VN Ren'Py UFO [Ch.3 v0.6.7] [17MOONKEYS]

[VN..reader]

Its just expectations of UFOs doing UFO things were raised. But it seems to be mostly vanilla and robot girls if Im understanding?

Thats totally fine it just seems like the UFO part isnt adding to the game. Maybe add some abducting cows for food just for thematic value? Edit Or maybe low gravity sex.

ooooh... Low gravity sex...., could be very dangerous with the 'assets' at hand . motorboating head sized melons in zero G...

 

[Seewolf]

More criticism

It's quite early for some decent criticism, since your VN is short for the time being. The plot is hilarious and this seems like a lighthearted fun game so far.

There isn't that much plot, yet, to criticize. So I'll talk about content. You already provided a huge list of possible future content. One advice, whatever you'll do, make it avoidable or skippable, because some fetishes like furry, sissification, futa/trans, NTR and many more might not be enjoyable for everyone.

Since the mc is drugged with SpermoGen and Aisha with MilkoGen, I thought immediately about future pregnancy content. But it's only on the "may be" list. I guess a lot of people had the same thought, so this should definitively be in the game. Then, will android sex bots become pregnant as well, maybe by an upgrade, the mc may find during his space adventure? Whatever, but also some other people might not enjoy preggo content, so again make it avoidable.

Unfortunately a "President Rump" was mentioned in Boobs City, former L.A. I don't see how this game might profit from political skits of any sort, especially if these aren't genuinely unique or fresh, but stale. Worst of all would be, if these were completely one-sided, if you really have to bring politics into your game. Since most likely you already have a personal political opinion, it's almost impossible to really stay neutral, which most likely will lead to very one-sided jokes, which will please one side, but alienate the other of the political spectrum. Do you really want that for your game?

Trump jokes becoming old and left leaning persons don't want to laugh about a senile puppet president Biden, who can't even finish a complete sentence, without strong medication. You see, there is a dilemma already, if you include a Trump caricature, but don't dish out against the other side of the political spectrum, too, which then might ruin the game experience for many.

As a developer I'd keep politics or political references out of my game. Otherwise you might alienate people, who otherwise might enjoy your game and support you at some point. I'd say, keep it lighthearted, hilarious and fun and leave politics out of your game. Just my honest advice, since you asked for criticism.

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

But it seems to be mostly vanilla and robot girls if Im understanding?

Yeah

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

Edit Or maybe low gravity sex.

Great idea! added it here:

Maybe low gravity sex.

 

[some0ne_9]

I loved all the star trek references like the MC name and the ship.
it looks promising and I like the MC young like he is and hope you won't age him up.
Hopefully the game will have more content and animations.

 

[PPLayer]

oh ... almost forgot: *.png = bad -> lossless *.jpg/webp = better
(settings of jpg/webp to 100% imagequality (lossless) - mostly the standart setting for jpg/webp is 90% (lossy quality))
Helps immense to keep the game smaller - better for you -> less time to upload ... and better for us -> less time to download^^
Without sacrificing noticable image quality

*.webp is usable in layered images like *.png - just in case you wanna use layered images

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

I am interested in this project; how frequently will you update this game and how far do you plane to work on this until complete?

I work on a project every single day, in the next update I want to add a lot of content and plot. This update is very small, I just fixed a lot of bugs.

 

[Markuss]

If I can help I'd be happy to

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

low gravity sex

Really great idea! Thanks

 

[Rectory]

I work on a project every single day, in the next update I want to add a lot of content and plot. This update is very small, I just fixed a lot of bugs.

Whatever you do, please dont give us blueballs. And preferably, please keep MC as the only male.

 

[VN..reader]

This one is painful for me personally lol. I want to try it so bad... but unfortunately I'm afflicted with a personal disgust for hairy bushes, to the point where that single thing is a hard stop for me. Which is a shame, because everything else in it looks so hot!

Btw that is not me knocking bushes, or people who like them. To each their own. Different strokes and all that. People can each have their own individual and unique turn ons and turn offs, even if they might seem silly to others. And that just sadly happens to be one of my biggest personal offs, to the point where it actually makes me gag haha. But nonetheless I wanted to compliment the dev on everything else in the screenshots and wish them luck with their game. Cheers.

REALLY!?!? makes you Gag?? but you're a SLOTH! All Hairy like...
but seriously, good words .

 

[no_name_742]

feedback:
i really like her hairy and thicc how we see more girls like that or at the very least keep the variety. (similar to my previous feedback)

This is only the second patch ive played of this game but please add more content. this isnt me whining that there isnt enough content but rather take some time and make a decent size patch. not sure if this is a regular thing for you development, if you intend is doing this for advertising or research as to what people want thats fine otherwise i personally will always prefer a dev that takes time to create enough content per release rather then 30 seconds of content per release.

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

Unfortunately a "President Rump" was mentioned in Boobs City, former L.A. I don't see how this game might profit from political skits of any sort, especially if these aren't genuinely unique or fresh, but stale. Worst of all would be, if these were completely one-sided, if you really have to bring politics into your game. Since most likely you already have a personal political opinion, it's almost impossible to really stay neutral, which will most likely will lead to very one-sided jokes, which will please one side, but alienate the other of the political spectrum. Do you really want that for your game?

Trump jokes becoming old and left leaning persons don't want to laugh about a senile puppet president Biden, who can't even finish a complete sentence, without strong medication. You see, there is a dilemma already, if you include a Trump caricature, but don't dish out against the other side of the political spectrum, too, which then might ruin the game experience for many.

