The MC calls his mother by her name. That's a Huge sign of disrespect where I come
from. Shows that he didn't really care for her all that much. The sisters call her mother, though.
Around here, if you do that you'll likely get knocked up side the head.... lol
Course, I'm also not too far into the story yet.
Great job in handling the mother's/Melony's
demise. Just enough for us to know what happened
but not having to see it.
Not sure how much further I'm going to make it....the 'camera' zooming in
and out while I'm trying to read is making me a bit nauseous.