Rift Studios solid game you have here but its pretty rough about some edges.
you have a couple missing words here and there you didn't capitalize all the names.
in the photo hunt in Nicole's house if you grab the photo in the bed room it doesn't show the photo but it shows the "to be continued render" which stays in the background afterwards because it flashes up every time you change location in the house afterwards.
that Ashley is the daughter of Mia isn't properly explained i did wonder why MC comes to this conclusion only because Ashley worked for 4 years at the cafe.
If you play without femdom Mia doesn't ask the MC about being disappointed that Ashley didn't show up because that only happens in the femdom route but MC still answers as if he was asked.
you are using the interim screens like carped bombs which leaves the story feeling disjointed at times you should replay the game and look if the screen is needed at that time or if it could be solved with a bit of more text i really just wrote down a few instances at the end of the game after i decided to comment on it but there are many more. My examples are:
1)Kat and MC in the Kitchen after she stayed the night. they talk > cut > they stand in the exact same position and go "what do you plan doing today" the cut you use is a hard cut that indicates in TV and Film that a lot of time is skipped if its just a few moments or a quick commute to work they use soft cuts and fades to indicate that only a bit of time is skipped. what you did there feels jarring AF and could be solved by a simple text on the same render "after some small talk with Kat" or let them talk a bit about what happened the night before according to choices made. If you go both or rom she could say she is happy that MC still is sexually interested in her despite the vulnerability she presented to him. when you chose fuck she could rile him up a bit flesh out her character after a pivotal moment she had.
2)Angela is bunking with MC and asks him a like 4-5 questions, MC starts answering the first 2 questions > hard cut > MC answers the last question. The cut indicates that MC was ranting for hours. Maybe its better if you just let it play out without cut. Great moment to character built both of em and connect.
Another thing that could do with a once over is the stammering the MC is doing constantly. He acts assertive and knows what he is doing flirting with girls and taking the lead in the encounters they have and in the next second he is a stammering idiot because a girl is talking to him. The MC is really good but that flip flopping when it happens is jarring as if he has a split personality.
could you explain a bit more what your plans for femdom are? i dont mind spoilers. Because if Mia is a Lezdom dominating other women but bowing to a MC who is doming her in the future, that is something i would have great interest in. Far to few games that do stuff like that. Femdom towards the MC is something i despise on the other hand.
