If you don't mind the feedback:
I love feedback, it's a discussion after all, and seeing different opinions helps me refine my future suggestions, and get to know people and their preferences.
1. I really like it! Izzy is fit though. The heat wave would have to be brutal to knock her out. It'd probably be better to change her for someone like Sam, or one of the students. Ada could use some spotlight.
I tend to agree, but really fit people do tend to push themselves harder, and working out in conditions you aren't used to is a sure way to put yourself in danger. If Izzy is the one succumbing, it implies right away that the heat is BRUTAL, which I see as a plus, as we don't wonder how bad it might be. I do make the assumption that a heatwave of this level is uncommon in the area, in which case I think Izzy fainting makes a lot of sense. (and Izzy is currently under utilized)
You are right though, having a heatwave affect Sam or a student would make more sense from a health perspective, but I would feel crappy as a player if I was exploiting the heat to make girls strip and things once a student (or Sam) had their health or even life put at risk by that heat. Izzy feels like she is (currently) off the table as a target of spanks and HM attention, (although I am sure that off-screen Sally is practicing her backhand on dat ass) and if Izzy and Sally were having an intense workout, it feels more like Izzy is her bringing it on herself, making me feel less guilty as a player. The scene could easily be put on someone like Amy though, other than I know how much heat exhaustion sucks, and don't wish it on any of my girls.
2. Love it! Not sure Priti would photo bomb anything. If u ask me, that totally sounds like Amy.
That is a fair observation, and out of Priti's character from the early game, but I feel a reasonable progression given certain events.
A lot of my choices were put forth as a way to develop character of girls I feel were used less. Priti is a personal favorite, and I think the idea of her photo-bombing an image is incongruous with her shy demeanor as she started the game, but I think it could indicate the corrupting influence the HM has on her. She got into her model role in the photoshoot with the HM, (so much she couldn't resist masturbating afterwards) so I think her feeling sexy and wanting there to be a record of how sexy she looks is a reasonable step in said corruption. Photo-bombing is done by people with a lot of self-confidence.
Imagine the scene playing out as follows. After Ada shows up at the school, There is a scene where she wants to take a picture of a landscape. Priti happens by, and backs off when she sees the camera. The headmaster steps up and tells Priti that she looks so good that no camera should ever be a concern to her, and then Priti feels confident and photo-bombs Ada's shot.
Then when the scene replays, the headmaster watches Priti photo-bomb without his direct influence, and Ada gets annoyed, so HM tells Ada she should catch Priti with some embarrassing shots, then performs a uniform inspection on Priti in the yard. At the start, Priti is blushing as Ada is snapping pictures of her panties left and right, but eventually, she's getting into it and trying to give better and sexier angles... then after she's practically ready to rip off her uniform for the camera, she snaps out of it, looks flustered and squeaks that she has to go to the bathroom or she's going to be late to class.
(Credit for that version of the scene was inspired by
Bearded_NoPants' helpful comments)
I know some people on the site have said that Priti's only weakness is chocolate, but in my mind, I would prefer she become the model student. (Meaning the student so obsessed with becoming a model, she will willingly follow the headmasters suggestions for all things to try and establish a modeling career. There's definitely an innocent-starlet-wanting-to-make-it fantasy to be had there, which I would prefer to the cringe factor of "hey little girl, I have candy")
I think Amy's reaction when the headmaster pulls a camera for her punishment limits her as a candidate. She was traumatized by photos getting out, and I feel that "cameras" is an established trigger for her.
Class:
1. I really like it too! I'd only give the option of punishment, though and after Rachel confess I'd only give the choice of punishing Rachel and let Donna walk, not without her rubbing it in your face that you can't touch her.
Yeah, I know that Donna was nice to Rachel earlier, (it was her brand of cream that we got to soothe Rachel's butt, after seeing Donna helping her out in her room) so I'd like there to be more indications of how close they are, plus it helps Donna be less than just "that rich bitch" as a character if it turns out she is actually caring or maybe has a sister with an appearance similar to Rachel whom she cares for.
2. I love it but I think Debbie is not quite ready to be that mature. Maybe in a few updates and after more training that scene would work perfectly.
Yeah, I'm not 100% sure that I would buy that scene if it happened RIGHT now, but dialogue could go a long way to making it work. I can imagine the headmaster watching the spanking and thinking to himself "Debbie is lashing out at Cassandra, but I can tell that she's really angry with her own past behavior. It's good that she is distancing herself from her past, I think she's ready for the next step in her training."
Sports:
1. I'd take Rachel out of the equation. Louise scores and celebrates... as for Liz being the one having second thoughts about getting topless with her team, I dunno... remember Liz is an exhibitionist... she'd gladly take her sport bra off me thinks (although she had to keep appearances, so it might work after all
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Yeah, I admit that Rachel scoring big is a bit of a tough sell, but the idea I was going for was that she is free and happy with her body, and therefore she is able to make the play that is inspiring the team to the exhibitionist pay-off. I just feel that the person that makes the shot should be topless, and Alice is at a disadvantage from her large breasts. Plus, I have been the underdog that made a game-defining play, and that is a huge morale and confidence booster that could explain Rachel evolving in the future, standing up for herself with the other girls, demanding a tail with a butt-plug, that kind of thing.
Liz holding out was really just me messing up. I tried to work from memory for who was on what team, then went back and corrected names afterwards. I misremembered Donna as being on that team, and figured she would be the last to expose herself. When I checked the girls and fixed the names, Liz ended up denying her exhibitionist nature. Liz should be the first to go topless.
2 and 3 are perfect. I'd give a more prominent role on those to Charlotte, though. She's the team's captain after all.
Of course you are right, Charlotte and April are the captains, not the twins like I was thinking. So Charlotte, after Louise's display, makes a comment about being skins, and Liz agrees and strips right away. After, Louise agrees to leave her top off out of solidarity. Then on the Shirts team, April should come up with the plan and the twins have an argument because Mary refuses to repeat what April said. Then at the next game April gives the signal to drop pants.
(Also, I held back because I felt it is a perversion too far, but if the headmaster sides with the topless team on rules calls in the next football match, even after April has her team in their panties for equality, I fear that to get fair calls, the "shirts" team may come to class in non-regulation knickers, forcing confiscation after they remove their shorts. But we don't want to see a topless team compete with a bottomless team, do we?)
4. Maybe Maxine could go to your office and speak on behalf the rest of students.
<Head smack> Of course! Maxine should be a driving force in the heatwave. Thanks for pointing that out!
