I don't like shaming anyone for poor english, but if you want to make a game and you're too lazy to run shit through a spellcheck... Well, I don't know what to tell you.
If you have nothing constructive to add, save it.
For the moment, I would say there is too much emphasis on porn vids, memes and movies for the first night. I would like to see some more fleshing out of the story. Yes I know this is only the beinning, but the whole,"Oh you find a glowing stone that bonds to you and then you start right away getting mind control powers..." Imo you're going a bit too fast; I hope you take your time to write a good story even if English isn't your first language. GL with the project, I believe it has potential and don't mind the haters too much, there will always be some.