Verisimilinude
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Toxic Attraction DonSilver #Cuckold 8muses forum
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I liked the idea. It would be cool for Sarah and Lester to catch a sexually transmitted disease. It would be a forced stop that would make it easier for another woman to have access to Dan.
- I'm also surprised by the "cliché" of some writers, the husband goes a long time without claiming his wife. Dan has no direct access to his wife and no intimacy, no time as a couple. In the story of Antarctica77, Lisa does the same with her husband. She hasn't had sex for months and has no intimacy with her husband.
In the other story of the neighbor, the same thing happens. The husband just watches the student fuck his wife and he has no contact with his wife. (The husbands say they love their wives but don't have sex with them). I hope it starts to have some consequences, and that the husbands' personalities change. They all end up like retards.
The character starts one way and ends the story another way. Dan could have an operation on his penis to lengthen it and have it filled to make it fatter, for example. If you had to classify (divide) Toxic Attraction into arcs, what would these 30 chapters be like? What would you call each arc?
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I don't know about this one. The author is a good writer, and I'm all for a good setup with realism, but 4 chapters in and the most spice we've gotten is the husband watching the tenant masturbate. That's not slow burn, that's like watching paint dry.
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Come on guys, the dinner arc is stupid. The parents discussing private things in front of a creepy stranger is one of the most irrealistic things in TA (and we have plenty of it).
If he wrote it such that Lester ss doing what he does during a _normal_ conversation, then it would have been a bit more believable. As it was? Mom talking about Sarah and Dan's sex life in front of (to them) a total stranger? Absurd in the extreme.
The worst chapter of the series.
A filler that does not add anything at all, only to fill DS pockets I believe.
Without any sense, any character development, total waste of time.
The Lester-Sarah sex interaction, that sometimes has saved some weak chapter in the past, is between plain and lame, you can choose, too.
Totally disappointing.
A filler that does not add anything at all, only to fill DS pockets I believe.
Without any sense, any character development, total waste of time.
The Lester-Sarah sex interaction, that sometimes has saved some weak chapter in the past, is between plain and lame, you can choose, too.
Totally disappointing.
I was so angry at the gangbang scene that I forgot this. It's so fucking stupid. Sarah has never suggested anything about her parents being weird yet her mother is just casually discussing her sex life in front of an fat ugly creep? In reality she'd be scared that Lester would be harassing her daughter and talking about her sex life would encourage him.
It's moronic. But he has to pander to his subs who want every fetish ticked off their list. Next, incest!
When the paying public and some others here stuff themselves with such junk and even pay hard dollars for it,
we don't have much left to add.
A wife and mother is so defamed that she even prefers a life below the level of a cheap whore.
This is both sick and moronic.
Now please don't give me the argument that the husband forced her into it and wanted it that way.
No!
He wanted to live out the fantasy “consensually!” with her TOGETHER from time to time and not that she permanently
presents herself like a whore and spreads her legs for every tight cock at every available opportunity.
She didn't get a free ticket to whoring from him.
-- PC
we don't have much left to add.
A wife and mother is so defamed that she even prefers a life below the level of a cheap whore.
This is both sick and moronic.
Now please don't give me the argument that the husband forced her into it and wanted it that way.
No!
He wanted to live out the fantasy “consensually!” with her TOGETHER from time to time and not that she permanently
presents herself like a whore and spreads her legs for every tight cock at every available opportunity.
She didn't get a free ticket to whoring from him.
-- PC
Thank you boss!!
gofile isn’t working hence attaching Executive Privilege Chapter 6
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This one is also going the too slow too little route IMO. Still salvageable, I think.
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I agree that the conversation turned odd at the very end, but it's an alpha and I'll reserve judgement until we find out it's a one off or if 3 chapters from now we find out that Renee is a hotwife* herself and that she has her husband dominated and wrapped around her finger. We also don't know if this is a totally normal conversation topic in their family dynamic, because we've not seen/read how they interact before. The exception is her father had a one-sided convo over the phone while Sarah was getting railed. In that light, then it doesn't seem so strange or unbelievable of a situation anymore--if you have an open mind.
*Not saying it will happen that way, but DS certainly dropped a lot of hints and breadcrumbs to follow up on later.
At the end of the day, it doesn't matter what any of us think--sure we can discuss it's merits or it's faults and throw out ways that we would have liked it to be--but DS will write the story he wants to tell, whether we like it or not.
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Was there a need for healthy suspension of disbelief, sure, but doesn't most erotica have to have some of that in order to enjoy it? I think the only unrealistic or better yet least plausible aspects of the story up to ch29 was the way Dan's character just sat back and did nothing but let things continue - with brief flashes of resistance leading up to ch29. Since 29 we've actually gotten to see Dan grow as a character and exhibit real feelings for how all of this is effecting him. As a reader I don't really care what happens to Dan, but as a writer I know Dan is important to the story and I applaud DS for finally fleshing his character out with real emotional motivations. Dan is a much more 'likable' character because he's no longer a flat cardboard caricature.
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When he realized someone must have edited his resume we should have snowballed into the last act but nope. Even had people researching the hacking etc etc. It seemed to vanish.
Isn't Silver and Antarctica same writer..they carbon ea styles and verbage