VN Ren'Py Abandoned The House [v0.1] [RGNS]

[vonwraith]

Yeah, I am going to have to take a big pass on the rest of this game. Should not have called himself a "genius", when he seems more of a narcissistic misogynist and a sprinkle of homosexual feelings toward the guy that was standing outside. Great work though but,.... yeah hard pass for the little Emo kid that is full of himself. Now if you have it setup that he commits suicide, I'm in.. Run little Emo, die... I mean run! All joking aside, keep up the good work but, yeah... very short launch and too strong of a start for a story.

 

[jospaghettio]

OK. Here a review of sorts. To the negative: The grammar is poor, but intelligible. The emotional age of the MC's dialog is about 12years. And judging by his hostility to women, those weren't good years. The MC is an incel sociopath dweeb. Yet, claims fame in a, given his juvenile language, most unlikely field. From the two dozen lines of dialog, the MC's favorite word is "bitch". He uses it in fully half of them. Not to be too monotonous, "witch" serves occasionally as a colorful alternative. There does not appear to be any real witches. The positive: the girls renders are appealing. And thus far appear to have normal personalities in stark contrast to the MC.
Conclusion: The dialog is torturously juvenile even by VN standards. The MC has only vengeance against the girls in mind with every breath. A little dominance and corruption is ok but, pure hate for women is, let's just say not my thing. However, there are just 3 minutes of gameplay, so still possible that future updates might provide twists in the storyline. Will the MC get the slap and nipple twist he so craves? We can only wait and hope!

 

[BabyYoda]

Mx will, spy on them in the shower, stare at tits while having weird internal monologue about said tits, creep into their bedroom at night while they are sleeping and finally rape them in their sleep ... sorry, "sleep sex".

 

[SummmerP]

I just started it, and in your papa's behalf I must say...
"Little man, you're not getting any pussy with that attitude"



I'm still on the intro, but damn... that dude couldn't write a single erotic fiction even if the cracks of his anus depended on it

Edit:
WHHHAAAAAATT?!
That's it?!
Did I just Game Over or something?

 

[Antwit]

what's up yo !

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So this is a real "black male carrier" Muahhhaaaahhhhaaaa.... I like your wordplaying this joke
and thats up to now the best what related to this game.

@ all criticysers of game and its dev:
Don´t be too negative let the dev have a little time to make something better out of his very short game intro ( and this weired MC). To early to break a stick over devs head and this small game - I hope a next beta release is published sooner or later with a more advanced story. The female characters give hope for some joyfull events , but I although hope the dev will not spoil the whole thing.


Incest ? Hmmm ...not really...MC is a weired psychopate , only voyaristic and if he only spy on and don´t f.ck the girls ... apotrophe it as "spy game" and "voyeur" on patreon (my hint to avoid trouble of a chancelled account)

 

[Hercule_Poirot]

Yeah, I am going to have to take a big pass on the rest of this game. Should not have called himself a "genius", when he seems more of a narcissistic misogynist and a sprinkle of homosexual feelings toward the guy that was standing outside. Great work though but,.... yeah hard pass for the little Emo kid that is full of himself. Now if you have it setup that he commits suicide, I'm in.. Run little Emo, die... I mean run! All joking aside, keep up the good work but, yeah... very short launch and too strong of a start for a story.

Hmm...Is it safe to assume you wouldn't recommend this game in its current state?

 

[DaSpudly]

Well shit.

I've spent three months tweaking characters, doing test renders and writing about 3000 words of dialogue for the intro of a story I'm planning, coincidentally called, The House.

I'm going to have to find a new title.

 

[Rock H.]

There is a nice video from GDC (Game Designers Convention/Conference) called 30 Things I hate about your pitch. There is some reason I am mentioning this. But I am writing this in the same style as the OP.

 

[Walt Dee]

Sex with step-sisters/step-daughters is still considered incest and illegal is most jurisdictions. I'd suggest adding the incest tag.

 

[Sulring Durgul]

Have to say the summary implies that the step-family is up to something and the protagonist has to stop them. Could be a new twist on the cliche, if it's executed well.

Yeah, right!

 

[meigame]

max is a low life piece of shit.

 

[AlBetGam]

Well shit.

I've spent three months tweaking characters, doing test renders and writing about 3000 words of dialogue for the intro of a story I'm planning, coincidentally called, The House.

I'm going to have to find a new title.

"The Residence"?

Yeah, right!

I try to be an optimist.

 

[Baharomont]

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm......

 

[RoadWulf]

Yup, definitely seen this hentai. Fat ugly fuck incel who hates women blackmails step mom and two daughters into being his fuck dolls in an attempt to get them out of his house. Even the thing with the cameras was straight out of the anime. I mean, if you can't even be original with your game then I don't know what to tell you.

Found it: Jitaku Keibiin

This is definitely a game for those of you that like to watch nice happy girls be turned into whores at the whim of a psychotic jackass.
That's not me.
Unwatched and blocked.

 

[Bloodprinceoz]

this feels like the porn game version of that one hentai, with the fat dude putting cameras throughout the house to blackmail his new step-mother and 2 step-sisters into fucking him so they leave

EDIT: just saw i'm not the only one that came to this conclusion

 

[perheiro]

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[dmhsfgl]

Are there many different routes? For example, our heroes can blackmail them, and in turn, they can blackmail us.

 

[Oozora]

interesting.
i just hope for max not become a total creep(or something really disgusting that already taking shape in my imagination just from demo)...

 

[Raerngaming]

sorry not I am not into Dumb ass MC's who are crazy so I deleted the game oh and sounds like he is everything he is accusing the girls of.

 

[Raerngaming]

also...as warning for you dev..


this is considered as "incest" for patreon.

as long father is married with that lady, she , and her daughters, because family members. so any sexual relation with them and MC will result on troubles with patreon.

just saying.

sounds more like stepmom stepsisters