Excellent work, I love it.
Brief comment:
I haven't played the original version, but as far as I'm currently experiencing the refine version, I'm very satisfied with the plot, background and characters. Prostitution management is a good way to play. Compared with ordinary VN, it is more immersive and playable, which I am very willing to see. After all, we are not reading novels. In addition, I appreciate your use of background music and sound effects in the game, which is often ignored by producers. In general, I'm looking forward to the finished version of it, and I'm also looking forward to every update and addition of more gameplay.
Suggestions:
1. For the business part of prostitutes, I recommend the following games for reference: (1) alicesoft's はるうられ~校内赤線区域~ (2) ミッドナイトプレジャー's ビフレストの魔物娼館 (3) ゲームコロン's ウラレタウン. These games are both playful and pornographic masterpieces. I hope they will enlighten you.
2. For the part of Yujo, I think the はるうられ~校内赤線区域~ is a good reference object. In addition to the heroine and supporting actress who have a plot related to the protagonist, other women who are simply used to make money and maintain the operation of the prostitution hall can be set as public faces (the same face) or pure black contours to reduce the guilt of players when selling them (after all, there is no plot and no interaction, for players, they are just items).
3. In order to make the game more challenging, I suggest increasing the negative states that may occur to women tourists. For example, Yujo will be tired after continuous work, and mental breakdown will occur if they continue to work in a state of fatigue. For Yujo who do not use safety measures and shoot in a dangerous period, there is a risk of pregnancy, and Yujo who receive guests with sexually transmitted diseases will have the probability of suffering from sexually transmitted diseases, etc.
4. Similarly, for guests with different preferences, Yujo in different states can get different money bonuses. For example, some guests like to collapse, some guests like to be pregnant, and so on.
5. From my personal preference, I hope the author can add (1) body modification (tattoo, perforation, lactation, etc.). After all, Yujo belong to MC and MC can use them at will. (2) Perspective and H data statistics. This part can be used to display the training of Yujo, such as the percentage values of mouth, chest, genitals and buttocks. And the H data of the Yujo, such as the number of sex with MC, the number of receptions, the number of oral sex, and so on. This part can bring players more sense of achievement. (3) Complete pregnancy system. Considering the era background in the game, contraception is a relatively difficult thing. The game can shorten the total process of pregnancy and reduce the risk of pregnancy. At the same time, set a dangerous period for each female swimmer, and display the pregnancy probability of the day in percentage.
6. Since the background of this game is set in ancient Japan, there will be certain era limitations on the dress and hairstyle of the characters in the game. For example, the costumes and hairstyles of different characters in the game, as well as the etiquette of character communication (such as bowing, kneeling, etc.). As an East Asian, I have a natural sensitivity to this aspect. Of course, this is not a big problem. After all, ancient Japanese began to speak English
. I hope the author can polish this aspect well when you have time and energy, so as to make this work more representative.
7. Can we train three main female roles? I'm looking forward to seeing kisayo and nekomi being trained.
These are all my thoughts and suggestions at present. Thank you for reading to the end. Please forgive me for the possible language errors in the above, because I am not a native English player. I'm looking forward to seeing the finished version of this game as soon as possible and have supported you on patteron. I wish you all the best.