As a developer I'd keep politics or political references out of my game. Otherwise you might alienate people, who otherwise might enjoy your game and support you at some point. I'd say, keep it lighthearted, hilarious and fun and leave politics out of your game. Just my honest advice, since you asked for criticism.

I think you are right, I should reconsider this. Thank you for opening my eyes. I myself am very politicized and I should not bring this into the game.

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

It's quite early for some decent criticism, since your VN is short for the time being. The plot is hilarious and this seems like a lighthearted fun game so far.

There isn't that much plot, yet, to criticize. So I'll talk about content. You already provided a huge list of possible future content. One advice, whatever you'll do, make it avoidable or skippable, because some fetishes like furry, sissification, futa/trans, NTR and many more might not be enjoyable for everyone.

Since the mc is drugged with SpermoGen and Aisha with MilkoGen, I thought immediately about future pregnancy content. But it's only on the "may be" list. I guess a lot of people had the same thought, so this should definitively be in the game. Then, will android sex bots become pregnant as well, maybe by an upgrade, the mc may find during his space adventure? Whatever, but also some other people might not enjoy preggo content, so again make it avoidable.

Unfortunately a "President Rump" was mentioned in Boobs City, former L.A. I don't see how this game might profit from political skits of any sort, especially if these aren't genuinely unique or fresh, but stale. Worst of all would be, if these were completely one-sided, if you really have to bring politics into your game. Since most likely you already have a personal political opinion, it's almost impossible to really stay neutral, which most likely will lead to very one-sided jokes, which will please one side, but alienate the other of the political spectrum. Do you really want that for your game?

Trump jokes becoming old and left leaning persons don't want to laugh about a senile puppet president Biden, who can't even finish a complete sentence, without strong medication. You see, there is a dilemma already, if you include a Trump caricature, but don't dish out against the other side of the political spectrum, too, which then might ruin the game experience for many.

As a developer I'd keep politics or political references out of my game. Otherwise you might alienate people, who otherwise might enjoy your game and support you at some point. I'd say, keep it lighthearted, hilarious and fun and leave politics out of your game. Just my honest advice, since you asked for criticism.

In general, very useful feedback.

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

If I can help I'd be happy to

How would you like to help?

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

How about repeatable pregnancy?

I think about it but I'm not sure

 

[House Of Black]

Some of these tags scare the shit out of me sissification, tentacles, traps? Too much dip for my chips.

 

[Deleted member 3994251]

blueballs

What do you mean?

 

[Rectory]

What do you mean?

I mean blueballing.. u know teasing.. when you are so much hungry, but someone taking food just when it is getting near to the mouth..

 

[sandstone7734]

It Will Be:

- Corruption [Corrupting someone's mind robbing them of their purity/innocence.]
- Creampie [Internal ejaculation, either vaginal or anal.]
- Futa/Trans [A woman with both male and female genitals or just male genitals. Or a trans character.]
- Group sex [Sex act involving 3 or more people.]
- Handjob [Masturbating another person's penis.]
- Interracial [Sex act between 2 or more people of different races.]
- Lesbian [Sex act between two or more females.]
- Male Domination [Used when a character submits to a male character via domination.]
- Masturbation [Self-pleasuring by hand or with toys.]
- Oral Sex [Sexual act involving the stimulation of the genitalia using the mouth.]
- Sex Toys [Any kind of toy that is used for sexual purposes.]
- Teasing [Used when a character teases another another, either by seduction or via sex.]
- Titfuck [The act of thrusting a penis (or similar object) in between breasts.]
- Transformation [A sequence showing a physical, biological change of some kind.]
- Vaginal sex [Penetrating the vagina, (sex toys, tentacles, etc).]
- Virgin [Sex act involving virgins and the loss of virginity.]

It May Be:

- Animated [Used in combination with 2DCG/3DCG/Real Porn when a CG is animated.]
- Anal Sex [Penetrating the anus, (sex toys, tentacles, etc).]
- Ahegao [Used when a character displays a orgasm face with her tongue sticking out.]
- Multiple Penetration [Sexual penetration involving 2+ penis/toys into multiple holes or same holes.]
- Exhibitionism [Nudity or daring stunts with a risk of getting caught by strangers. Also blatant exposure to strangers.]
- Female domination [Used when a character submits to a female character via domination.]
- Furry [Anthropomorphic animal (Not to be confused with monster or humans with animal ears/tails).]
- Groping [Sex act involving groping anothers body.]
- Harem [1 person being courted by at least 3 others, all engaging in consensual sex simultaneously.]
- Humiliation [Humiliating/degrading a person in a sexual manner generally in-front of others.]
- Pregnancy [The act of impregnating a woman or having sex with a pregnant one.]
- Prostitution [The act of soliciting sex in exchange for money.]
- Sissification [Dressing a submissive partner as a woman and/or encouraging/training to act in a feminine manner.]
- Spanking [Spanking someone's butt as torture or for sexual pleasure.]
- Stripping [The act of taking ones clothes off usually in exchange for money in-front of an audience.]
- Tentacles [Tentacle Monster using tendrils for sexual purposes. (Does not classify as Monster).]
- Trap [Usually men in women's clothing, but may also be the other way around.]

Your Ideas:

- Asslicking.
- Corruption: My imagination of Aisha being corrupted into a exhibitionist sex nanny/maid/etc. makes this appealing.
- What about netori? When the MC steals someone elses girl
- Especially corrupting the little guy into a sissy and a few lady dongs for him to play with.
- Include in the female domination: facesitting and forced orgasm
- Maybe low gravity sex.

I liked it, It's fresh and wide open for development.