Zenithtb

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Opening scenes - "make do" not "make due".
Also, "Dainty" not "danty"
"Chelsey makes sure she looks fabulous, thought [though] it's the middle of the day"
 
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Again, just my two cents, but if you pay attention to the most popular of porn games, it's not all about sex. A lot of them are actually slow burn, but they focus on character development first, and sex later.

Get people to love your characters, and you've got a good formula to work with. :)
You have played the game right? The sex scenes aren't just the vapid pointless "sexy time" payoff you get at the end. The sex scenes are as important if not more so when it comes to character development. I try to hide what is going on but through the sex scenes alone you learn about the characters sexuality. However, I've worked very hard to adhere to hide these revelations. Sure, I could have had Molly simply say that she likes being cuckolded and that she wants her husband to cheat on her, or I can show that by having her masturbating to the fantasy of that happening. Not only is it more enjoyable to watch, but it is also far more effective than if I had just had Molly say it but never really act on it to demonstrate that it turns her on. In other words: "show don't tell."

At first I wasn't really trying to do something in paricular, I simply wrote a plausible development, but looking back, never telling the reader outright what I am trying to convey to them but instead showing them being turned on and/or fantasizing about something was probably a smarter way to do it. Which is why that method never changed in season 2, what looks like simple sex scenes is actually moments where the plot is most focused on character building through subtle hints and variations in actions.

I want people to learn about my characters based on their actions rather than me telling them.
 

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since MC and Molly's daughter go to the same school they teach at shouldn't their daughter already know what is going down by the secret student chat... even if their daughter had no clue about that, one student in the lower grades would have found it, gossiped it, and others verify it before probably brutally bullying their daughter. Is this an eventual story plot?
Will any of the students disgusted or upset by this snitch them out in the future?

I am really asking because I like plot driven stories and was wondering if we were going to get big time plot points or if the plot is more of an excuse for sexy time.
She's like 8. A bit to early to know or care about that
 

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She's like 8. A bit to early to know or care about that
ughh the parents used the student discussion board for the school not a hook up site, granted it is supposed to be the 'secret' one, only the students use but all the students except the literal blind girl knew about it so far and I remember school there was always the one kid with and older sibling or just that one kid that always got into shit that just blew everyone else's mind.
 

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So, both usages essentially mean the same thing, and both can be used as a synonym for adequate, despite do being a verb and due being an adjective. Okay, then...

Still seems wrong to me, but whatever. Who am I to argue with the 2+2=5 crowd? :ROFLMAO:

Good night, Zenith. :)
I mean only 1 in 10 people use due and its considered an error but is accepted just because of how common it occurs, much like how irregardless is now a word
 

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I don't use irregardless, but DUE and DO have completely different meanings and have completely different usages.

Due is an adjective while do is a transitive verb. The verb in the example sentence is actually "forced" not "due," nor would it be "do," which would be incorrect despite being the more "accepted" usage. Though, I explained that already. No one has actually given me an example of how I'm actually wrong other than to say grammarly says so, when I don't trust grammarly for two seconds and neither should anyone, really. Only thing that shit is good for is to claim the rights to your IP if you happen to use it to check your spelling/grammar, as written in their TOS. I heard they supposedly changed it because people actually read the fucking thing and got really angry about it, but that used to be the case at least.

Anyway, I've said that I disagree and I've made an actual case for why I think it's wrong. I shouldn't have gotten involved with this because it's useless. No one listens to reason, and no one actually gives me any reasons for why I'm wrong aside from grammarly and the internet say so, which can be very wrong.

Also, thread has gotten off-topic with this stuff, so best this subject be dropped and get back on topic. (y)
i mean there is also the Cambridge dictionary

online free dictionary that lists idioms and also cites world sources


"make do" in English is something called a 'verb phrase' it falls in the same category as "shut up" and "settle down" so the act of trying to split the two words apart to analyze them is pointless as the words together make the meaning, shut and up have their own definitions which make no sense in combination, but together it makes a phrase that acts as a verb
 
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last page and a half its about grammar ...now tbh i stopped caring which one is the correct one ....how about you guys move on to messages?and leave this topic for the game and not which one of you is right ...that's just my oppinion
 

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last page and a half its about grammar ...now tbh i stopped caring which one is the correct one ....how about you guys move on to messages?and leave this topic for the game and not which one of you is right ...that's just my oppinion
You're right, I'm out. (y)
 

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last page and a half its about grammar ...now tbh i stopped caring which one is the correct one ....how about you guys move on to messages?and leave this topic for the game and not which one of you is right ...that's just my oppinion
some people just want to watch the world burn... or maybe they are bored to the point of a mental break down.

meanwhile I'm just sitting here thinking "I wish the game will have sounds or music one day, and maybe a few really short cute girls wouldn't hurt" because you know, the entire focus should be on the god damn game XD
 

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Not a fan of sound or music in vns but each to their own.
I get what you are saying, I've seen it done horribly, but I also see games doing it to a near perfect atmosphere that just adds so much to the H scenes. without sounds or music it is almost lifeless and far less exiting, unless ofc maybe you are adding your own sounds and music.
 

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I get what you are saying, I've seen it done horribly, but I also see games doing it to a near perfect atmosphere that just adds so much to the H scenes. without sounds or music it is almost lifeless and far less exiting, unless ofc maybe you are adding your own sounds and music.
Touche' I do honestly use my own music while playing. I probably break down and try a vn or twos sounds on but it will not be for a while. As far as sounds they usually pull me out of the experience.
 
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I get what you are saying, I've seen it done horribly, but I also see games doing it to a near perfect atmosphere that just adds so much to the H scenes. without sounds or music it is almost lifeless and far less exiting, unless ofc maybe you are adding your own sounds and music.
What kind of music even goes with H scenes?
 

blackmasha

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What kind of music even goes with H scenes?
the more popular known games like corrupted kingdoms and and HS tutor/Solvalley School use almost the same music in their H scenes if I recall and it works really well. some people prefer moaning sounds and alike, if it's done properly and different enough for each female then ofc. these music tracks just really set the mood in a very high quality way. I can only speak for myself, but for a game that has such smooth animations, to not have sounds or music... I just wish it had at least one of these.
 
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