Toxic Attraction DonSilver #Cuckold 8muses forum
- Thread starter adam adm
- Start date
A and B, meh!!Hmm. Mother-daughter, huh? I figure a lot of people are going to think Lester's going to get them both in a threesome, so I'll toss out different prediction - well, similar predictions A and B:
A) Lester follows Sarah/Mom to their destination, manages to get Sarah alone in the room, fucks her like usual, Mom comes back to the room and secretly watches them, gets turned on watching Sarah being Sarah, and now Mom's engaged in the story with Lester.
B) Lester follows Sarah/Mom to their destination, manages to get Sarah alone in the room, fucks her like usual, Mom comes back to the room and secretly watches them, gets disgusted watching Sarah being Sarah, goes home to 'console' Dan, and now Mom's engaged in the story with her son-in-law.
Boom!
Thanks for posting all the chapters right on time! Really appreciate it!!
And A was the answer.Hmm. Mother-daughter, huh? I figure a lot of people are going to think Lester's going to get them both in a threesome, so I'll toss out different prediction - well, similar predictions A and B:
A) Lester follows Sarah/Mom to their destination, manages to get Sarah alone in the room, fucks her like usual, Mom comes back to the room and secretly watches them, gets turned on watching Sarah being Sarah, and now Mom's engaged in the story with Lester.
B) Lester follows Sarah/Mom to their destination, manages to get Sarah alone in the room, fucks her like usual, Mom comes back to the room and secretly watches them, gets disgusted watching Sarah being Sarah, goes home to 'console' Dan, and now Mom's engaged in the story with her son-in-law.
Boom!
I understand why he puts the kids in there but I don't like it...I felt it for Dan at the grocery store...probably put that in there for the readers to feel some compassion for Dan...the toilet scene was ok..IMO it would have been better if they were at the apartment and renee got up and went to use the bathroom and heard someone moaning...all and all it doesn't need this amount of sex with Sarah and Lester in every ch...she's drunk and she won't notice Sarah looking like she was attacked by cats and that will be the end of that night...gotta wait for 36 now unless DS adds something in the finished version..
It's good but I was expecting more, It's technically only one scene. I also don't like the mom direction. Feels that whatever Don has planned will move very very slowly, milking his readers one scene at a time (not necessary a bad thing but then again it was not enough for me)
Aren't the groceries Lester's responsibility?
I would have liked it better if there was a hole and dick for Renee, too. Or even if Lester stuck it through the hole for Renee.
Not a bad half a chapter, but he's absolutely drawing it out to milk another month of subscription fees.
It feels like the beginning of an entire different story.
This is a crazy story when you consider where it started. Not believable.
Waiting to hear from VERIS and PSIBER but in the mean time does anybody have undercover blonde chapter 10 and 11 thanks.
Wow, that was pretty close, huh?
Well, too bad the author set the scene the way he did. Again, simply a silly, utterly non-believable scenario.
I get the author wants to bring the mother into the debauchery, and that's fine. Some people have spoken about their distaste in this regard, but I don't mind it. But the author could have accomplished this with a far less ridiculous setting/scenario than a damn glory hole in a dirty bathroom stall. Come on now, seriously? It's almost porn parody at this point. And as if anyone disappearing into a public bathroom for more than 120 seconds isn't going to raise the eyebrows of the people he/she is at the bar with, let alone disappearing for 10+ minutes. Such implausibility steals from the story, IMO.
And Renee? The author started to move forward with some character development with Renee - she's secretly sexually frustrated, opening up to her daughter in a way she never had before, letting her hair down a bit, etc. This was a very good start. I was encouraged while reading that. But then, after the briefest touch on this, she just went from caring mother mode into public bathroom stall slut mode in a blink of an eye. This is very lazy writing, IMO. And it's a missed opportunity.
For example, it could have been so much better, had the two women gone back to a VRBO, Lester sneaks into the house (because he can hack any electronic lock, after all), quietly goes to Sarah's bedroom, Sarah does Sarah things, then Renee hears noises and wakes up and secretly watches them. But the author could have focused on Renee's internal battle with much more depth: Renee's initial shock at what she is witnessing, being horrified that her daughter is cheating, but at the same time, her long-untouched body is getting turned on. Feeling guilty about betraying her husband (even in a voyeuristic way), but not being able to control her response. Slowly but surely, she gives in, reaches her peak, then runs back to bed feeling both wonderful and guilty, confused by the two simultaneous emotions - all unbeknownst to Sarah/Lester. He could then build upon her character development as the story moves forward.
