Toxic Attraction DonSilver #Cuckold 8muses forum
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DISAPPOINTED BIG TIME..what should have picked up arriving back at the apartment after the theater
Now has turned into a farce...Sarah fucking Otis made no sense..being caught by Mary and new hires..bye bye job
And kids..come on..fucking with Dad banging on door and ,Mo.no sense..31 could have been major confrontation
With Dan..l Ester Sarah...Unless we have a Bobby Ewing shower scene we're 31 was a total dream and didn't happen..story is cooked
Now has turned into a farce...Sarah fucking Otis made no sense..being caught by Mary and new hires..bye bye job
And kids..come on..fucking with Dad banging on door and ,Mo.no sense..31 could have been major confrontation
With Dan..l Ester Sarah...Unless we have a Bobby Ewing shower scene we're 31 was a total dream and didn't happen..story is cooked
I found the sex scene that close to dad ridiculous as well. Would have been much better if instead of Lester demanding a kiss, he was demanding one more sex session. Sarah knows that crazy so she puts on her charm and pushes him on the bed and kisses him sensually. She then promises him much more when they see each other soon. That would advance their relationship and intimacy instead of a useless sex scene that lasted for a minute
I love your idea, although I understand why DS went that way: she was emotionally low at that moment . Your idea made me realize, when was the last time Sarah initiated the flirting? Back in DnD game,? Back during Vernon encounter? It was always Lester.
I liked some of the initial dialogue between her and otis, it reminded me of the strong and smart Sarah from the earlier chapters. Made me wonder, what if this chapter ended with Sarah and Otis manage to hide just in time, escaping their fate and accidentally managing to thwart Lester's plan for once.
BTW when I read that wall sex scene (ridiculous as it was) I was reminded of
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with Yvonne Strahovski (My favorite Sarah comp)Sounds interesting. I've never seen SVU, everything I know about that show is from memes (we are more of NCIS household). Nevertheless, I'm always open for a good crime drama. Can't wait to read it.
King_Gonta
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This chapter was really disappointing in the sene Ds i just inst trying anymore .he is after easy money
Rest I loved the opening scene regarding cavefires and the inclusion of Sarahs mothers and her coming under the peephole as some sort of coming under Lesters bad curse
There is a thing in this story that Silver wants to bring out is Lester being a bad omen of some sort some evil like force of nature which corrupts
Rest I loved the opening scene regarding cavefires and the inclusion of Sarahs mothers and her coming under the peephole as some sort of coming under Lesters bad curse
There is a thing in this story that Silver wants to bring out is Lester being a bad omen of some sort some evil like force of nature which corrupts
I am making sure I have written it completely...it's a stream of consciousness thing...and then will release chapters, but no waiting longer than promised for the reader as it will be completely written before the first chapter is released.
Now, hopefully Neighborhood Encounters...although, if no one posts, it will most likely be like last month, the new alpha chapter with 31 and NE.
Plenty of people stay with weak people. Most people are weak. The fact both of them are putting their family and children at risk for no compelling emotional reason is beyond weak.
You are, if not completely correct, very, very, very close Welliver is awesome and really fucked with my head when he appeared on SVU as a rich serial rapist, while he was playing Bosch.
Oh, Bosch books are excellent too!
Neighborhood Encounters 4 final .
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Verisimilinude
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Agreed, the final didn't change my opinion much, only the first half of it was worth reading. The only thing added was the changing clothes scene. I totally believe that Lester would try something like that, but there is no way that Sarah would have allowed that to happen, or at least the original Sarah.
I don't recall if this was in the original, but I'm confused. Where were the daughters? And I thought the whole reason Dan and Sarah drove to Chicago in the first place was because Sarah's parent's lived in Chicago. But in the 31 final he wrote that Sarah's parents live in Middleton. Sarah could have stayed home and had dinner with them in Middleton.
Please explain: what does Otis have to do with the initial cuckold story?
Her reactions and reasons are childish.
If you exclude Otis and some other characters, it makes no difference to the story.
isn't the idea that Sarah's parents wanted to see the apartment where Dan has been living during the week? which sounds stupid - why would they care? and where were the daughters in all this? have to agree with other comments here that DS is just phoning this in and the plotlines are getting more ridiculous with each new chapter.
Verisimilinude
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Nope my bad...
Not when they were supposed to be packing up his life in Chicago. Not when he would be leaving Sarah alone here. He wished her parents weren’t coming, so she could just drive home and leave this behind. But now they wanted to make a weekend out of this. And Dan needed to keep what was now his main client happy. [opening from chapter 29]
However it creates a new plot error. If her parent's were coming to Chicago to help him pack up his life in Chicago then they'd already know he was suspended/fired. So they wouldn't have been surprised by the "bomb" that Lester dropped over dinner.
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You are correct that it could have been a cuckold story without involving anyone other than the main three characters. However there are several narrative reasons for them.
- it shows the reader how Lester is taking over and controlling Sarah
- it exposes Sarah to different sexual themes (hard to have a threesome (if Dan is sitting in the corner) without two other guys
- it illustrates for Sarah's character that Lester is dominant and that she won't be able to push him around like she does with Dan
Having said that, DS (imo) has gone overboard with some of the other scenarios. I've stated before those scenes could have been 1 or 2 page entries and then moved on and still established the narrative objectives above. This is the crux of the issue that divides the readership; the money grab camp thinks he's doing it to rake in more money, the I want more partners camp, enjoy it because they like the variety. Neither camp is wrong to have their opinions, but it does create issues.
This is what troubles me the most. In an ideal world, author's would have an idea for a story they want to tell and they write that story to the best of their ability. However the reality is we all need to eat, pay bills, etc., and sometimes profit outweighs what's best for the story and they are seduced by paying customers to add things to the story not originally intended.