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I spotted the "brutal murder" repetition and decided to try and help, so I came up with a few suggestions for your Game Summary text:
And did you mean "Odessey" or "Odyssey" for the city name?
Good luck with your game, the VN world always can use some more clever procedural thrillers
You could swap out "chief of police" with "police department" if there is no character like that in the game.A series of brutal murders in the city of Odessey has thrown the police department into disarray. The victims, five of them, were each found slain in cruel and bloody circumstances, and the killer remains at large. With no apparent common motive and no clues to go on investigations have ground to a halt, while the Chief of Police comes under growing pressure from the City government.
Enter Detective Nicole, a brilliant and strikingly beautiful investigator with a sharp mind and a fiery spirit. Will Nicole and her police colleagues be able to apprehend the murderer, or will she become entangled in a web of deceit? Take control and put yourself in Nicole's shoes to find out the truth and save the city from an unknown serial killer.
And did you mean "Odessey" or "Odyssey" for the city name?
Good luck with your game, the VN world always can use some more clever procedural thrillers
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