Heck, if the author wanted to keep Lester in control as the evil conductor, he could have had Lester looking up while fucking Sarah, and noticing the end of Renee's orgasm and her fleeing back to her bedroom. Lester saw her, but Renee doesn't know he did. The author then could develop the future story that way. Instead of either of those 2 paths (or any number of others), we get a pseudo mother-daughter dirty toilet glory hole slutfest. No bueno.
This chapter touches on this development with Renee, but not nearly enough. Maybe I'm being too hard on the author, as he did go into some of Renee's feelings while she masturbated. But it just felt....off. For old-school Renee to give in to her secret desires is one thing. But, to do so in a dirty public bathroom toilet stall? Yeah, pretty silly stuff. In the end, the glory hole in the dirty dive bar bathroom ruined it for me.
...and the chapter ended prematurely. It felt more like half a chapter, or 2/3rds of one.
P.S. Sarah is a vile character. Her discussion with Dan in the beginning was awful.
Last edited:
DarkStutzel
Active Member
- May 23, 2017
- 953
- 1,252
- 322
The worst chapter ever written, completely insane. We ended chapter 34 with Dan receiving the chair. I expected some dialogue, and it starts with Dan leaving out of nowhere. There was little character development, Dan's interaction with the children was very brief, and there was no serious fight between the couple, anything that would lead to their separation. It's ridiculous that Lester stopped attacking Dan; he always wants to despise Dan and doesn't see him in the bathroom. They didn't remember Dan not getting hard, and they didn't talk about the chair. I was expecting Trisha to call Dan, and Lester to sort things out at the hospital. It's sad to see that they're apparently going to set Dan up, even though he's a computer novice, never having had anything to do with first-generation computing. This part was poorly done. The worst part was seeing that the sentinel gave Dan a PC and doesn't update anything, doesn't monitor it. Trisha could have called Dan to warn him to be careful with his network, as the sentinel's computer was on a spy network, and the computer was observed, with a high risk of system intrusion. We see Sarah not getting her husband back, and Sarah and Dan are part of the failed threesome without any intimacy. Sarah says "I love you" when she speaks to Dan in a meaningful way. Dan not knowing his credit limit to the point of not making a basic purchase was depressing. They could have talked about separation, but they also didn't mention why Sarah came alone. It was strange. Lester wants to steal Sarah from Dan. Renee is also very naughty, to the point of saying at the table for Lester to hear that it's a miracle Sarah doesn't have a lover. The most depressing part is not seeing Dan talk to Sarah about the use of the girls' room and beds. The chair arrived, the kids went to their room, and Dan disappeared into the street? There's no reflection from Sarah on everything she did while cleaning up the mess in the house! Worst chapter of the series.
King_Gonta
Member
- Feb 9, 2025
- 159
- 180
- 113
We are assuming that author actually cares about the story which he simply does not. The fire inside him has diedWow, that was pretty close, huh?
Well, too bad the author set the scene the way he did. Again, simply a silly, utterly non-believable scenario.
I get the author wants to bring the mother into the debauchery, and that's fine. Some people have spoken about their distaste in this regard, but I don't mind it. But the author could have accomplished this with a far less ridiculous setting/scenario than a damn glory hole in a dirty bathroom stall. Come on now. Seriously? It's almost porn parody at this point. And anyone disappearing into a public bathroom for more than 120 seconds isn't going to raise the eyebrows of the people he/she is at the bar with? Such implausibility steals from the story, IMO.
And Renee? The author started to move forward with some character development with Renee - she's sexually frustrated, opening up to her daughter in a way she never had before, letting her hair down a bit, etc. This was a very good start. I was encouraged while reading that. But then, after the briefest touch on this, she just went from caring mother mode into public bathroom stall slut mode in a blink of an eye. This is very lazy writing, IMO. And it's a missed opportunity.
For example, it could have been so much better, had they gone back to a VRBO, Lester sneaks into the house (because he can hack any electronic lock, after all), goes to Sarah's bedroom, Sarah does Sarah things, then Renee hears noises and wakes up and secretly watches them. But the author could have focused on Renee's internal battle with much more depth: Renee's initial shock at what she is witnessing, being horrified that her daughter is cheating, but at the same time, her long-untouched body is getting turned on. Feeling guilty about betraying her husband (even in a voyeuristic way), but not being able to control her response. Slowly but surely, she gives in, reaches her peak, then goes back to bed feeling both wonderful and guilty, unbeknownst to Sarah/Lester. He could then build upon her character development as the story moves forward. Heck, if the author wanted to keep Lester in control as the evil conductor, he could have had Lester looking up and noticing the end of Renee's orgasm and her fleeing back to her bedroom, and then he could develop the future story that way.
