VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Harem Hotel [v0.1] [Commander Olympus]

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EZ8lt

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Dec 24, 2019
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PlayerUnknown47 said:
Hey Dev you should change the name of your game or you will have to tell us: The characters and situations in this story being purely fictitious, any resemblance to people or situations existing or having existed can only be coincidental. This could cause confusion with another game.
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Yeah, we don't want people misunderstand the resemblance to another characters and situations in a story that is ALSO purely fictitious. :WeSmart:
 
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UndidIridium

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Genuinely think it was an accidental mistake by the Dev to call it The Harem Hotel but I'm adding to the call to change the name as it's far too similar to Runey's Harem Hotel, when I saw this release I thought it was possibly a remake of Runey's game.
 
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zeraligator

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BaasB said:
Overview:
I've always wanted to write a harem game where it doesn't have the same old incest story,
so I'm trying to start with something different about a revenge story, . I
hope you will join me on this journey to discover how much a person can,
change when they only want to destroy those who took away the love of their life.
It all depends on the player's choices diferents results some more important than others.
Free roaming and voting for NPC that you want to be in the game.
As I progress as an artist and the game is updated my art will improve things like shadow,
body art and lighting needs to improve.​
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"so I'm trying to start with something different about a revenge story, ."
This part flows somewhat poorly, it should probably be 'so I'm trying to write something different, a revenge story.'
The comma should , . should definitely just be a period.

"can, change"
Does not need the comma.

"the player's choices diferents results some more important than others."
The sentence just kindof seems to fall apart here to the point of obscuring the message. I think it should be 'the player's choices will have different results though some will be more important than others.'

"voting for NPC that"
Should be 'NPC's' if you mean to have multiple NPC's chosen by way of voting, if it should be singular then it should be 'the NPC'.

"my art will improve things like shadow, body art and lighting needs to improve."
The double usage of 'improve' reads a little odd, it might sound better if it was 'my art will improve things like shadows, body art and the lighting.'

Seems decently interesting though, the arts already pretty decent and a nice change of pace from all the 3d characters in most ren'py titles.

Btw, there's already a game on here called Harem Hotel (without 'the') so in this early stage it might be a good idea to brainstorm an alternative name to avoid confusion with the other game with nearly the same title that focusses on a (non-incest) harem and is made in ren'py.
 
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btrain33

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UnoriginalUserName said:
Yeah...that name is just not going to fly. Perhaps "Harem Inn Express"? Think of the potential memes!

"Are you a horse-dicked H-game protagonist?"
"No, but I did stay at Harem Inn Express last night!"
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Or how about "Harem in a Hotel"? Or "My Hotel Harem"? "My Harem Who Lives in a Hotel"?

So many different ways this can go.
 
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zeraligator said:
"so I'm trying to start with something different about a revenge story, ."
This part flows somewhat poorly, it should probably be 'so I'm trying to write something different, a revenge story.'
The comma should , . should definitely just be a period.

"can, change"
Does not need the comma.

"the player's choices diferents results some more important than others."
The sentence just kindof seems to fall apart here to the point of obscuring the message. I think it should be 'the player's choices will have different results though some will be more important than others.'

"voting for NPC that"
Should be 'NPC's' if you mean to have multiple NPC's chosen by way of voting, if it should be singular then it should be 'the NPC'.

"my art will improve things like shadow, body art and lighting needs to improve."
The double usage of 'improve' reads a little odd, it might sound better if it was 'my art will improve things like shadows, body art and the lighting.'

Seems decently interesting though, the arts already pretty decent and a nice change of pace from all the 3d characters in most ren'py titles.

Btw, there's already a game on here called Harem Hotel (without 'the') so in this early stage it might be a good idea to brainstorm an alternative name to avoid confusion with the other game with nearly the same title that focusses on a (non-incest) harem and is made in ren'py.
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Thanks, i will change it. English is not my first language but i am studying to improve.
 
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