The writing is good. Real good, given how much I basically despise 4/5ths of cast as they are garbage people and the MC is equally as bad. I mean shit one of them shouldn't even be existing in the school still if it was anything remotely like real life (Fiona or w/e her name is) given that any institute that has a zero policy on violence would terminate anyone even associated with violence, even if they didn't instigate it.
I think this VN will require an extreme amount of suspended disbelief to think that any of those people would even function in a social setting or work as a team at all outside of Eve given that basically none of them are even remotely interested in playing or taking it seriously, moreoever you can't help anyone that doesn't want to be helped but again MC seems to just be railroading hero complex and it will somehow just "work" even though people in real life who are like these individuals would straight up never be able to be helped or made into an actual team.
Eve - Pretty good, probably the only individual that seems like she could make the team.
Zoe - Basically comes off as having a default mode of "what I say goes, end of story, you're beneath me" aswell as doesn't want anything to do with any of the other members, so that's fucked from the get-go. It also irks me that she absolutely knew who he is, is supposedly a fan but still basically just went "lol you quit after losing once you fucking pussy" when given her wealth and connections, she could have easily found out why he did so.
Lexi - Doesn't take herself seriously, has no qualms forcing herself on someone and has literally zero interest in playing. I personally don't really give a shit if she gets a train ran on her every second day if she would actually just be interested in playing the fucking sport.
Fiona - Either is in organized crime or has family members/friends in organized crime given that rumours rarely spring from nothing, also has an absolutely dogshit attitude, and also doesn't seem even remotely interested. And no I'm not taking into account what Lexi says because Fiona has just proven otherwise.
Saki - Not interested at all, contrarian kid on a tantrum so effectively impossible to deal with.
Honestly just pivot the game and take over basketball coaching instead. Rebecca & Anna are endless entertainment and Desiree is naive but atleast a kind person at the core. Will atleast make the game something other than "I CAN FIX HER" simulator when, 99.9% of the time, you cannot fix people like this.
I'll be keeping an eye on this simply because the writing is actually good, won't be able to suspend my disbelief enough to redeem any of the characters' traits though.
EDIT - I honestly think a lot of this would be alleviated if some of their personalities weren't so absurdly extreme and they atleast dropped a "maybe, I'll think about it" rather than basically reacting to the idea as if it was the bubonic plague, which is also where the suspension of disbelief starts to wane as if someone reacts to something like that, they're not going to go with it no matter what.
