- Aug 29, 2018
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For me, this is not a problem of dark or less dark. It s more a problem of pacing of the story. You have make shit happend but not all in the same time and not always bigger... one after another after another.Nope. I'm a fairly pathos-heavy writer, and this story started off fairly heavy because I wanted a deeper storyline than just "mc wanna bang all the chickz." I wanted antagonists, real threats, things to care and worry about.
Part of the story is transitioning from that heavier, darker theme into a lighter, more positive theme as you begin to help the girls solve their problems. I'm also planning a rework of Season 1 that is going to pull back on the negativity a bit and smooth that over, now that I'm more familiar with the AVN community. I wrote it like I would have written a novel, which I learned isn't what the typical AVN fan is looking for in a story.
It s not an all aventure story, it s also romance story, a fantastic story, a porn story, etc...
There is more to develop than just the problem with the stalker, the interdimensional traveler, or the mc fate. We also have world to explor, races to see and learn to know, girls to romance. I think you focus too much of problem and solving problem. it s the heart of a good book ok, you have too keep the reader hooked. But in a porn game good vibe, sex and romance are also good (if too much bad come at once the impact of it is lesser each time, and you frustrated the reader.). And not all the adventures have to be death threat... some argument with the LI, some mc struggle to choose a girl between another, etc... are also good, you write a romance game not a new indina jones. It's all about finding the right balance.
But i have to say this poor mc... have really a shitty live. And for now, it don t get really better at all. He just have some sex bonus...
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