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Ndbaelor

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Did you guys read the undercover story?! What is your opinion on it?

I know it's just first chapter so I don't want to be too harsh on it. To me it was....whelming. Not to shabby, not too exciting either. The BJ scene was good. I wished the setting was different, like corporate espionage, infiltrating a cult or even a 'MataHari in ww2' type situation. The mob owned bar reminded of the new batman movie and the undercover betrayal 3d comics. I also thought since Don's bread and butter is cuckold genre, he will comeup with some interesting way to blend both, like having both husband and wife in undercover and husband has to languish in the bottom rank while actually witnessing his wife quickly rising through the ranks using her wits and tits! (I don't know why as I was typing this I immediately thought of Leia in Jabba's palace :))

It's obvious that this an expanded version of what was supposed to be a short story, you could tell by all the yadda yadda-ing of plot points. To me it felt like he skipped through some pretty interesting threads, like Riley building her undercover character by coming up with backstories and trying on costumes etc. I was also missing the villian's perspective, one if Don Silver's trademark. The thing I like about TA is you get to see and fall in love with Sarah's through both Dan and Lester's POV. I would've loved to see what the toad and Nico thought of Riley.
 

adamblack144

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Agreed, it was fine. Nothing special. I think he should just focus on TA and then do a prequel. Lester is too good of a character to be left alone. I want to hear about his previous exploits. Or if he doesn't want to dedicate a whole other series to it, then include some more backstory within TA. I want to know about his relationship with Lizzie.
 

GGCaesar

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Some Thought on DS work lately:

- Lester-Sarah sex is becoming boring and maybe the less interesting part of the story right now. To me DS should concentrate on the story unfolding and wrap up to the end. It will continue in this way instead because people is continuing to pay. It will be a waste of a potentially incredible story.

- Undercover hasn’t given me any vibe, he should drop it

- NE has potential and up to now had a good pace and unfolding, I hope he won’t ruin it.

- Cash and Otis have a great potential with the suitable story scenario
 
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King_Gonta

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Some Thought on DS work lately:

- Lester-Sarah sex is becoming boring and maybe the less interesting part of the story right now.
To me ,the defining characteristics are missing which is why sex scenes are not working though written well

For egLester using Sarah's toothbrush and masturbating in the couple's home using her underwear while she was gone . That's what Lester is all about .the ultimate intruder in the couple's life . Signifying voyeurism and corruption

But now he's potrayed as this all competent maniac who wants to kill Sarah's children to have her all for himself .
 
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powerconti

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To me ,the defining characteristics are missing which is why sex scenes are not working though written well

For egLester using Sarah's toothbrush and masturbating in the couple's home using her underwear while she was gone . That's what Lester is all about .the ultimate intruder in the couple's life . Signifying voyeurism and corruption

But now he's potrayed as this all competent maniac who wants to kill Sarah's children to have her all for himself .

A grasshopper jumps once, jumps twice, gets stuck the third time and falls into the palm of the hand.

And that's exactly the ending that awaits Lester (that dirty son of a bitch and criminal scoundrel).
He will bounce for a while until he is taken out of circulation by Dan and pays double and triple for everything he has done
to him, including getting a baseball bat up his arse....

The writer (DS) will continue to let Lester play the wild card and ignore and demote Dan as long as the money keeps flowing
from his "young" well, but it won't last forever.

Dan's comeback will have dire consequences for Lester.

- PC
 

adamblack144

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Predictions for upcoming chapter? This is the one I've felt least sure about. Anything could happen on this one. Hope DS keeps the hospital/Jesse drama to a minimum. Let's get the big 3 back to Chicago together