I read the whole thing yesterday and it certainly was nice, visually as well. Shame it'll take until late spring or early summer for a continuation but I understand why.
Perhaps for the purpose of constructive criticism a few things could be remarked though and I'm adding my first impressions in general.
My only complaint with .1 is the lack of player agency. I think there was all of 5 prompts, 3 of which were a game.
It seems like there was some prime choices for the MC to have the option to choose what they wanted to do. Ex Go to the dance room with partner or go stargazing. As it stands you're kinda forced into doing activities with characters. You still get the chance to deny the stargazing character later sure, but seems kinda weird that you can just ignore it all together.
Promising start, the only two main criticisms so far for me are:
1. The lack of choices. Hopefully this is more because 0.1 is for introduction, and that the choices in the future are not strictly have sex or not. I'm not expecting full on multiple branches, but it'd be nice to have differences between choices that would lead to short/small scenes.
2. Dialogue can sometime feels a bit dragging. Somewhat understandable because 0.1 is for introduction so there's quite a lot of things that need to be front-loaded so we can quickly know who's who and what's what. But I think the writing could be tightened a bit more.
Definitely looking forward to the next update to see how the show will play out.
I agree with these posts in their entirety. I regret if that's the intention and what to expect for future updates, but it felt a little too kinetic to me. No matter how good the writing is (and it is), I'll be hoping for more things to do and to shape my own MC. I think the options during the game were a nice touch and a good illustration of the fact you don't need major story altering choices per se (unless... they did?) or "perv on X" type of choices to make them meaningful. I'd like to see more of those if you please. You could have made us pick rooms, brief conversational options or variations of catching or dancing with Maya for instance. Just a few ideas off the top of my head.
Cool stuff,excelent story with minor defects. Plenty of possibilites for side stories,but my main concern is Harem oriented scenario. All 7 of them seems to be looking for love,serious relationship,doesn't fit with scenario. None of the girls seem to be willing the share the partner if they go for MC like only options unless some of them discover lesbianism. With cameras all around,one month time to have for it, I'm not seeing how that will happen. Dev choose all kind of different personality,but none of them look like loose woman who will fit in all of that. On contrary,they look more to be hurt if he sleeps around.
I like how dev choose each peronality(minus poor guy without dick,that's overboard,lol) with rich life story and I really hope this VN will continue to have progress based on reality and not some ridiculous change of scenario if dev gets stuck with creativity.
I agree with this poster that I don't see how the show host's intent is going to work out except for ending in tears and knees to the crotch, making MC wish he was Richard instead (on that note, does he still have his nuts since it was specified it was the cranial penetration that made him asexual?
Not sure I wanna know, poor guy). Blondie (Evelyn? Sorry, it's been a day and she wasn't my fave
) already stressed she hated being cheated on and she'd informed the other women involved before at which point my MC suffered from a sudden sense of high morality when she offered to put out right away on the first night.
Regarding the same woman, I was confused that she was supposed to be "older" because already from the previews it seems to me you're going for a somewhat Asian style (when the teacher was revealed to be I was like: you of all people? Then how about the others?) where everyone looks young and girlish. That's an observation and not a criticism or anything that I expect to change.
On Maya... She's too cute and innocent to an idealistic degree (like, the opposite of my friends back then
) and while the time spent with her was enjoyable, I kinda feel bad for her for ending up in the situation as it's supposed to unfold.
It's perhaps weird but the one I find most relatable, yet intriguing, and who I want to get to know is Diana. She looks fancy and like she's got her stuff together, but she's seemingly turned herself invisible and needs to discover herself and what she wants apart from getting out of her parents' house and slaving away. Seems like her serious and silent attitude is a defense mechanism and she didn't even mention relationships during her intro. Pretty eyes as well and her taste in jewelry is interesting.
I haven't posted a lot nor read many VNs since at least last summer, but I hope my first impressions are worth something nonetheless.
I’m a full-time university student in my 3rd year and as such, I still have to focus on writing my BA Thesis until June, which means that I can’t work on the game full-time yet.
Can I ask what about in vague terms if the subject is a little too specific for people with access to the same databases?
Anyway, good luck.
