestures loaded in: swipe up for save menu, swipe down to hide UI, swipe left to rollback and swipe right to skip. Save files are now stored in the Documents folder. This sometimes means that you may need to close and re-open the port after installing so the save folder is properly created.

Please let me know if you encounter any issues with the port and I'll see what I can do to get them sorted.

Links: Pixeldrain -

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Edit 19/08/24: Updated this port with SteelyDan14's walkthrough mod.

Updated my Android port to include SteelyDan14's mod

 

[deadh30775n]

I kind of feel the same. I always prefer a good story, but I have been struggling to get into this through the first 4 episodes. It just hasn't grabbed me. But I've persevered, because of the hot ladies and the potential. I've got my fingers crossed, when I get around to episode 5, it will drag me in.

Even most of the h scenes are with random girls you meet in parties and gym. And there's one scene in episode 5 with a main li that come out from nowhere...like wtf how can they give a scene with a main li without any progression.

I can ignore all that but they seriously need to work on the writing part. Everything else is okay to an extent. Atleast just change the writing for the h scenes. It must be the first time for me that I couldn't get it up during sex scenes.

 

[deadh30775n]

The story isn't the best but I wouldn't call it atrocious.

Mm NO, story isn't atrocious, writing is...and that's what I said. Story is avg at best but definitely not the worst I've seen.

The fact that the MC isn't living with a landlady and her daughter automatically makes it above average for an AVN.

For you maybe.

For me there are tons of AVN's that are in the top of my list like LOML, ripples, OIAL, desert stalker and many more which do have a landlady/tenant storyline.

 

[kagancy]

Mm NO, story isn't atrocious, writing is...and that's what I said. Story is avg at best but definitely not the worst I've seen.

For you maybe.

For me there are tons of AVN's that are in the top of my list like LOML, ripples, OIAL, desert stalker and many more which do have a landlady/tenant storyline.

I'm working on the rendering and some aspects of the story for our game, but I'm not involved in the writing process. I have a question for you. Please don't take this the wrong way—I don't believe our game is outstanding. However, when you mention that the writing needs improvement, it would be incredibly helpful if you could provide us with 3-4 specific examples. This way, we can better understand what you're referring to and make the necessary adjustments. As it stands, I’m struggling to grasp exactly what you mean when you say the writing is bad.

 

[Mantioxi]

Character arcs are thrown out of the window. Conversation all over the place now. Awkward pauses everywhere.

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[Prosper]

why is the mc so fucking ugly lmao little sissy lookin ah

 

[Cabin Fever]

Mm NO, story isn't atrocious, writing is...and that's what I said. Story is avg at best but definitely not the worst I've seen.

You are correct. I should have said writing instead of story.

I'm working on the rendering and some aspects of the story for our game, but I'm not involved in the writing process. I have a question for you. Please don't take this the wrong way—I don't believe our game is outstanding. However, when you mention that the writing needs improvement, it would be incredibly helpful if you could provide us with 3-4 specific examples. This way, we can better understand what you're referring to and make the necessary adjustments. As it stands, I’m struggling to grasp exactly what you mean when you say the writing is bad.

I know you are not asking me, but what I find particularly weak, is that dev will spend the time creating multiple unnecessary renders showing someone literally just walking away, while at other points doing nothing (not even a black screen with some text) to denote the passage of time, e.g. at the club with Jamie. It feels like they just sit down with Jamie and more or less by magic immediately gets super friendly and drunk after talking for less than a minute.

 

[Nikephorus]

Character arcs are thrown out of the window. Conversation all over the place now. Awkward pauses everywhere.

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I also found that entire interaction weird. They hang out earlier in the game a few times and seem to just be good friends. Kelly doesn't seem all that interested in the MC beyond that. Then he shows up at her apartment drunk and she's like: "Oh yeah fuck me now!"

 

[Cabin Fever]

I also found that entire interaction weird. They hang out earlier in the game a few times and seem to just be good friends. Kelly doesn't seem all that interested in the MC beyond that. Then he shows up at her apartment drunk and she's like: "Oh yeah fuck me now!"

It was fairly obvious to me that Kelly (and not just her) has a long time crush on MC but I suppose it could be interpreted differently.

 

[rannmiumec]

I think Kelly's crush on MC is very obvious from the very beginning, just by the way in which she wants to give the MC a good luck kiss before the interview or how much she wants the MC to compliment her when her and Lily are trying new clothes.

The sex scene is abrupt sure, but that Kelly was already into MC seems quite obvious to me.

 

[Dessolos]

I'm working on the rendering and some aspects of the story for our game, but I'm not involved in the writing process. I have a question for you. Please don't take this the wrong way—I don't believe our game is outstanding. However, when you mention that the writing needs improvement, it would be incredibly helpful if you could provide us with 3-4 specific examples. This way, we can better understand what you're referring to and make the necessary adjustments. As it stands, I’m struggling to grasp exactly what you mean when you say the writing is bad.

For me the story is okay enough and passable I don't got any real issues with the writing there ( tho I'm the last person to critque writing as I have a hard time noticing bad vs good writing as I play these games).

I have yet to play the update

I could be wrong and simply need to do a replay but one thing I always thought was this game is a bit to focused on the plot and never felt like we get enough time to get any real character deveolopment with some of these characters , Especially Helen and Hayley ( think that's their names the 2 sisters) Some like Kelly feel like they are pushed to the side. Last I played I felt like I barley know anything about any of these characters which is a weird feeling to have when at the time there was 4 updates and not like the updates were short.