I definitely could have structured that a bit better, but it still reads fine to me.
How does one exactly fire themselves?
As for proofreaders, that's not exactly something I can have with my update schedule sadly. I work pretty much non stop and cram as much in as I can in my weekly releases. I don't have the time to package it all up and send it to someone to read through.
Every bit of day 3 was done by me in 28 days, the posing, rendering, script, everything. So a few poorly structured sentences hopefully gets a pass from most players.