What a holy war in the comments... Relax guys... I know I'm talentless, I know the dialogues and writing style in the game is not up to the level of a Kpop fan girl. I'm not extorting money from you guys, I'm just continuing to do what I started because there are people who want to see a continuation. Everything will end someday, and this mediocre story too
Mate, the thing is not about "being talentless" or not.
The main criticism that I give towards 9 out of 10 titles is bad/unrealistic writing unless it's something like Power Vacuum, where the game laughs off the tropes and cliches.
I try my best to give fair criticism to titles, not scream about milking or "WHY NTR/WHEN char A will get fked".
Just hope that you'll use it for future games, if you'll make ones. Cuz...feedback, you know.
1) Lack of build-up. 2 scenes deep and you already have someone's buttcheeks groped. I don't need the action to be dragged out as in some of the legendary titles in here(like AWAM), but c'mon. Give us some inner doubts and slow progression from "NO FUCKING WAY I'M LETTING YOU TOUCH ME" to "The guy is not that bad, actually. And handsome. My moron superhusband can't give to me because he's tired blababla" to "I don't know...Maybe I want the guy to touch me?"
2) Blackmail trope. That's just me, probably. But it's been so overused that it's annoying. "Suck me off or your hubby won't be able to fight 2 goons on the street". Lust/romance steal > Blackmail.
3) RPGM sux. Like, really. This may help to make a game seem longer, but eventually, Ren'Py is the best choice.
4) Choices, choices, choices. What a lot of games of this particular subgenre mess up with, is giving a player a choice. There are some in here, though. Just for the future: put yourself into a shoes of generic fatso jerking himself off between eating chips and drinking Pepsi. He may like one fetish, but wouldn't like another. He likes Raceplay trope, but doesn't like Nerds. Give him a choice who the girl gets to sleep with! Maybe obvious ones, maybe nah. Or your basic point system. Points system rule.
And the last one. Writing. The biggest hits show, that people get hooked to visual stuff+idea, but the main reason why they stay is story. Why Lust Of Pain has 30 pages of comments in here and makes 700$ per month while having good renders while Being A DIK is top-5 ever? Story.
Overall: your game - your way to make it. Just my 5 cents, since the idea with Elastica cheating may not be new, but it is a guaranteed hit, if implemented in proper way, imo.
