VN Ren'Py Tribulations of a Mage [v0.30.0] [Talothral]

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professorx10

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"Then they prayed on it and made some sacrifices and sometime ater they became all wobbly."
lowercase "L" is missing.

also "Speaking of you cloud trick, we need to talk." s/b "your"?

Later at the tower
Satya
"I never known my parents..." Should be "I never knew my parents..." or I've never known my parents..."

and later when Satya says "But no, we don't have just us. We have all of you." is the "all" transposed intentionally? ...it's normally "We all have you." ??

sorry if this is not the place to offer spelling corrections. I was supporting another Dev doing English corrections and Since I like this story and dev so much I'd like to help it be even better.

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professorx10 said:
"Then they prayed on it and made some sacrifices and sometime ater they became all wobbly."
lowercase "L" is missing.
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Wouldn't it be after, not alter?

professorx10 said:
and later when Satya says "But no, we don't have just us. We have all of you." is the "all" transposed intentionally? ...it's normally "We all have you." ??
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I read it as Satya saying the nagas now have the whole group Tomas had been traveling with, as opposed to just referring to Tomas. So it could be intentional.
 
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So when's the MC gonna fuck his cat? I mean he's already fucked just about everyone and everything else including that hot fairy, and his buddy prob has dibs on the centaurs so his cat is just about the only one left still a virgin.
 
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69Creampie said:
So when's the MC gonna fuck his cat? I mean he's already fucked just about everyone and everything else including that hot fairy, and his buddy prob has dibs on the centaurs so his cat is just about the only one left still a virgin.
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I don't recall seeing a beastiality tag. Altho. That said. I'm not against the familliar growing into a neko. Even if it's just temporarily.
 
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Your point of view is understandable. The difference is I see harem games as cheating by having multiple lovers, and if the girls are all okay and happy about the situation, it throws any realism or drama for a good story right out the window. There's no sense of accomplishment if everything is handed to you without some struggle or work involved.
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You also forget that this is fantasy world, where powerful and important people are basically expected to have multiple wives, to ensure that their line continues. It's a cultural thing in the world and people in many places grow to even expect it from those in power. MC rising to the position of archmage would constitute him being also in that kind of position, especially with how the world is progressing. Also Talothral is good in writing that there are issues that people in the harem have with it, and with each other, during the story, that are dealt with during the storyline. Also it's not that everything is handed to you if you go for all LIs, there's multiple decisions you have to take to reach the point where multiple LIs are all ok being with you simultaneously.

Not to mention that having multiple wives is beneficial also for the partners in the scenario of the game, they have more people they can safely rely on without having to worry about potential betrayals. There's multiple options for training their own children, since many of the other future wives have different expertises around the field of magic, or other important skills like thievery, so they can guarantee that their kids will receive the best possible education. Also with multiple wives there's always someone around the kids, that has more vested interest in their well being than any hired nanny would have. These are all points of views the LIs themselves point out during the game in their discussions about the issue of having to share MC with others.
 
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Sometimes the MC is just such a doormat in his exchanges with others. Way too accommodating. This seemingly unimportant exchange as an example:

MC: And make peace with Ayaka.
Aria: I'll think about it.
MC: That's all I ask.

No that's not what you asked! Why retreat from your own request like that?! How about expecting more from people you treat more than fairly? The correct reply here would have been ''You can do better than that!''. You have to act like a leader for people to treat you like one.
 
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LinkBox88 said:
Sometimes the MC is just such a doormat in his exchanges with others. Way too accommodating. This seemingly unimportant exchange as an example:

MC: And make peace with Ayaka.
Aria: I'll think about it.
MC: That's all I ask.

No that's not what you asked! Why retreat from your own request like that?! How about expecting more from people you treat more than fairly? The correct reply here would have been ''You can do better than that!''. You have to act like a leader for people to treat you like one.
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Yeah no. MC approaches these things diplomatically, he doesn't take sides and thus reduces the chances that there's resentment that remains. Basically he is trying to be unbiased arbitrator between the arguing sides. Him trying to force them to make peace will only backfire in the long run, since it would not lead to real peace between them. With this approach he makes them honestly think about the petty feud they have and actually trying to put themselves in each others place. And the fact that he isn't imposing himself on others like that is why there's so much loyalty towards him from his companions.
 
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HentaiKami said:
Yeah no. MC approaches these things diplomatically, he doesn't take sides and thus reduces the chances that there's resentment that remains. Basically he is trying to be unbiased arbitrator between the arguing sides. Him trying to force them to make peace will only backfire in the long run, since it would not lead to real peace between them. With this approach he makes them honestly think about the petty feud they have and actually trying to put themselves in each others place. And the fact that he isn't imposing himself on others like that is why there's so much loyalty towards him from his companions.
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I don't agree. The same approach will not work with everyone. You give some people an inch and they will take a mile. Even diplomats must assert themselves when the situation calls for it. I think it's quite dangerous for a ruler to allow his requests and decisions to be dismissed as suggestions that can be ignored.

It's true his ways have made him popular but I'm not sure that equals being wise. I don't think he's getting the most out of his people. Many of his followers would also say that he takes too many risks, especially to himself. They would welcome him asking more of them rather then to put even more on his shoulders.

The whole world's fate is at stake here. Using a light touch might spell humanity's doom.
 
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LinkBox88 said:
Sometimes the MC is just such a doormat in his exchanges with others. Way too accommodating. This seemingly unimportant exchange as an example:

MC: And make peace with Ayaka.
Aria: I'll think about it.
MC: That's all I ask.

No that's not what you asked! Why retreat from your own request like that?! How about expecting more from people you treat more than fairly? The correct reply here would have been ''You can do better than that!''. You have to act like a leader for people to treat you like one.
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Yeah, Tal's protagonists are known for being doormats....... :FacePalm:
 
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LinkBox88 said:
Even diplomats must assert themselves when the situation calls for it.
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Diplomats stop being diplomatic when they are okay with starting a war and secure in their believe that the other side can't do anything about it.

i personally wouldn't want different mages having a go at each other inside my home, if i could avoid that.
Also i dont see MC wanting to blast them both when it comes to that.
 
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