VN Ren'Py Warzone [Ch.1] [Bonzo76]

[circuitarity]

Hopefully constructive notes:
The pictures generally look like everyone has a stick up their bum as the move around or even lift an arm to signal "Throw it in the back"
In the military most teams are very relaxed and speak easily to each other so when MC says "is there coffee?" and Pete says "Yeah, we have just made some." (I have stopped the game to make this post right at this point) it sounds more like he is saying "Look around carefully, there is some big issue happening". If you are not a English as a first language person this is a perfect translation and not badly written, it is just to formal for friends and teammates a better response would be "Yeah, we just made some" which only sounds ridiculous for an instant but the formality would not be so rigid in a small squad like that.

Edit: FYI Solider would be something that is more solid as opposed to Soldier which would be a member of the armed forces.

 

[Aristos]

Sigh... The preview pics of any game's thread must be capable of luring us into trying it.
The 4 previews in here aren't exactly what I would find alluring.
PS: Preview pics are free!

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

I like it. There's good potential here.

Spoiler: Non-canon humor

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[Thedude715]

Kinetic novel tag should be added...

 

[Kuokaman]

Will it be kinetic or are some choices planned?

 

[Mellt]

Game got potential. Good start clear story no questions without great introductions.
Need some visual improvements for certain situations, like thinking, speaking, whispering and so on.
Transition of scenes sometimes to fast. From Coffemaking to plan making to driving to target in 3 pics.
but i guess there is some more content in planing.
The story is a bit too fast pace and there are also some minor Spelling errors.
A lot of Backgroundstorys are missing for my taste.