My first complain - dont do "no choice" choices. When you refuse, it just ends - or it just continues anyway. That is not a real choice. (e.g. the bar, where it doesnt matter what you pick)
Then there are so many characters and perspective shifts - it is just confusing. The "MC" has probably the smallest part in this. Most of the time you see other ppl do stuff.
So its a linear VN without any real choice - you can just end it early and no real protagonist. Its more like a porn movie to click thru.
Oh and then the font - serif fonts are not that great to read on screens - you can use that for buttons/headline and stuff, but you should not use it for continuous text.
The clips and images are fine, and overall the writing is ok, but tbh - as I said - you can just watch a porn movie and get the same linear experience.