VN Ren'Py Whispers of Despair [v0.1.2] [Dark Destined Games]

[Valdazz]

Not bad so far, i like the mc already, he reminds me of...Me

 

[D.D.G]

Just finished playing, and I think it needs work in the spelling, grammar, and punctuation departments.
The story could be good; I just can't say much about it now.
The pauses and hesitations in dialogue are annoying. I know they're for dramatic effect, but they're annoying. It would be cool if there were something in the Renpy code to fix that.

Thank you for your comment. You are right about the spelling, grammar and punctuation departments , as my first language is not English. Although I tried to make the text perfect, it seems that it wasn't enough. Pauses between dialogues can be annoying, you're right. In the next update, I will remove the unnecessary pauses. Thank you for taking the time to play and comment. I hope you like the next update.

 

[CGPUK]

MC's face looks off. Not as bad as some i've seen but it may need some work. If it were me I'd widen the nose slightly and tone down the red on the lips a bit so it doesn't look like he has lipstick on. As for the eyes idk what would fix them but they look super feminine and don't fit the strong cheek bones and everything on the face.



Honestly this was exactly my first thought as well.

Stop complaining and put the lotion in the basket.

 

[Larry2000]

“I’ll steeeeeeeeeal you Joannnnnna”

The guy looks “unique” but as long as the girls are cute, I’m down. Though hope he isn’t a pervy dude or a complete asshole. Fingers crossed!

 

[WShatn]

Psycho Killer vibes

 

[leequiring]

One look at the MC and I understand the future "trans/gay" tag.

 

[CV3]

Cool, always wanted to play as my alcoholic lesbian aunt

 

[Patsy221]

Aside from all the face discussions, I'd like to draw attention to the liar's bar moment. There really should be some sort of TW or something in the description. It doesn't bother me but it might be triggering for people going through stuff.

 

[Beerus]

After playing this, you should really consider getting a spellchecker or use something to help with grammar and typos. I'm always down to explore psychological themes (especially psychological horror) in games, but the writing and script definitely needs a proofread! Good luck with this!

Spoiler: Edit, as I continue to play through this...

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[Ivarson]

The game looks very interesting. I'll try it

 

[Thedude715]

That first close up on the protagonists face I legit just laughed my ass of, Carrot Top in the house.

 

[J0K3RXXX]

Promising.