This chapter touches on this development with Renee, but not nearly enough. For old-school Renee to give in to her secret desires is one thing. But, to do so in a dirty public bathroom toilet stall? Yeah, pretty silly stuff. In the end, the glory hole in the dirty dive bar bathroom ruined it for me.
...and the chapter ended prematurely. It felt more like half a chapter, or 2/3rds of one.
P.S. Sarah is a vile character. Her discussion with Dan in the beginning was awful.
I think that when Dan started writing this, he was in a completely diff zone mentally. A dark place compared to his current state . Reason why it resonated so hard
If he had stopped writing Toxic Attraction after ch 8 and left it like Neighbor Chronicles. It would have gone down as a true classic . Probably among the Top 10 of all times.
He did not and now people will remember it as just another hotwife story. Past its time and prime
DarkStutzel
Active Member
- May 23, 2017
- 953
- 1,252
- 322
I was thinking about ending the chapters with Sarah leaving Dan. Does she still have the ring? Did Sarah take Lester's ring with her? Lester, in relation to Renee, would want to impress her. Lester would offer to be the driver who would host the Chicago night for the girls, something VIP like the time with Sarah. The girls' night would be better livened up by Jesses (I think that's the name) at the club and Lester using that to his advantage to irritate Dan even more. Rather than the scene with the black guy. Describing sex scenes with Lester in action is easy. Lester in jail talks about the inmates. Remembering something.Wow, that was pretty close, huh?
Well, too bad the author set the scene the way he did. Again, simply a silly, utterly non-believable scenario.
I get the author wants to bring the mother into the debauchery, and that's fine. Some people have spoken about their distaste in this regard, but I don't mind it. But the author could have accomplished this with a far less ridiculous setting/scenario than a damn glory hole in a dirty bathroom stall. Come on now, seriously? It's almost porn parody at this point. And as if anyone disappearing into a public bathroom for more than 120 seconds isn't going to raise the eyebrows of the people he/she is at the bar with, let alone disappearing for 10+ minutes. Such implausibility steals from the story, IMO.
And Renee? The author started to move forward with some character development with Renee - she's secretly sexually frustrated, opening up to her daughter in a way she never had before, letting her hair down a bit, etc. This was a very good start. I was encouraged while reading that. But then, after the briefest touch on this, she just went from caring mother mode into public bathroom stall slut mode in a blink of an eye. This is very lazy writing, IMO. And it's a missed opportunity.
For example, it could have been so much better, had the two women gone back to a VRBO, Lester sneaks into the house (because he can hack any electronic lock, after all), quietly goes to Sarah's bedroom, Sarah does Sarah things, then Renee hears noises and wakes up and secretly watches them. But the author could have focused on Renee's internal battle with much more depth: Renee's initial shock at what she is witnessing, being horrified that her daughter is cheating, but at the same time, her long-untouched body is getting turned on. Feeling guilty about betraying her husband (even in a voyeuristic way), but not being able to control her response. Slowly but surely, she gives in, reaches her peak, then runs back to bed feeling both wonderful and guilty, confused by the two simultaneous emotions - all unbeknownst to Sarah/Lester. He could then build upon her character development as the story moves forward.
Heck, if the author wanted to keep Lester in control as the evil conductor, he could have had Lester looking up while fucking Sarah, and noticing the end of Renee's orgasm and her fleeing back to her bedroom. Lester saw her, but Renee doesn't know he did. The author then could develop the future story that way. Instead of either of those 2 paths (or any number of others), we get a pseudo mother-daughter dirty toilet glory hole slutfest. No bueno.
This chapter touches on this development with Renee, but not nearly enough. For old-school Renee to give in to her secret desires is one thing. But, to do so in a dirty public bathroom toilet stall? Yeah, pretty silly stuff. In the end, the glory hole in the dirty dive bar bathroom ruined it for me.
...and the chapter ended prematurely. It felt more like half a chapter, or 2/3rds of one.
P.S. Sarah is a vile character. Her discussion with Dan in the beginning was awful.
It seems like continuity is a constant issue. Didn't Sarah just lose her job a night or 2 before? And their credit cards are already maxed out?