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VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Heart Asks More [Ch. 1 v1.1] [BlakPanther]

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balvenie1401

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I do like it when the presentation/synopsis is enough so that I don't even have to check the previews to knows it's a hard pass, saves time, thank you.
 

tigerdiamond

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Don't let people complaining about a generic or basic story get you down. Cliches become cliches because people use them. You say yourself you're just starting, use this time to develop your skills (both in the art and in the writing) and to figure out the best translation solution for you. That way your next project can be great from the start. Seriously though, don't just rely on google for translations, there's some sub-forums here you could check out where they can point you to better machine translators or sometimes people will offer to help translate by hand; eventually when/if you start making some donation money you'll want to pay a person to translate as that'll always get you the best translations.
 
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EZ8lt

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First thing this needs is a proper English translator. Because you try to figure out what the actual story is behind the Engrish sentences, you can't really enjoy any story, be it generic or not. The other thing is the dialogues. Mc seems like a total dumbass. He meets this girl again after who knows how many years and every second sentence is: yo so sexy gurlll, so hottt. Ugh. Seriously.
 

Jstforme

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I tried, but I can't read this story without including a Russian accent in my head. Story needs an English speaker to take over.
 

thorin0815

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Won’t be able to play this one unfortunately. My name is Jacob and that’s what I name every MC in games, so it would be weird lol
You could try to play as Jakob once, that's the German variant of your name. ;-)
 

Davewatch

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Hey the English might be total crap but at least you can follow the basic story line (he does need to drool less about how hot she is)
 

diheberson4

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My friend please do not listen to anyone, you did a good job, I know how long it takes), so you are great. The main thing is not to stop. Negative comments are written only by those people who themselves have never created anything and will probably not create anything. the one who created his game, understand how much time it takes to do something like that.

I wish you good luck developing your game my friend :)(у)
 

Mario4don

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Dec 16, 2018
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So i'm training to be what a cop,postman,drug lord, business man can some on tell me what the FUCK i'm training for
:unsure: Maybe MC have train so he can understand this terrible engrish and this dialogues that are just horrible and they don't make any sense at all as just like this whole story that's being told here ;)
 

Cernunnos.

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Generic Max and His Mighty Engrish Chronicles:In 3D,IMAX,THX,Surround Sound(tm) A LucasFilms Production...this is so generic and so lazy it's just another same as 95% of the rest of who cares.
Yeah...I swear I could hear the poor English coming from the screenshots. This site needs a support network to help devs with that aspect of their games...ruins so many projects.
 
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Dec 22, 2019
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Yeah... Good luck to the developer, but no thank you.

I can overlook renders to a certain extent if you are a new creator since everyone has to start somewhere and learn as they go.
But having said that English not being my first language is NOT an excuse anyone should buy into ESPECIALLY if the creator is trying to get financial backing. It really just shows the creator isn't serious or willing to put that extra effort in by at least finding someone online or otherwise to proof read the script. It's not hard.

Besides the English, to me this story is about as exciting as watching paint dry. So this gets a (n) from me...
 
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